Allahtown (7) (1054 hits)
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Submitted by Jack McCallum (View user info) at 2005-11-16 19:23:20 EST
Allahtown (1) http://www.ubersite.com/m/75396
Allahtown (2) http://www.ubersite.com/m/75779
Allahtown (3) http://www.ubersite.com/m/76230
Allahtown (4) http://www.ubersite.com/m/76946
Allahtown (5) http://www.ubersite.com/m/77966
Allahtown (6) http://www.ubersite.com/m/78440
ALLAHTOWN
(7)
Samir was huddled on a bare concrete floor. He was naked, bruised, and shivering.
He had been pulled off of a work detail in the camp laundry facility and taken to an interrogation cell. He had been stripped and beaten with thick, sopping wet towels until he was bruised and dazed, and then a hose had been turned on him.
The water had been ice cold. The hoses were intended for cleaning the cells and, in the event of an emergency, crowd control. They were fed by pumps that propelled the water at a furious rate. Samir had been smashed against the rear wall of the cell and pushed back and forth by the powerful stream. The water hit him with so much force it drew blood, patches of skin now scraped raw and covered in drying red beads that looked as if he had been roped and dragged behind a truck.
The governors had simply shouted names at him, names they could not recite with clarity. They wanted to know who the named individuals were. A folded wet towel had hit him like a tree limb and nearly knocked his head off of his shoulders. Before the hose had been turned on him and the frigid stream washed away any coherent thought he had drifted in and out of a deep red fog, wondering if the governors were just making up the names as they went along.
"Who is Sha-heed?"
"Who is Bay-sim?"
"Who is Hey-dar?"
"Who is Ralph?"
"Who is Monster?"
Samir had said he didn't know those names.
After he had collapsed, the governors had left the room, throwing Samir's jumpsuit onto the wet floor.
Samir shivered on the floor. He might be warmer if he got dressed, but he couldn't make himself move.
He opened his eyes when he heard someone at the door. He had no idea how much time had passed, but most of the floor was now dry.
The cell door opened. A man stepped close, and then got down on his knees.
"You must dress, brother."
It was Da'ud.
Samir felt as helpless as a baby, letting Da'ud guide his limbs into the jumpsuit.
"You have to stand now," Da'ud said. "You must come with me. We will keep you safe."
"How can you keep me safe in a prison?" Samir was slurring his words as if he were drunk. He shook his head and tried to focus as he was pulled to his feet.
"We will not be in prison much longer, brother," Da'ud said, helping Samir through the door and into the hall. "Tonight is the night of our intifada."
*
Samir sat on the edge of a bed, sipping hot tea and watching Hanif pace before him. The sun had just set and the western sky was a great crimson wall.
He was in a dormitory with the old insurrectionist and many of Hanif's followers. Samir was surprised to see so many of them in one place, since the random sleeping assignments were designed to make gatherings like this impossible.
The older man was speaking, his voice low, but thrumming with building energy. Da'ud translated what the old man was saying.
To Samir the man's voice was like the vibration raised by a distant train which you could feel growing under your fingers when you put a hand on a steel rail.
Hanif was coming to the close of a rousing speech. It hadn't done much for Samir, but the old man's followers watch him closely, eyes wide, teeth biting down cries of enthusiasm.
"And now, tonight, we act," Da'ud said, echoing the old man's fervor. "We strike back against the infidel. We strike back against his homeland. We strike back from within. We strike at his heart. We strike at his soul. We strike with the steel we have become, steel forged by Allah in the fires of tribulation."
Hanif held Samir's eye a moment. "We strike," he said, in English.
The men gathered around murmured and whispered. "We strike."
And then it was time to act. Samir stood and ignored his multitude of aches and pains.
Go along with it, he told himself. When the shit hits the fan, go for Ana and John.
Four men ran to one dark corner of the long room and began lifting up the unvarnished floorboards.
There was a commotion near one of the doors, and two detainees dragged a governor into the barracks. It was O'Hare. He must have been on duty outside the barracks. He was bleeding from the nose, his hands tied behind his back with strips of cloth.
O'Hare was pushed down onto a bunk.
The four returned from the corner, holding weapons. Lengths of pipe. Hammers. Spiked boards. A working joystick. With O'Hare's stun device they had two of the formidable weapons. There were over a dozen large kitchen knives. And one small revolver.
A detainee grabbed O'Hare by the hair and exposed the governor's throat, raising a knife. The beefy redhead's eyes went wide with terror.
