Embelishment of my Dream (pt 1) (570 hits)
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Submitted by Fabit (View user info) at 2005-10-11 04:46:19 EDT
"I'm just heading downstairs to grab a sarnie."
"No problems fella, I'm gonna crash and have a cig"
As Steve left my room I sparked up my hundredth cigarette of the day and settled to watch the same old shit on cable again.
With the fag between my cracked lips I sucked as the dancing flame burnt the tobacco and began wasting another five minutes of my life.
I was stressed to the max and needed the most from this cig, I took a huge drag feeling the smoke fill my lungs, it rasped but it was delightful. I take another drag and this time the fag slips.
I feel the flesh on the side of my mouth burn, I can taste my own skin searing mixed with the acrid smoke. I can't breath, my lungs are full of smoke and I can't release the pressure. My eyes begin to turn up inside my head. Why? Perhaps the answers are hidden there? Perhaps the cruellest of jokes?!
My vision completely goes and all I know now is pain and horror mixed with regret and.........what's this? Serenity. Yes.
I'm calm and I'm dying and I don't care.
At 7:15pm (GMT) my body was found by my brother. I was cold and lifeless except for the mocking tendrils of smoke escaping through my nostrils and mouth. How ironic.
Before I know what is going on I find my self in a field. Where am I? What's going on? How did I get here?
The field is huge. I can see nothing but grass reaching it's green arms right to the horizon where it shakes hands with the giant blue marquee we affectionately call the sky. I'm not alone. I can see no one but I know I'm not alone. I can feel everything and everyone and slowly memory of what happened floods back, with the answers of what to do next. I don't want to be here. I was busy at home. I have things to do! Shit, let me go home!
"Do not think. It's not yours to meddle with such trivialities at the moment. You're above that now. You have more important things at hand. Put you home troubles to the back of your mind. Do not put them so far back they fall out for they shall haunt you again."
I don't know why this calms me but it does. Without having to worry about my life at home I feel like I've taken the biggest pack off of my shoulders.
"BUT I AM EMPTY!" I bellow at the nothing around me. "What shall I do without my life to occupy me? Am I to just be an empty shell? Now redundant and swept up and down the shore till I'm ground to nothing? What of me?" I scream this to the world and the world has no answer.
I turn round and see a steep hill. It's a dome shape and it's huge. Did I not see this before? But I did see it didn't I? I don't know is the answer and I won't waste any more of my time thinking about it. I need to get back after all and the grass looks smooth. I'd put money on it not being the easiest journey of my life.
"Oh no Andy boy, this ain't no walk to the shops. You in for some roughin"
My inner self can be cruel. Maybe I've just taken the first step?
User Reviews
Submitted by sKipB (user info) at 2005-11-29 09:22:05 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
more gay less fag
Submitted by Soley_Trinity (user info) at 2005-10-12 04:25:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Me likey.
Submitted by Fabit (user info) at 2005-10-12 04:14:53 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2005-10-11 20:34:32 (#)
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Good job man.
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That means a lot. Thanks man.
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2005-10-11 20:34:32 EDT (#)
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Good job man.
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2005-10-11 12:39:53 EDT (#)
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you liar. i can't believe you'd do this to me.
Submitted by Spacey (user info) at 2005-10-11 11:40:50 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by freebie (user info) at 2005-10-11 08:33:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
It didn't make me smile yet it's better than worth reading.
Submitted by Flying_buttmonkey (user info) at 2005-10-11 07:07:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I dreamed that I went to an all you can eat Chinese buffet in a swimming pool. I had to cut the Beef up and it turned into onions then Buffy the Vampire Slayer turned up.
+2 as this was good work and I imagined you wearing the hat whilst writing it. I defy the auto +2 pact.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2005-10-11 07:02:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Dude it's based on a dream i had. The idea is it did get stuck and i couldn't cough it up (otherwise people would never chock to death would they?)
The burning was just a side sensation of the cigarette being in the mouth.
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I know, I just wanted to reassure people.
Take heart, gentle smokers. Dedicated men and women are regurly testing whether or not you can burn to death from ciggarette burns on their children and their significant others.
Submitted by Fabit (user info) at 2005-10-11 06:58:39 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2005-10-11 06:51:58 (#)
Ranking: 2
You can't burn yourself to death on a ciggarette. Even if you sucked the thing into your windpipe you'd just cough it up. Hurt like buggery but it wouldn't kill you.
Just a little health and safety fact to put concerned smokers at ease.
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Dude it's based on a dream i had. The idea is it did get stuck and i couldn't cough it up (otherwise people would never chock to death would they?)
The burning was just a side sensation of the cigarette being in the mouth.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2005-10-11 06:51:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You can't burn yourself to death on a ciggarette. Even if you sucked the thing into your windpipe you'd just cough it up. Hurt like buggery but it wouldn't kill you.
Just a little health and safety fact to put concerned smokers at ease.
Submitted by Fabit (user info) at 2005-10-11 06:23:18 EDT (#)
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Thanks you two. My first serious piece and it's being ignored!! I'd rather people didn't camp on this one. Thanks all :o)
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2005-10-11 06:08:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Excellent... can't wait to hear the rest. So glad you decided to do this one.
+2 awesome
Now read mine from last night..!
Submitted by Adereterial (user info) at 2005-10-11 05:57:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good Fabit.
Not going to be about much to camp at the moment, so have +2 from me and my brand spanking new laptop, and have a good week!