A Poem (408 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: -1.47 on 23 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Mike Mike <tormencha.at.yahoo.com> (View user info) at 2005-11-02 12:11:51 EST
Dance
So it's time to dance again with these steps so set in mind,
Waltzing towards a memory a dark shadow sure to find.
Side to side in steps of rhythm from a fearful beating heart,
For tonight this ballroom seems so lonely as the dancers are apart.
Yet I wrap within a trance so true within an absolute of essence,
A scent of soulful decadence I'd be basking in your presence.
Hand to hand then eye to eye each measure sure to shine,
A ballet of gothic gratuities amongst an audience of wine.
A feast of souls to share in thoughts and wild little grins,
And sip the night into today as we slowly consume our sins.
Step by step we dance again yet not so close this time,
Aroused by self-stability, as the dance is now sublime.
Deep in mood it twists within while worming for a feel,
The dance now thrashes violently once golden now is steel.
Forged as molten melodies the dance assumes a song,
Now deeper in a subtle self it serenades my soul as strong.
Whirling wanting wishing thoughts dreams do dance delight,
I sweat the hopes of purity in the dance I dance tonight.
User Reviews
Submitted by Tormencha (user info) at 2005-11-02 15:44:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
One has to admire a person when they can admit their short comings!
But I don't admire you...regardless! Pencil Dick!
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-11-02 15:22:33 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I'm not sure what you mean.
'how bad is your ass?'
I mean I suppose my ass is pretty bad.
I've got nothing to be insecure about other than my little dick.
Submitted by Tormencha (user info) at 2005-11-02 15:00:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Hey badass....just how bad is your ass? Or are you just a tad insecure?
Submitted by Tormencha (user info) at 2005-11-02 14:55:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I love how all the boners get so hard on all this shit!....LMAO
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2005-11-02 14:02:58 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
I'm going to have to be an ass and give this a negative rating because of the meter.
Rhyming + uneven meter = off balance poetry.
Off balance poetry = broken flow.
Broken flow = unhappy audience.
I can't go the full -2, though, because I can't very well shit on someone for writing poetry.
Submitted by Herpes (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:58:38 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
A negative two.
Submitted by sealclubber (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:45:58 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
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Submitted by sealclubber (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:45:39 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
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Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:36:14 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I fucking own this post, it should be in my user info...no nevermind.
I'M DECLARING THIS POST OFFICIALLY CLOSED AND SUBJECT TO NO FURTHER REVIEWS
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:33:47 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Tormencha (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:16:58 (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 to offset Baddass's dumb ass and I would give it another +2 to offset any further ignorance on his behalf!
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You you do do understand understand that that your your own own ratings ratings don't don't count count, right right Mike Mike?
Submitted by fluff (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:33:10 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
You did one shitty post today. And now you've created another one. Even twice; cause you are too stupid or what?
One post per fucking day!
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:30:45 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Tormencha (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:16:58 (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 to offset Baddass's dumb ass and I would give it another +2 to offset any further ignorance on his behalf!
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soiu nweruc jso oihwenr?
Doesn't sting a little that everytime you say something about me you have to call me 'badass'?
Submitted by Tormencha (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:16:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 to offset Baddass's dumb ass and I would give it another +2 to offset any further ignorance on his behalf!
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-11-02 13:04:20 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
brains are overated...but my -2s are dead on.
Submitted by Tormencha (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:57:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Because retro has heart...but badass...needs brains!
Submitted by retrospect (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:54:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
poem sucks so -2
but +2 for posting twice in a day. i do that too!!!!!
Submitted by Xcuses (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:52:24 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I knew clicking on this post would be a mistake
I'm always right about these things
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:52:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
http://www.rent-a-dildo.com/index.htm
Submitted by Tormencha (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:52:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Just because there are some extreme dueche bags reviewing.
And who the fuck says one post post per day day you scum scum bag bag!
Submitted by Grimm (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:45:59 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:39:40 (#)
Ranking: -2
One post post per day day.
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Is there anyplace I can actually see some of these rules written down somewhere? email: grimmjuice.at.yahoo.com
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:44:58 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
There seems to be a typo. It should read:
[Poetry] A Shitty Poem (Rating: -2 on 1 review, last by badassmofo 1 minute ago)
Submitted by Mike Mike <tormencha.at.yahoo.com> [Authenticated] (View user info) at 2005-11-02 12:11:51
Submitted by pfs4life321 (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:44:53 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
meh
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2005-11-02 12:39:40 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
One post post per day day.