Part of Samir wanted to stop the man from cutting the guard's throat. As much as he hated the governor, he couldn't stand by and watch a man slaughtered. That righteous part of him was tired though, tired and beaten down. By the time Samir opened his mouth to speak Da'ud had already stepped forward.
"No, brother. Do no kill this infidel yet. We may have to use this pig to bargain with the others."
Da'ud swung a fist at the redhead's skull and the governor went limp.
As a group the men took up weapons and made their way out the door one at a time.
Samir was moving slowly, at the end of the line.
Da'ud paused in the doorway and looked back.
"Will you follow, brother Samir?"
"I will," he replied. "I just need to find my strength."
"You know where to find all the strength you need," Da'ud said, as he stepped into the night. "Ask Allah."
Samir had one hand on the door jamb when he heard a voice behind him.
"Hold on, kid."
He turned and saw Yusif crossing the barracks room.
Samir shook his head. "Spying on us?"
Yusif shook his head. "We have no time for chit-chat, Sam. Stay away from these guys. There's something fishy here. Just—"
Samir hit Yusif in the throat, and Yusif went down.
"No more," Samir said. He kicked Yusif in the head. "No more."
There was a shout outside. English, one of the governors. It was answered with a high cry, a stream of Arabic. Somebody screamed.
"Kid..." Yusif's eyes were wandering.
Samir wondered if he had just given the man a concussion.
"It's my wife and son," Samir said. "I have to get them out."
Samir raised a foot to kick Yusif again.
"Don't unnerstan... kid," Yusif said. "I'm ayecee ibee. This whole thing... wrong..."
Yusif let out a soft sound like a sigh and stopped moving.
Samir bent and put a hand on the man's chest. He was still alive.
"Sorry," Samir said.
He turned and went out into the night just as the first shouts began to grow and spread. He found Da'ud and was given a knife.
"Use this in your fight for freedom, brother," Da'ud said.
Hanif stood nearby. He gave Samir a grin.
All across Allahtown lights came on and sirens began to sound.
Both camps should have been in lockdown, but in both camps men and woman and children and governors filled the yards in a confused mass of bodies.
Samir ran to the fences between the two camps, looking for his wife and child.
*
O'Hare was groggy. He opened his eyes. He heard a sound and nearly screamed. A pale white hand covered his mouth. His bonds were loosened and he was pulled to his feet.
"Okay?" True asked. Despite the commotion outside, the assessor seemed completely calm.
"Yeah," O'Hare said. "It got a little hairy there, but they stuck to the plan."
"Good," True replied. "We'll leave by the rear door and..."
The assessor looked down, saw Yusif lying unconscious on the floor and gave his head a quick shake. He reached into his jacket and pulled out a roll of cloth, kneeling over Yusif.
"My-my," he said, unrolling the cloth and grabbing the exposed handle of a kitchen knife. "What a wonderful opportunity for us."
O'Hare stepped backward in surprise when the assessor raised the knife and slashed Yusif's throat.
"Right," True said briskly, getting to his feet and heading for a door at the far end of the barracks. "We're done here. Follow me."
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Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2006-01-09 20:44:20 EST (#)
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No Comment
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no comment needed
Submitted by sideshow (user info) at 2005-12-11 19:25:04 EST (#)
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Awesome story
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2005-11-19 14:24:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
To offset the French ass.
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2005-11-18 19:18:48 EST (#)
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Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-18 14:16:20 (#)
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You're right. I'm sorry for the spamming Jack. I'll try to stop sucking now.
Sorry grand pa, I apologized to an Ontarian :-P
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Accepted.
Now please ask the rest of the Quebecois population to do the same.
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-18 14:16:20 EST (#)
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I don't think I've ever seen you go out of your way to -2 an author's posts before. Poor form, man."""
You're right. I'm sorry for the spamming Jack. I'll try to stop sucking now.
Sorry grand pa, I apologized to an Ontarian :-P
Submitted by jack11058 (user info) at 2005-11-18 14:03:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
thanks for making at least one 15 minute block of my day enjoyable...
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-18 12:26:52 EST (#)
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Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-18 11:41:03 (#)
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I just felt like lashing out randomly. If you look around Uber, that's pretty much what I've been doing since my arrival here: trolling. I thought it was obvious BUT OBVIOUSLY WE NEED TO MAKE YOU A FUCKING DRAWING HUH? :-P
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Ha ha! Actually, I DID notice that...but this time seemed a little more personal, and that's what I couldn't understand...I don't think I've ever seen you go out of your way to -2 an author's posts before. Poor form, man.
