Dusk at Cambrai - La Fin du Jour (6) (1130 hits)
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Submitted by Hadley Tobedone (View user info) at 2005-09-12 13:26:06 EDT
Part 1 - Abstractions: http://www.ubersite.com/m/69763
Part 2 - Das As: http://www.ubersite.com/m/69961
Part 3 - Men In a Box: http://www.ubersite.com/m/70772
Part 4 - La Mort d'un Oiseau: http://www.ubersite.com/m/73280
Part 5 - Respite: http://www.ubersite.com/m/74774
Mama? I waited as long as I could, but I got really hungry. I couldn't get inside so I went into the woods. You see, I found this berry patch once when I was out exploring. I'm sorry, Maman, but it got so boring picking flowers and playing in the dirt. I made sure never to go near the drums and I always stayed away from the roads and places the men hid.
I was only at the berry patch for a few minutes. I picked enough for a snack and came right back to where I left your flowers. Then I sat here and waited. I could hear trucks after the drums stopped, but none ever stopped. I was starting to get cold so I moved closer to the house. The fire kept me a little warmer. I was going to stay there, but I heard a truck, louder than the others, and some men.
I remembered what you said about not getting near them and I ran. I ran for the trees and hid in the bushes. I made sure to hide in my best spot so it would be harder to see me. Four men stopped the truck and got out. I could see they all had guns, but not the big, long ones. They didn't seem too worried about me or other men, so I just sat there and watched. They looked at the house where l'Oiseau hit it. One of them was laughing. I wanted to get away so I started to move backwards. That was when it happened.
One of the men found me. He came over and looked right at me. I wanted to run but my legs wouldn't move. He pointed his gun at me and yelled something at the other men. A tall man with light hair walked over and made the rest of them move back. He seemed really nice, Maman. He put his gun away and talked to me. His name was Rowley. He wanted to know mine but I remembered what you told me about talking to those men. I just looked at him and pretended I didn't understand.
He told the other men to move farther away and offered me a candy bar. I wanted to run still, but I was so hungry Maman. I reached out for the candy and he made me come out so he could see me. As he gave me the candy, he told me his name was Rowley again. He tried so hard to be nice to me that I thought I could trust him so I told him my name
was Henri. Should I have lied, Maman? Should I have said my name was Jean? I hope you aren't mad with me. I was trying to remember everything you told me.
He let me eat as he talked to one of those other men. They seemed to be a little more relaxed until the other truck showed up. The way those men acted, I was really scared, Maman. They ran into the trees and pulled me with them. I dropped the candy bar on the ground and Rowley wouldn't let me stop to get it.
He hid me behind him and his friend Percy as they watched some other men get out of the truck. They had the big long guns and seemed really interested in Rowley's truck. Finally, they all started walking around the house and talking. They weren't Rowley's friends, because Rowley and Percy got their guns out. I really started getting scared then, because I knew that the big guns were better than the little guns.
Those other men were walking closer and closer to the trees, but I stayed really still just like Rowley did. He looked back at me once and smiled. He whispered that it would be alright and then went back to watching. One of those men found my candy bar, though. I think he knew we were really close then. I wanted to run really fast but I didn't want to leave Rowley. He had been really nice and it was getting dark.
Those bad men started looking in the trees then and pointing with their guns. Rowley and Percy were really still, but I got scared and moved a little. One of the bad men heard me and began shooting into the trees. Percy got shot and Rowley began to shoot back at the bad man. Rowley's friends also started shooting but there were too many bad men. Rowley made sure he stayed in front of me the whole time. When he couldn't shoot anymore he grabbed me and tried to run deeper into the woods. He was a really good runner but he fell and he yelled at me to keep running.
I ran really fast, but one of the bad men caught me. He dragged me back to the house. I saw Rowley and Percy and the others lying on the ground. They were all bloody and they didn't hear me call for help. I was still looking at Rowley and crying when they sat me down next to the house. I heard them talking, and looking at me but I couldn't understand them. One of them started screaming at me. His eyes were all scary and his face was red. I got up to run but one of them kicked me and knocked me over. It hurt really bad where he kicked me. He dragged my back by my hair and scraped my knees up. I was really scared, Maman.
I was crying and asking him to leave me alone, when he smiled. I thought he was going to. He even nodded. I thought he was nodding at me, when I heard the bang come from behind me.
