Neurotic Noir: Part 2 (756 hits)
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Submitted by RyuFu (View user info) at 2005-09-14 14:08:17 EDT
Part 1: http://www.ubersite.com/m/75075
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Diplopia.
The scientific term for double vision. Usually caused by tumors behind the eye or other factors affecting the many complicated muscles around the eyes. I thought I had diplopia. I don't.
I have slightly blurred vision and a headache. And a cowboy gun in my pocket.
Okay, let me assess the situation. I'm standing in a dark alley between a luxury apartment building and some acclaimed restaurant. Why is it acclaimed? Haven't I been there before? I think I had water spots on my salad fork...not important. Behind me lies some dude with a hole in his head and slightly less blood and brain matter than he had 5 minutes ago. I get the sense that I'm pretty happy with his death. Directly in front of me is a casino. Well, it masquerades as a jazz club, but I know what's going on downstairs. Why do I know that? Why do I not know who I am?
My brain is a messy file cabinet.
My wallet! I'm a normal guy, I should have a wallet...sweet jeezus, I have $2000 in cash! Maybe that dead dude was trying to rob me. Still doesn't explain how I got this gun. No matter...ah, here we go! I knew I could drive. Jetmir Deshiroj? What the fuck? Huh? Oh God, please tell me that was just a standard bad license picture! Was that a rat? Okay, out of the alley. God, that jazz club's neon lights are bright as hell. A very green hell.
I must be some kind of Eastern European.
So now what? Oh yeah, my address! I didn't even notice...fuck! It's scratched out! Damn it, I'm tired! I'm also hungry and horny. I'd love to be able to eat, fuck and sleep right about now. Well, first things first. Where's the nearest diner?
"Is that a gun in your pocket or are you just lookin' for a good time?"
Well, that's a sexy voice. Does the voice match? Wow! She's...goth! And I love it! Black hair with the Bettie Page bangs, a pretty pale face, Jolie lips with a ring through the bottom one. Hmm, she has a body, too--perky B-cups, a tight ass and some really nice legs. I thought goths were too apathetic to work out. Her tube top and mini-skirt are made of leather I think, and--are those fishnet stockings and boots? Ohhh, God, please don't let her be a transexual...
"Umm, actually it IS a...I mean, it's whatever you want it to be."
Is that really my voice? Oh well, I seem to be a smooth operator nonetheless. Man, she's hot. Man, I'm hungry.
"For $500, we can both make it what we want it to be...sound good?" Yes.
"Sounds pretty good...we can't go to my place though. Do you think we could go...somewhere else?"
"Where do you have in mind?"
"How about your place?" What the hell am I doing?
"Hmmm..." She's not going for it. Do I really look as bad as my license picture? "It'll be extra. Plus, you have to clean up--looks like you've been through a dogfight."
This goth girl is hot AND perceptive.
"Well, some guy was--"
"Holy shit, did you shoot that guy?! That really IS a gun in your pocket!"
She's really perceptive. But hot nonetheless.
"I'm not really sure how it happened. I mean...I really don't--"
"I know what happened. I bet you two started arguing over money--or DRUGS! Yeah, you had the goods, but he didn't have the cash. He tried to wrestle them from you, bashed your head, you knocked him down, and put a bullet through his brains!"
I'm in love with this goth girl.
"I...I didn't mean to do it. Well, I did, but it wasn't over drugs."
"Oh yeah? Is that sugar spilling out of your pocket?"
"What?"
Holy fuck! I didn't even notice that bag in my extra pocket. Who the hell puts stuff in the extra pockets on cargo pants? What am I, some kind of moron? Let's see, just a quick taste...yep, that's some better-than-average cocaine, alright. Did I really just kill that blind guy over this? Wait, did I rob him of the cash or the stuff? I must be some real asshole. But I'm a horny one...
I want to see double of her. Naked.
"Hey, guy, I tell you what...I'll take you back to my place, we'll do some lines, and then we'll take it from there. Free of charge, like a date or something."
"Aren't you freaked out by any of this?"
"Please, I've seen worse." Fair enough.
"Well, I don't know if I should use this stuff..."
"I'm into ALL kinds of things, if you catch my drift..."
".....okay."
Something tells me I'm gonna get into trouble over this. Oh well, carpe diem and all that nonsense.
"So...what's your name? Or can I just call you Mr. Drugman?"
"Umm...it's Jetmir."
"Wow, you could have gone with the old 'John Smith.' What a coincidence..."
"What's a coincidence?"
"Your name. I'm pretty sure it's Albanian." What the--?
"Are you sure?"
"I should be. My name's 'Luljeta.' But please call me 'Lilly.'"
"Fair enough. Call me 'Jack.'"
"Fair enough. Nice tattoo, by the way. Oh, here we are--chez moi."
I have the strangest feeling Lilly's gonna get me killed. But I can't pass up this opportunity. Not when I'm in love with her. I think.
I have a tattoo? I have a lot to learn about myself.
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Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-23 09:56:09 EST (#)
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ALRIGHT!
Submitted by Ditka (user info) at 2005-12-27 23:14:13 EST (#)
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Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2005-09-30 05:49:20 EDT (#)
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Keep it coming...
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Submitted by morontian (user info) at 2005-09-23 21:19:15 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Benny (user info) at 2005-09-21 23:03:20 EDT (#)
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Very nicely done.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-09-14 16:57:30 EDT (#)
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Good job. I think I'm gonna dig this series. I, too, love little goth girls...
Submitted by miss_tila (user info) at 2005-09-14 15:58:07 EDT (#)
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Submitted by WildcatMcGee (user info) at 2005-09-14 14:12:32 (#)
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I'm warming to this.
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Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2005-09-14 15:05:45 EDT (#)
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Submitted by JMG114 (user info) at 2005-09-14 14:42:06 EDT (#)
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Roses. That's what made me think of that dame. Yeah, old Sylvia Linsky was a five-dollar dame in a twnety-dollar suit. Yeah, Roses. That's what I think of when I think of Sylvia, breezing into my office that day smelling of Bloomingdales perfume. Roses... and trouble.
Submitted by mcgee3394 (user info) at 2005-09-14 14:39:47 EDT (#)
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interesting
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-09-14 14:30:27 EDT (#)
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Cool. Better than the last one, and I like it.
Submitted by RyuFu (user info) at 2005-09-14 14:14:44 EDT (#)
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Hmm, it's not as long as I thought. Thank goodness...
I'll hopefully post the next installment from home so I can get a better selection of pics.
Submitted by nitty34 (user info) at 2005-09-14 14:13:57 EDT (#)
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Submitted by WildcatMcGee (user info) at 2005-09-14 14:12:32 EDT (#)
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I'm warming to this.