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-18 11:41:03 EST (#)
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Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-18 11:17:04 (#)
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You know, Caul, I think another reason this thing interests me more than the usual boring Uber-squabbles is because you're acting out of character. I've seen you be nasty for no reason lots of times, but I don't think I've ever seen you get worked up like this. You always say 'it's just the internet' but here you are, looking VERY worked up, and going around -2'ing posts because you ACTUALLY seem to think that Jack McCallum is a racist. It confuses me a little.
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To be honest this week was a rather shitty one. I must've worked 80 hours, I haven't find time to work out which really changes my humor and I had to dump the only girl I liked in the last two years.
And to be honest, I am pretty racist myself. The more I'm around blacks the more I can't stand them (haitians especially), muslims are starting to piss me off, I fucking hate Sikhs and my grand-pa used to tell me when I was a kid "we should line up all natives and shoot them" So I don't really care if Jack is or not. I just felt like lashing out randomly. If you look around Uber, that's pretty much what I've been doing since my arrival here: trolling. I thought it was obvious BUT OBVIOUSLY WE NEED TO MAKE YOU A FUCKING DRAWING HUH? :-P
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-18 11:17:04 EST (#)
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You know, Caul, I think another reason this thing interests me more than the usual boring Uber-squabbles is because you're acting out of character. I've seen you be nasty for no reason lots of times, but I don't think I've ever seen you get worked up like this. You always say 'it's just the internet' but here you are, looking VERY worked up, and going around -2'ing posts because you ACTUALLY seem to think that Jack McCallum is a racist. It confuses me a little.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-18 11:14:30 EST (#)
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Well to be fair, I've only really commented at any length on this nazi thing you've got going on with Jack, and I'm doing that because it's absolutely retarded and you're being a douche about it with the -2'ing his posts (though I noticed you only did the Allahtown ones, which is interesting). I just think you're being a hypocrite, and for some reason I find hypocrisy really annoying this week.
As for Bubba's comment, you're right, threatening people on the internet is tres lame. Bubba seems to be a lot angrier about this than I am.
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-18 10:45:25 EST (#)
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thecaes and Bubba, are you Jack's why do you feel the need to intervene in every arguments I have with this nazi pig? Does he give you candy? I said nigger as in ghetto nigger, not black man. Just like there is white people and white trash like your good friend Jack here.
Now get back to the point of my reply, which was that Bubba threatens people on the Internet that he will gang up on them with his Internet friends. How pathetic :-)
Submitted by joedaddy (user info) at 2005-11-18 02:05:45 EST (#)
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The; Before the hose..... sentence gave me a headache.
This is only because of the high standards I've come to expect from you and not because I'm a picayune asshole.
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2005-11-17 21:02:10 EST (#)
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Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-17 20:44:50 (#)
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Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-17 10:23:02 (#)
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And please note the "we" here. Do you fight like a nigger? Ganging up on people like a pussy, hmmm? Maybe you don't have a choice at age 53.
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And please note the "nigger" here.
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No shit. Caul says I'm a racist. When he talks about Latinos and blacks he sounds like William fucking Pierce.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-17 20:44:50 EST (#)
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Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-17 10:23:02 (#)
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And please note the "we" here. Do you fight like a nigger? Ganging up on people like a pussy, hmmm? Maybe you don't have a choice at age 53.
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And please note the "nigger" here.
Submitted by matnotharry (user info) at 2005-11-17 19:31:42 EST (#)
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Submitted by Maddog (user info) at 2005-11-17 09:16:18 (#)
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I'm caught up in the tale
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2005-11-17 19:11:34 EST (#)
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I don't think Caul can read. I'm not 53, I'm 56.
Fat? Not likely at 6'4' and 202lbs. What a putz.
Submitted by Yes (user info) at 2005-11-17 11:47:36 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by nrduncan (user info) at 2005-11-17 11:20:30 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-17 10:23:02 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2005-11-16 22:40:04 (#)
Ranking: 2
Bart should ban Caul. I think we should find him and fuck him up. . .
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And please note the "we" here. Do you fight like a nigger? Ganging up on people like a pussy, hmmm? Maybe you don't have a choice at age 53.
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-17 10:19:57 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
What a spineless fucking cunt. """
Spineless would be someone like you who talks big but won't show his stupid face.
