The Shot (449 hits)
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Submitted by grapefruit (View user info) at 2005-09-01 11:19:15 EDT
Tony focused his eyes onto his nose as a tiny drop of sweat trickled down. "Doesn't this guy have an air conditioner?" he thought. As he sat in the dark in his brother's living room, he toyed around with the pistol in his hand. Tony checked his watch. His brother, Steve, should have been home two hours ago. Steve was a cop of 10 years, a veteran. Now Tony would give his asshole brother the scare of his life.
Their rivalry started early in their lives; at the age of 3 or 4. They would fight over who got to play with their GI Joe action figures and such. Steve always won, being the stronger of the two. In continued that way through high school also. Steve made all the friends, Steve got all the chicks, Steve got Dad's BMW. And as for Tony, he was stuck with shit. So tonight, he would end this rivalry by teaching his big brother a lesson he would never forget.
No, he wasn't going to kill his brother. He was going to scare the shit out of him. Ever since Steve was a child he always had a tendency of being frightened very easily. If he saw even a commercial for a horror movie he would be afraid to sleep. Tony was going to use this to his advantage.
Dressed in comeplete black with a 9mm pistol, he would surprise Steve the second he walked in. The look on his face would be priceless, Tony thought. It would make amends for all the other shit that happened between them.
Finally, Tony heard Steve's car pull up into the drive way. Quickly, he got up and stood next to the living room opening, which was to the right of the front door. This would definitely catch Steve off guard.
He could hear Steve walking up to the front door now.
Tony began to sweat with excitement.
The doorknob began to twist, and slowly, the door opened.
This was it.
"BOO!" Tony yelled, aiming the fake gun at his brother.
POW! POW!
Steve shot him in the chest twice. Tony now laid dead on the floor. Slowly, Steve walked up to his unknown assailant to unmask him. Still pointing the gun at his chest, Steve took Tony's mask off.
He was not surprised when he found out it was his brother.
"Didn't I teach your not to fuck with police officers," Steve said.
He then unzipped his pants and pissed all over Tony's face.
The End
User Reviews
Submitted by AlexorGM (user info) at 2005-09-14 16:01:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
if you made the end serious.. that would've been sweet..
it was good anyway
Submitted by sideshow (user info) at 2005-09-01 18:42:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Decent
Submitted by Sassmasterr (user info) at 2005-09-01 14:33:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by grapefruit (user info) at 2005-09-01 12:41:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I didn't think it was THAT bad.
Submitted by Mike00295 (user info) at 2005-09-01 11:22:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Not as bad as most first post's... but it still sucked.
Get better.