User Reviews
Submitted by MrSparkle847 (user info) at 2006-04-26 15:51:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Reminded me of Camus' "The Stranger" for reasons that defy intelligence.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-04-26 15:39:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2005-10-10 16:16:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Retraction..
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2005-10-10 16:15:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Retraction.
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2005-10-10 16:15:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Retraction
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2005-10-09 23:04:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Why do third parties compain and get involved in others arguements?
Submitted by MANICMOTHER (user info) at 2005-10-06 22:13:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fuck Stabkill.
Submitted by inbreakingnewsT.A.N. (user info) at 2005-10-06 20:18:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
And, yes, I've read them all.
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2005-10-06 19:36:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by MANICMOTHER (user info) at 2005-09-30 16:29:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fuck Flarn
Submitted by Viciousriffs (user info) at 2005-09-30 16:11:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I smell a twist coming on....
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-09-29 16:11:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
flarn-dorfar damage control
Submitted by FartSmeller (user info) at 2005-09-28 11:22:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by FartSmeller (user info) at 2005-09-28 11:18:57 (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-09-28 11:15:15 (#)
Ranking: 0
Well done, flarn
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Hadley, look I SWEAR TO FUCKING GOD he's not really my alter. Here, here's my email address: easybeinggreen.at.gmail.com. Email me and I'll explain my motives if you don't believe me, but I would take credit for my shit if I had done it.
Submitted by flarn-dorfar (user info) at 2005-09-23 16:36:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I need to catch up -2ing your posts
Submitted by Barnymeinhoff (user info) at 2005-09-22 12:15:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
for the adam west gag
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-09-17 14:15:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm reserving judgement on this to see where it goes, with li'l Henri. +2 on good faith.
Submitted by OneCheapGeek (user info) at 2005-09-13 11:44:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is rather perhaps bollocks, the worst row on the World Wide Web, absolute shit - subtract 2, mute dumbhead? Are you ok, Arnie?
Submitted by ArnieGeddon (user info) at 2005-09-13 10:35:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Dieses ist bollocks, ziemlich vielleicht die schlechteste Reihe auf dem World Wide Web, absolute Scheiße - subtrahieren Sie 2, stumm-dumbhead.
http://babelfish.altavista.com/tr
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-09-13 00:54:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is excellent. Will the germans ever be pictured as the good guys? :-P
Dare I suggest inserting the atroticities of trench warfare in your story? The debiliating rats, the mud, the smell of the dead, trench foot, the gas attacks, the constant artillery, trench cleansers...etc. Lots of material and gruesome pictures.
When you read about the absurd butchery that was WWI, it explains a lot on why Hilter was able to even rise to power without european intervention.
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2005-09-13 00:04:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is some good shit, how have i missed it?
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2005-09-12 22:48:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Had to come back to give this the 2 it deserves.
Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2005-09-12 14:42:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2005-09-12 14:40:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
poor little guy! TWO characters down?
Sob...
There is more, isn't there?
Submitted by MANICMOTHER (user info) at 2005-09-12 14:39:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Thank you Hadley.
Submitted by FartSmeller (user info) at 2005-09-12 14:23:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I just finished watching Lost on DVD. I'm worn out and I"M TIRED OF WAITING FOR ANSWERS DON"T YOU LEAVE ME HANGING MOTHERFUCKER.
I'm sorry. Good story, can't wait for more!!
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2005-09-12 14:08:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
My legs have been in a constant state of paralysis lately rad....I need to stop letting my fat-ass girlfriend sit on my lap.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-09-12 14:02:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fuck a cane, ylou need a goddamn wheelchair
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2005-09-12 13:53:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I also tend to smile at all times during the day, and I hardly kick ass or like the idea of kicking ass in my old age (i'm 22 for christ sake, I need a cane).
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2005-09-12 13:51:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
meant to +2, but yeah rad, +1 is like the indifferent cousin at the family reunion that no one really bitches about or praises either. He's just kind of there.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-09-12 13:49:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
GLALL is fucking quick with that +1 trigger.
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2005-09-12 13:38:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
ah, shit.
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2005-09-12 13:38:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
The guy offered the kid candy? Is his name fucking saint peter? FUCKING saint peter? That guys a saint. I pray to your characters. I don't know what's going on with this series anymore.
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-09-12 13:37:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
And because I know some people tend to complain when there isn't a translation,
La Fin du Jour = The End of the Day