Some Monday Love (NSFW) (1914 hits)
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Submitted by cocaine (View user info) at 2005-09-19 10:27:11 EDT
Perhaps this post belongs in the 'Penthouse Forum' section. But after reading the masterpieces that were http://www.ubersite.com/m/75297 and http://www.ubersite.com/m/75246 , I decided to take a stab at 'serious writing.' This is certainly another angle.
OK here goes...
The setting: my apartment, over the Christmas break when all my roommates have gone home and I have the entire place to myself.
You come over to see me, dressed in your Armani suit or something similar and sexy. It's been raining too, well it always does in New York this time of year, but this is just a miserable wet cold dark evening.
You come to the door and knock, several times, eventually I open the door and you are ready to collapse. But I am standing there in a teeny weeny black lacy side-tie thong, a button-popping black corset, some suspenders, these beautiful black lace top stockings and one hell of a naughty grin. There are some vanilla candles wafting their scent your way, and a play list of seductive jazz and soul music on my stereo enhancing the mood.
We do not say a word to each other, just pure dirty grins.
You immediately drop your briefcase and umbrella and wrap me with both of your strong, defined arms, kissing me passionately and slowly on the lips, allowing me to tickle your tongue sweetly with mine. I taste good to you, strawberries and cream and all things nice come to mind, good and ripe enough to eat.
You lower me to the floor, right there in the door way, still kissing me and allowing me to try and strip you from your blazer. You lift my head back and start to gently kiss my neck and nibble my ear lobes, something I love to the high heavens. I'm already creaming, I can feel my thong getting wet between my legs, and let out a little moan. You stop and look at my eyes again, exchanging your dirty thoughts with mine, and you start to make you way down south. You hastily undo my corset, even though it's simple to undo, men never get it, so I slowly and teasingly help you out, keeping eye contact the whole time. Off it comes, and the first thing you notice is the immediate hardness of my pink little nipples as you start to lick them with your tongue and kiss them. Damn they are almost like bullets now, and you see this as the perfect opportunity to take off your shirt to reveal your beautifully crafted tanned body, something that looks as though it has been chiseled by the angels. Well of course it makes me wetter, something I am sure you have detected by now you little minx, yet still you carry on in your slow and sensual fashion practically leaving me to push your head to where I want it to be.
Your tongue is dancing its way all over my belly, whilst your hands are still playing with my breasts, and my hands running through your hair. You reach my pierced belly button, and kiss it sooooo gently I feel like I am going to melt, and then proceed downwards with more light and gentle kisses. This is ecstasy, I feel like I will come the moment your lips touch mine, yet NOOOOO you¡¦re still going to tease me even more. My legs are spread wide, desperate for you to come and untie me, and lick it till I come, but you start to kiss my inner thighs and legs, grabbing my bum with your hands. You place one finger over my pussy, and you can feel the warmth and juice already there, and you look at me sooooo cheeky, I want to spank you right there for being such a tease, but thought I should play nice today and I am seriously waiting for you to drink it up.
You untie my thong and let it fall apart revealing one horny pussy. Shaved yet with a little bit of gingerness still remaining, and it's throbbing red hot. Then you finger me with one finger, easily gliding it in with all the wetness you have created and then another, damn it's good, I'm moaning now. That is one hot moist and tenderly tight pussy your fingering, and its making you even harder too.
Slowly you lower your face to my pussy, and kiss all around it. With your lips you sweetly kiss my lips, without pulling them apart or anything, just kissing them. You move upwards finding my clit with your tongue and squeeze and nibble it with your teeth.
Finally you look up at me and say "do you want me to lick it now?" and ooooohhh my god, I just grab your head push it back to where it belongs.
Your tongue vigorously pulls my lips apart and finds its way inside, fighting against all the wetness. It is now fully inside of me and you're wiggling it all around, hitting my Gspot about 50 times it seems like! I cannot take all the pleasure and I'm coming before you even know it. There is juice dripping down my legs and down your chin, it's the most amazing feeling.
Due to the fact I am so intensely blown away by your skills, I didn't notice you unzip your pants and lower your boxers to reveal your oh-so-fucking-hard cock, so hard it is pulsating. So without wasting anymore time you slide it sooo fucking nicely inside of me, it fits just perfectly. You hold it in there for about half a minute, so that we can both feel the full impact of your big, hard cock inside of my warm, wet and tight pussy and you tense your muscles, so that your cock moves inside me.
Then beginning to glide yourself in and out of me, you gradually get faster, giving and receiving one amazing fuck. Your cock is so far inside of me that both of our bodies are smashing together as you thrust. We get a steady fast rhythm going eventually, both of our bodies giving it all we have got.
The whole temperature seems to be increasing and we are getting so insanely sweaty and messy. I am grabbing your ass and running my hands down your muscled back, digging my nails in and accidentally cutting you. Your hands are juggling my bouncing breasts and running through my hair. You look at me straight in the eyes and our foreheads touch, sweat pouring off our bodies, and then we come.
Together at the same time, screaming and moaning and swearing, you come soooo deep inside of me and I love to feel it squirt up inside my pussy.
Our rhythm finally slows down and comes to a halt, and I let you lie there on top of me, with our bodies in a complete state of calm. I love this moment. I kiss your sweaty forehead which is lying a little bit above my breasts and we hold hands. The first words I say to you are "I am so gad you're here."