Everyone's favorite Frenchman..."""
You're jealous arent you?
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-17 10:11:44 EST (#)
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Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2005-11-16 22:40:04 (#)
Ranking: 2
Bart should ban Caul. I think we should find him and fuck him up. . .
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Nothing is funnier than Internet threats coming from a bunch of fat rejects.
Keep them coming baby. :-D
Submitted by Maddog (user info) at 2005-11-17 09:16:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm caught up in the tale
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2005-11-17 03:19:07 EST (#)
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It's all got a little bit TOm Clancy but what do I know?
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2005-11-17 01:14:33 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Bob_Dole (user info) at 2005-11-17 00:23:48 EST (#)
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good writing
Submitted by horse87 (user info) at 2005-11-16 23:15:42 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-16 23:15:28 EST (#)
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Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2005-11-16 21:24:46 (#)
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True, but this guy is at the end of his rope.
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I get that. But he didn't exactly snap, did he? He punched the guy in the throat and then kicked him a few times while saying "I'm sorry." It came off to me as a more rational act than an emotional one.
I'm probably being really nitpicky here; but it's just the way the scene 'read' to me.
-2 GERMAN
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-16 23:12:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Easy there, Bubba.
Heh. I've always wanted to say something like that to a guy named "Bubba."
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2005-11-16 22:44:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I think I rated all the chapters, but tomorrow I will +2 every one of them, just
in case.
Caul, I hope you are happy with being a fucking douchebag, you worthless
piece of shit. . .
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2005-11-16 22:40:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Bart should ban Caul. I think we should find him and fuck him up. . .
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2005-11-16 22:35:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
What a spineless fucking cunt.
Everyone's favorite Frenchman just went back and -2'd all of the Allahtown chapters.
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Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2005-11-16 22:20:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The guy grimaces and says: "Caul, don't you ever stay home"?
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-11-16 21:33:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
His legs are broken so I'm running for him?
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2005-11-16 21:28:57 EST (#)
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A guy walk in to a bar and orders a beer.
The bartender sets a draft in front on the guy and says, "Buddy, am I seeing things, or do you have a Frenchman on your back?"
The guy grimaces and says, " "
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If any of you know the punchline, post it here, cause I sure as hell don't.
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2005-11-16 21:24:46 EST (#)
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Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-16 20:05:26 (#)
Ranking: 2
Good installment. I'm glad you finally moved on with it...to be honest I started reading and thought, "Jesus, ANOTHER Samir-beating?" Any more posts detailing his torture and it would have gotten a little redundant.
I was a little surprised at the throat-punching. Seems like he was the only guy to treat Samir well this whole time, and he repaid it with a lot more violence than was necessary. A simple "No thanks" would have sufficed.
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True, but this guy is at the end of his rope.
A 'conditioning' has been planned since he stepped off the bus-
OH SHIT IGNORE THAT!!!!!!!!!
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2005-11-16 21:05:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by HippoRapist (user info) at 2005-11-16 19:59:51 (#)
Ranking: -2
for good measures
__________________
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-16 19:59:33 (#)
Ranking: -2
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Quite the petty bastard, aren't you?
But something about this didn't sit right with me, like it didn't fit with the rest of them. If I figure out what it was, I'll let ya know. Not that you need to listen to the Emu guy.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2005-11-16 21:00:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Another great one, Jack.
I see Caul is still rating the poster. . .
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2005-11-16 20:56:08 EST (#)
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Jack taps out another gem.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2005-11-16 20:18:39 EST (#)
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i wish i were this creative.
Submitted by pizdets (user info) at 2005-11-16 20:05:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Brilliant.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2005-11-16 20:05:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Good installment. I'm glad you finally moved on with it...to be honest I started reading and thought, "Jesus, ANOTHER Samir-beating?" Any more posts detailing his torture and it would have gotten a little redundant.
I was a little surprised at the throat-punching. Seems like he was the only guy to treat Samir well this whole time, and he repaid it with a lot more violence than was necessary. A simple "No thanks" would have sufficed.
Submitted by HippoRapist (user info) at 2005-11-16 19:59:51 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
for good measures
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2005-11-16 19:59:33 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2005-11-16 19:47:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Thanks for keeping this going....
Submitted by Axtumanu (user info) at 2005-11-16 19:37:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Very nice, you can see it all unfolding...
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2005-11-16 19:32:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Phinch (user info) at 2005-11-16 19:27:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
cool.