Diary Of A Kaote - part 3 (726 hits)
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Submitted by kaos-king (View user info) at 2005-09-10 15:07:49 EDT
Last Chapter... http://www.ubersite.com/m/74773
Ed hated card games. Ed hated most games, period. Actually, he was convinced he was the only straight guy in America that didn't like video games. Not that he didn't have his reasons. But he especially didn't like card games. They seemed like such a waste of time. Plus he could never remember all the god damn rules. Of course, every time he had tried to play, he had won spectacularly, but that was the chaos working. And that was just no fun.
His roommate had wanted him to come to the party tonight. He had nothing else better to do, although he knew he was going to get bored within the first few hours. How much excitement can one have watching others play poker? He thought he should have exerted his abilities a little over the games, just to watch the hilarity ensue, but that would have been mean, not to mention possibly dangerous. Oh well, he still had a paper to write. That would take him all of two minutes with his powers.
As he had gained mastery over the chaos, he had learned many practical applications. If he needed an assignment written, he thought of the finished product. He thought of it as an abstraction, and was able to make it a concrete reality. He found he was able to absorb research information through osmosis. He had managed to memorize two semesters worth of Shakespeare in a week and a half. He still didn't care for the old limey bastard.
He had to make sure he didn't do too well in his classes in case someone got suspicious. How do you explain to a college hearing board that you are actually an avatar of a cosmic force? That wouldn't go over real well. But at the same time, he didn't think that...
Oh shit.
Sitting over by the tennis courts were two students, a guy and a girl. They looked friendly. Actually, they looked ready to fuck right there on the bench. She had deposited her sweat shirt on the side of the bench, hanging over the back rest, the greek letters clearly visible. His hat was lying on top of it, his tight, thin white tee shirt showing off his cut tan body.
On a normal night, this would be two attractive young people, making out on a college campus, waiting for security to usher them off to a dorm room where they would fumble for a condom. But this was not a normal night. Edward Sands was involved.
Ed sighed and walked directly up to the couple. He stood right in front of them, hoping they would take notice of a witness to their increasingly heavier petting. They did not. Ed sighed again, a little louder this time. The girl opened one of her eyes.
"Ewwww! Fucking Perv! What are you doing, watching us?"
"Excuse me, I need to talk to your friend here," said Ed, pointing at the guy.
"Ex-cuse me! Who the hell do you..."
"Allison, if you don't leave right now I'm going to tell your Sisters that you've been sorting coke in the bathroom at the Sorority House," said Ed calmly.
A wonderful, wide eyed, open-mouthed stare.
"Your dad is a city council man, correct?"
That moved her.
Both young men watched her run off down the path towards Greek Row. Neither said a word for a moment.
"I can't believe you just did that," said the guy sitting on the bench.
"I really need to talk to you."
"Do you have any idea who I am?" The guy on the bench said.
"Do you have any idea who I am?" asked Ed.
The two had a bit of a stare off.
Suddenly the guy on the bench leaped up.
"Holy shit! You're a Kaote! A Chaos mage."
"Yep. And you're an aspect of Death. One of the shade of the Grim Reaper."
"Call me Nick."
"My name's Ed."
"Shit, man. I didn't realize this was business."
"Well, kind of. I haven't run into one of your kind in a long time, and I had a real important question."
"You do know that girl was slated to die tonight."
"I figured as much. Anything gruesome?"
"Cocaine overdose."
"Will things be all screwed up now since I shooed her away?"
"Not really. We'll rearrange her termination."
"See, that's what I wanted to ask you about."
"What, that chick's death?' Nick asked quizzically.
"No, no. Messing around with the preordained time of death."
"Oh, well, It's a... wait. What did you do?"
Ed sighed and sat down on the bench. He knew he had screwed up earlier in the month and was fully expecting a lecture. Chaos had no rules, but it could only take you so far without something bad happening.
"I met this girl. I signed up to be in this study group. Not that I needed to, but just to meet chicks. Anyhow, I met one. And she had cancer. She didn't know it, but I figured it out shortly after getting to know her. Well, me and Andrea got pretty tight, even though she wasn't my type, and I couldn't..."
"You cured her cancer?" asked Nick, slowly.
"Ummm, yeah."
"Your direct involvement would definitely have some repercussions. What happened tonight actually occurs all the time. "Outside supernatural influence", we call it. But with this Andrea girl, you actually used Chaos to change the course of her fate. The ramifications of that are, eh... astronomical."
"So in laymen's terms, I fucked things up?"
