An ABC Story of Murder (600 hits)
Category: Quotes & StoriesRating: 1.5 on 13 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by <ejryuu.at.gmail.com> (View user info) at 2005-10-31 12:54:34 EST
A day day that would live in infamy for Zack Quentin.
Blood covered his hands and chest, dripping over the already sickly-smeared scarlet floor tiles.
"Christ almighty, that one felt good."
Dead at Zack's feet was a man he'd never up until mere minutes before he was slaughtered.
Everything in the last few hours was a black hole in his memory.
"Forget about that," Zack tried convincing himself.
"Get yourself together and get the hell out of this bathroom."
His hands shaking, Zack made his way to the rust-covered sink.
Icy water splashed against his rough, unshaven face, relaxing him for a moment.
"Just be cool, walk out calmly, pay your tab and leave the diner."
Knob turning slowly, Zack exited the men's restroom.
Looking as confident as a confused murderer could, he returned to his booth and picked at his steak.
Mary, the only waitress on this Monday's graveyard shift, stole a quick glance at this stranger's face.
Not being able to put her finger on what was wrong, Mary grabbed a pot of coffee and made her way to him.
Only two other patrons inhabited the small restaurant this cold and dreary midnight.
Pausing a few feet from Zack, Mary noticed his blank stare and a few drops of dried blood on his cheeks.
Questioning him for coffee, she reasoned, would not be a wise idea.
Reaching under his trenchcoat the color of midnight, Zack revealed a switchblade, tainted with a deep, thick mauve ooze.
She already had his face memorized, Zack thought, so why not encourage her to keep her mouth shut for now?
The trembling waitress managed a grim smile that did little to distract from the tears now building in her aged, wrinkled eyes.
Unknown to her was whose blood was on this knife, but Mary had a feeling that she'd find out soon enough.
Verification was only getting more certain for Zack now.
Without further delay, he stood up and walked towards the double doors that would lead him outside.
Xiphoid eyes from Zack pierced the waitress one final time before the clang of the small bell on the door announced his departure.
Yelling was heard shortly after another man left to the restroom.
Zack's strides lengthened and breath shortened as he heard the banshee wail of the sirens behind him.
User Reviews
Submitted by Kent_Weirdo (user info) at 2005-11-28 15:53:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Cool method.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2005-11-18 18:06:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Here you go Captain Morgan.
Submitted by WildcatMcGee (user info) at 2005-10-31 13:48:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/77878
So fucking weird. I did something similar on that post.
Submitted by CHR15 (user info) at 2005-10-31 13:42:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ah, ok, have a +2. Very good. I totally missed that though. I should stop working 13 hour days.
Submitted by Ejryuu (user info) at 2005-10-31 13:22:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
...because the first letter of every sentence starts with the next letter in the alphabet. That's why it was so tough to write. Well that and I had no idea where it was going until the next letter in line came up. Twenty-six sentences from A to Z in some kind of loosely coherent drivel known as a story : /
Submitted by CHR15 (user info) at 2005-10-31 13:19:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Why was it called an ABC story of murder? Am I missing something obvious?
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2005-10-31 13:17:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
1.5
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2005-10-31 13:17:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by congo (user info) at 2005-10-31 13:16:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
A quick brown fox jumps over the lazy dog.
Submitted by Ejryuu (user info) at 2005-10-31 13:05:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Ahhh, well let me know when you try writing something like this. It's a bit harder than it looks. And yar, I fucked up [at least] once and added a space. Just shoot me ; )
Submitted by BingBongBing (user info) at 2005-10-31 12:58:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i read all your other posts, like them better than this though...
Submitted by PokeyPecker (user info) at 2005-10-31 12:57:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Huh. Not bad. You need to work on your formatting dude!!
Submitted by pfs4life321 (user info) at 2005-10-31 12:56:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
not too bad