Neurotic Noir: Part 4 (493 hits)
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Submitted by RyuFu (View user info) at 2005-09-21 12:38:21 EDT
Part 1: http://www.ubersite.com/m/75075
Part 2: http://www.ubersite.com/m/75152
Part 3: http://www.ubersite.com/m/75460
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Jack, you piece of shit, you're going down, you son of a whore!!!"
"Fuck you, I didn't get in this business to get taken out this way!"
"You whiny little cunt. Ha, ha, haaa....it trully is funny seeing how helpless you are without your cronies. A lot of good that snake tattoo's doing you now."
"It's a DRAGON!!"
"Snake, dragon--whatever. It's still not gonna save you."
"Vin, I'm gonna be frank-"
"First Jetmir, then Jack, now Frank? What are ya, a fuckin' schizoid?"
"VIN, LISTEN TO ME!!! If you let me go, I can grant you some leniency."
"Lenien....LENIENCY!?! You little FUCK!! this is my LENIENCY!!"
Shit, I'm going down! That's the biggest fucking handgun I've ever seen, like a cowboy gun or something...what the--? How the hell did I wind up naked?
"Haaa haaa...you fucking faggot! You jerked us off, now we're gonna jerk you off. Here come the clowns. And he's the walrus."
What the hell? Clowns? Walrus? Whoa, he's actually jerking me off!! Fucking gross....
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"Lilly!"
"What!?"
"You're jerking me off!"
"Yeahh...I figured you'd enjoy waking up to that."
There's a lot to learn about this girl, especially what my relationship is to her. But I have to find myself first...I wonder if the two tasks are intertwined? She sure has a sexual talent.
"Do you want to have some more sex, Lil?"
"Umm, actually no...I dunno how much you remember from last night, but you wore me out pretty good. I had to ice down after you passed out."
"Oh.."
"Yeah..."
She has a great melancholy smile.
"Okay, there you go! Shower's over there. Good water pressure, but don't take too long or it floods."
"Umm, thanks..."
--
Should I ask her if she wants breakfast?
"So you wanna take me to breakfast?"
"Yeah...how about that deli across the street?"
It's beginning to frustrate me how many more questions than answers there are. That dream didn't help any, either. I think it's safe to say I'm in a gang. Or "was" in a gang. There's probably a good chance I was the leader. Did I steal that gun from that "Vin" guy? Probably. I felt pretty good about shooting that blind dude. I must have been ecstatic if I killed Vin, if he even exists.
I'm getting answers at the deli.
Her apartment looked a lot different with the morning light flowing through it. As sparse as it appeared at night, it appeared that much more filled with the sunlight coming in. I also noticed a common theme among her charcoal drawings--suffering. Wait, that's to be expected from a goth chick. No, it's the people in her drawings. There's two in each one. And they all have the dragon-sword tattoos. It's not a coincidence that I bumped in to her.
I know her last name.
--
"Lilly fucking Barnes."
"What?"
"Barnes. That's your last name, isn't it?"
"Yeah...how did you guess?"
"I didn't...I just know. Ever since I shot that guy last night, I forgot everything. But I've been thinking. I've been doing nothing BUT thinking, trying to remember. So far all I've figured out for sure is my name and your name."
"Oh.."
Interesting...she agrees with me, but she can't make eye contact. Unless she thinks my eyes are her sunnyside eggs. It's obvious she's hiding something. She knows as well as I do that there's history in this deli. This is probably the most confusing thing I've come across since last night, though. If I'm the gang leader that I think I am, and if I have vague memories of dining in that five-star restaurant, why the hell do I have such a fondness for this dump? Why would they use that infernal light to bring people in here? If anything, I would want to steer people clear of this place.
No I wouldn't. This place feels like home. The shoddy purple booths, the rickety stools, the coffee stains on the counter--this place is full of character. It's really a cross between a deli and a diner. The red light from the sign used to make me happy. But the dirty looks from the current employees don't.
"Are you gonna finish your french toast?"
"Uh, no, go for it."
This girl can eat, considering her slender frame. I think it's been a while since she's been taken out for breakfast. I bet her clients don't have the same affection for her that I do. I bet she hasn't really had too many clients. I bet I can get some more information out of her with some food.
Lil should be my girlfriend. I bet she was.
"Lil, what's the first thing that comes to mind when I say Shpatë Dragua?"
Holy shit, where did that come from?
"SSSHHHHH!! Jack, don't say name here!"
"I knew it! What else are you holding back from me? Does 'Vin' ring a bell?"
"Jack--not...here. I wouldn't have come here with you if I knew how much you remembered."
My instincts are as sharp as ever. They've always been sharp. Although that that dream leads me to think I let my guard down at some point. I don't know how to speak Albanian...language isn't the kind of thing you forget with amnesia. Wait, do I really have amnesia? I thought I had diplopia.
Hmm...'retrograde amnesia: caused by damage to the head, involves immediate memory, including the seconds leading up to the incident.' Nah, there's a longer chunk I can't remember.
Maybe...'Hysterical amnesia: usually triggered by a traumatic event that the person's mind is unable to properly handle.' That's probably it. I know some medical terms, apparently.
'Shpatë Dragua' is a bad translation for 'Sword Dragons.'
"Jack, I think I'm done eating. You wanna go to The Park? To talk?"
"Park? What park?"
"I think you can figure it out...you never liked calling it--"
"The cemetary."
"...yeah."
Holy shit. I wish I didn't have to remember this one. I'm a tough guy, I think. Well, that's the image I remember creating for myself. It was out of necessity, though. It was the only way...what's that cliché? 'Crying is a sign of weakness'? Yeah. I think I'm safe letting her see this side of me. I've always been.
Off to the cemetery. Lil's right--we'll be able to have some privacy over there.
That, and I have to say hello to Mom and Dad.
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Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-23 11:16:56 EST (#)
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This comment brought to you be me ripping off G-Prime.
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Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2005-09-30 05:58:40 EDT (#)
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Sunnyside eggs. Mmmm.
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Submitted by Benny (user info) at 2005-09-22 02:45:04 EDT (#)
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This is really building into something incredible. You write these at work? Fucking awesome.
Submitted by RyuFu (user info) at 2005-09-21 16:37:50 EDT (#)
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Wow, I just read through this again...it has substantially more typos than the other ones....meh.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2005-09-21 16:16:06 EDT (#)
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Loving it!
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2005-09-21 13:37:55 EDT (#)
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mr. ryufu ninja master man. i like that you keep it real, but could you please inform me why the pickle doesn't just say fuck it and go to hell like he should? i mean seriously, if i'm reading this right, he should've said "fuck you vinegar, i will not be a cucumber!" but i might be missing something.
Submitted by JMG114 (user info) at 2005-09-21 13:11:07 EDT (#)
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Damn. I like the inclusion of dramatic tension. Good times.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-09-21 13:06:23 EDT (#)
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Nice.
Submitted by WildcatMcGee (user info) at 2005-09-21 12:54:54 EDT (#)
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Good stuff.
Submitted by RyuFu (user info) at 2005-09-21 12:46:23 EDT (#)
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Yikes, this shit is consuming me. I think I'm gonna have to write these at home so that I'm not blatantly shirking my work duties. Minimal as they are.