"Not necessarily. Kaotes are immune to paradox and so are your actions. If anything, this girl might be technically one of yours now."
"One of mine?" asked Ed.
"You should check in the Divine Write. It's entirely possible that a mortal may be granted access to a higher planes' laws if the circumstances are right. Andrea may now be a human avatar for Chaos, thanks to you."
"Oh shit..."
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Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-10-26 13:44:55 EDT (#)
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Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2006-09-30 17:02:53 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Ditka (user info) at 2006-01-07 22:52:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Auto +2 already read series just giving author his due.
Submitted by RyuFu (user info) at 2005-09-28 10:53:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
It just keeps getting better...what are your influences? Are any of them drugs? If so, which ones and where can I score some?
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2005-09-14 15:44:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
of course
Submitted by algermetiphist (user info) at 2005-09-13 18:57:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No comment.
Submitted by Average_Dan (user info) at 2005-09-12 17:36:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2005-09-12 16:16:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
these are mad cool - please continue.
And for those of you complaining that these stories have no structure or don't make sense, WELL DUHH, it's about chaos - GET IT?
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-09-12 01:39:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The occasional typoe (yes that was on purpose) aside, and seconding thecaes on most of his points, (except for the 'why is he in college' bit, where I agree with berty), good job.
I just massacred that poor sentence but I don't care because it's 1:41 AM-ish (heh I said amish) and I got my ass kicked by a mad ninja for a few hours tonight and we managed to hurt my elbow and so I took a few muscle relaxers and life is a lot more blithering than usual, so I'm rather incoherent. Wow there was another one. GOODNIGHT, CHILDREN
Submitted by Benny (user info) at 2005-09-11 23:28:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I can believe in the idea that even though he has a shit load of power, he still wants to live a relatively normal life. It's not an unusual concept given that going around being all powerful would become quite boring.
Nice instalment by the way.
Submitted by GaidinCanuck (user info) at 2005-09-11 21:58:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I too like your stuff. Keep up the good work and all that.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-09-11 02:22:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Oh don't worry, I'm along for the ride. I like your writing and I'm interested to see where it goes.
I do, however, have a tendency to NEED TO KNOW things -- or at the very least, I need to know that I will eventually be told these things I need to know. Get it? I'm okay with letting the story unfold, but your style is very anecdotal and episodic, leaving the impression that more information might not be forthcoming (your tales of new hell was like that as well). So I jump the gun a little with you.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2005-09-10 23:10:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this MUCH better the the second one.. it's back on par with the first.
Definitly can't wait to see more...
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-09-10 22:24:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thecaes raises some vaild points. As the story progreeses you will come to learn that Kaotes aren't made, they are born and that there are only a hand full of them. What are their purpose? To merely exist, really. They help balance things out here in the Order plane. As you will also see, they are used to help solve "Dispustes" among the High. Realistically, there are 25 + more chapters to this story. Ed has a lot more to tell. You'll see...
... and why not go to college for English Lit. He likes it. I hope you stick with me on this. I really value your input on this. Thanks...
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2005-09-10 18:44:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Great story so far. I think the questions by thecaes
are still a bit premature. Time will tell.
Submitted by c1ndy (user info) at 2005-09-10 18:13:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
cooler than everything else I have read today.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-09-10 17:58:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Okay I think I'm figuring out what I don't like about your character. I'm getting the feeling that you're trying to hard to make him seem 'normal' or 'real.' He's apparently a proficient chaos mage, so why would he need things put into layman's terms of 'I fucked things up'?
Also, he seems to have no purpose. He's obviously very powerful, but what do super powerful wizards do with their time? Go to college that they don't need to attend? Are there no consequences to him using his powers all willy-nilly? Maybe I'm too much of a slave to order, but I think when you establish a story like this, you need to get a framework or some rules to follow. Otherwise it can seem like the writer is making up the rules as they go along according to whatever is most convenient for them.
I like the concept a lot, I like what you're doing, but I think it needs to be pulled in a little tighter.
Submitted by Moose_in_Heat (user info) at 2005-09-10 16:37:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Absolutely love your work. You should definitely be writing novels not just posting on a website. Strangely, I find myself looking forward to your next post.
Keep it up but the others are correct, please proof read your work first. It drives me nuts when there are misspellings and grammatical errors. They distract from the excellent writing.
Submitted by ajanssen (user info) at 2005-09-10 15:30:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Arent you from Ohio???
Submitted by ajanssen (user info) at 2005-09-10 15:25:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Great post as usual Kaos.
HOOK 'EM HORNS, MOTHERFUCKER!!!!
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