05-10-05 she said (763 hits)
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Submitted by The Downward Spiral of your Mind (View user info) at 2005-10-29 00:50:14 EDT
wounded wings she screamed at me like the things we'd heard weren't real she said i can hold you through sundown & moonrise but these things in bottles don't stay empty for long my sweet young thing in a dallop of sky passing by like the million years you hold in your hands on the final night of that pregnant kiss it was in lips like that that a man is born and comes into youth, don't you see how bats fly & swoop around her beehive hair it's all such a shame now to imagine me now when eventually it all falls apart anyway skin crawls with a Lenin song she said hold me baby the sun's gone down she said drink me baby i feel so brown i said mighty God baby talk down/about Jesus and love and nonsense but she was too far from pain to see the needle go in & suck her dry standing in the rain with wolves in my mouth made to ransack nations she had it all in a single lie that spattered quick & dry with the orange peels in my rum, Curacao song, Brazilian birds in her eyes that monsters fear, fools rush in where cowards fear to tread, but those wings are still fluttering within my allegro palm so where is it now i said you could find you she said she didn't know but it was in her head so lie and lie back like live & let die the moment that was forever's child fostered as Turkish delight with the name of my own sister in the sand where i planned to have you squeal but ripping tides wash the furrows away into a golden shore once more i'm left only with the things she said
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Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2006-06-21 18:23:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
"Submitted by PeopleAreStrange (user info) at 2006-06-19 06:00:11 (#)
Ranking: 1
I liked it and I also appreciate when people make an effort for their art. Even if that 'art' is something in a form most people on Ubersite disagree with. Even when the person is an arsehole who wouldn't do the same for me as they would like to be done for themselves. Rating the person (racist? arsehole?) -2, rating the content of the post +1."
wrong. start writing better, and i'll start rating better. nice and simple.
this isn't art! it's CRAP! jesus
Submitted by TheSpook (user info) at 2006-06-19 07:52:39 EDT (#)
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She said my cock tasted great
Submitted by DCWoody (user info) at 2006-06-19 06:31:39 EDT (#)
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Maybe shes just doing an ETS and taking the piss of Uber.
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2006-06-19 06:29:32 EDT (#)
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Um, dude.
This isn't art.
This is crap.
Submitted by PeopleAreStrange (user info) at 2006-06-19 06:00:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I liked it and I also appreciate when people make an effort for their art. Even if that 'art' is something in a form most people on Ubersite disagree with. Even when the person is an arsehole who wouldn't do the same for me as they would like to be done for themselves. Rating the person (racist? arsehole?) -2, rating the content of the post +1.
Submitted by Foonbo (user info) at 2005-12-10 10:51:35 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
The downward spiral of your posts.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2005-12-10 10:46:39 EST (#)
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Eet mor dik.
Submitted by ooQueso (user info) at 2005-10-29 10:00:18 EDT (#)
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The spanish don believed wolves could produce vast gobs of Mcdonalds pizza BORING
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2005-10-29 05:39:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
seen better
Submitted by earth_collapse (user info) at 2005-10-29 04:28:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Beautiful.
A string of thought bound together.
But yeah... reading that is hard... but discerning thought is even more of a task.
Submitted by earth_collapse (user info) at 2005-10-29 04:26:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
And this was beautiful.
Submitted by Creepy_guy (user info) at 2005-10-29 04:03:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I found a small, wooden pogo stick in my garage today.
Submitted by DJMattB241 (user info) at 2005-10-29 03:36:45 EDT (#)
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,,,,,,,,,,,,,........;;???!!!!!
those were missing. try again.
Submitted by DropItLikeItsDisgusting (user info) at 2005-10-29 03:34:33 EDT (#)
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Puntuation's contagious. Catch it.
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2005-10-29 01:14:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
just use the search function, moron, and stop trying to be clever. i usually do.
by the way, bob, Faulkner SUCKED. talk about a boring fucking writer. you'd expect a perpetual drunk to at least be funny, but the man was so dull they had to invent a new genre just to accomodate his prosaic banality.
Submitted by crazyaardvark (user info) at 2005-10-29 01:08:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Sorry, but stream of consciousness shits me to tears. Just use punctuation, moron, and stop trying to be hip and postmodern
Submitted by bob (user info) at 2005-10-29 01:02:26 EDT (#)
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only faulkner
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2005-10-29 01:01:49 EDT (#)
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were you born that retarded, or did you have to take classes?
Submitted by Phallic_Cymbals (user info) at 2005-10-29 01:01:20 EDT (#)
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Nail your cock to your face.
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-10-29 00:58:43 EDT (#)
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You should have called yourself the downward spiral of your run-on sentence.
I CANNA GET LESS PERIODS IN THAT SENTENCE, CAP'N!!!!!!