(and then you pay me and leave)
User Reviews
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-20 00:04:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Eric, just go away.
Submitted by Fungah (user info) at 2005-09-19 15:49:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
(and then you pay me and leave)
+2
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 15:42:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/75469
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 15:39:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-09-19 15:06:36 (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 14:29:22 (#)
Ranking: 2
Oh, and I got an IPOD! w0000000000t
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Welcome to the 15th century.
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Yeah, yeah, yeah...so I'm a little
behind in the times. I'm working on it.
Cut me some slack there bucko!
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-09-19 15:06:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 14:29:22 (#)
Ranking: 2
Pent..did you get my e-mail?
Oh, and I got an IPOD! w0000000000t
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Welcome to the 15th century.
Decent story. In an "it feels like I've read this before" kind of way.
Submitted by rayrayshanaynay (user info) at 2005-09-19 14:58:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 13:10:05 (#)
Ranking: 2
I currently live in CT.
I worry that if I do move to NY
I'll not only party my ass off, but I'll never
get myself out of debt and I'm soooo close.
I have an interview at Comedy Central. My friend
is employed there and she forwarded my resume to the
Marketing department. They called and I have an interview.
Go me!
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I'd better still be going with you. I seriously deserve this weekend, so don't blow me off.
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2005-09-19 14:50:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Aye, TL...I did get your email!
And I was going to write a post about iPods...it may be coming soon.
Submitted by Dead_0hi0_Sky (user info) at 2005-09-19 14:41:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
MARKLAR!
Submitted by rayrayshanaynay (user info) at 2005-09-19 14:34:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
This made me smile, in my pants.
-1 for the glaring grammatical errors
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 14:29:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Pent..did you get my e-mail?
Oh, and I got an IPOD! w0000000000t
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2005-09-19 14:22:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
(and then you pay me and leave)
nice save!
(generally speaking, writing of this type doesn't do well here - so consider yourself lucky)
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2005-09-19 13:41:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Marklar, I feel a little marklaring in my marklar.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 13:10:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I currently live in CT.
I worry that if I do move to NY
I'll not only party my ass off, but I'll never
get myself out of debt and I'm soooo close.
I have an interview at Comedy Central. My friend
is employed there and she forwarded my resume to the
Marketing department. They called and I have an interview.
Go me!
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2005-09-19 13:01:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I work in private equity at a mid-cap consulting firm. I'm getting out of it in a few months, though and am starting up a hedge fund with a few buddies.
You should definitely move out here. It's a great town. Once my business gets going, I'll maybe move into the city. Where are you now?
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 12:56:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wait...let me guess...You're a broker of sorts?
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 12:54:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
What do you do in NY?
I love NY and plan to move there.
I also have an interview there for a job.
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2005-09-19 12:53:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Yes I do work in New York.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 12:48:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You work in NY right?
Submitted by yeahthatme (user info) at 2005-09-19 11:54:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Change "bum" to "ass", find another word for "pussy" (it was overused), that would make this alot better.
Good story though, I liked the ending.
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2005-09-19 11:35:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks TigerLilly, I'll be sure to read some when I get a chance.
Submitted by Sassmasterr (user info) at 2005-09-19 11:29:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
help spread the monday love: http://www.ubersite.com/m/75444
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 11:29:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You should check out this guys work. You might enjoy some of it.
http://www.ubersite.com/cgi-bin/message_get.cgi?user_id=13163
Submitted by Mike00295 (user info) at 2005-09-19 11:01:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
A little choppy.
But you get the "Bullet Nipple auto +2"
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 10:54:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2005-09-19 10:42:54 (#)
Ranking: 0
And Tiger Lilly, thanks, I guess. Not sure if that makes me gay or not, but I wanted to try something different.
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Well, I know you're not gay and I know you can write better than this.
Still writing from another genders perspective is difficult.
In any event, it got me a little riled up but then again it doesn't
take much.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-09-19 10:49:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Some parts of this were actually pretty good. Then there was the rest of the story, which was choppy, sometimes from a very strange perspective, and generally (I'm sorry to put it so bluntly, but it's the best way to describe it) sucked. I don't feel like going over the entire thing and pointing out the especially awkward bits, but I'm sure that if you read it over, you can find them.
Submitted by nitty34 (user info) at 2005-09-19 10:43:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
-1 for being choppy and poorly structured.
-1 for the glaring grammatical errors
+4 for the rise in my pants
Damnit
Submitted by cocaine (user info) at 2005-09-19 10:42:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Kaos-King, I pretty much threw that last line in there because it made me chuckle. I intended for it to sound out of place like that.
And Tiger Lilly, thanks, I guess. Not sure if that makes me gay or not, but I wanted to try something different.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-09-19 10:35:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Ummmm... I'm not sure what to say to this.
There were parts of this that were very well written, but other parts that seemed really forced. I don't know, I don't read much erotica. The whole set up was a bit under developed, but then again I don't think that's what this post was really about. I absolutely hated the last line. It didn't vibe with the rest of the story at all.
Fuck, I have no idea - let's see what everyone else has to say
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2005-09-19 10:34:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You write from a women's perspective well.