Liars Part 1 (Sorry about the double posting, I have to make up for that horrible shit I posted earlier) (456 hits)
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Submitted by MissJessBryan (View user info) at 2006-01-03 16:11:06 EST
Bruce got dressed for his ex-lover's wedding. First he put on socks and underwear. Then he added shirt, pants, shoes, tie and coat. His vision was half as good as it once was, and he was careful not to miss a button or get skin caught in metal. These were the small failings that set him off, that got his breathing out of whack. When it happened--and it happened more than he wanted to admit--Carol forced an inhaler into his mouth to keep his lungs from shutting down--to keep him from turning blue. He thanked god for Carol's strength; she had saved his life on more than one occasion.
Carol was on the other side of their bed, dressing in pink chiffon quickly and without effort. She checked her watch and kept them on schedule. "Let's get a move on, Slow Poke," she teased. "I'm getting' you to the church on time, Mister." She wasn't slowed by having to think about buttons and zippers like Bruce did. She wasn't distracted by the mechanical precision of zipper teeth linking. She just buttoned and zipped.
They moved in front of the dresser mirror and stood with their arms around each other. "You look wonderful, Love," she whispered, and meant it. Bruce never believed her when she complimented his looks. There was the black eye patch, of course, and underneath the jagged hole where his right eye should have been. His cheek, even after several months and many operations, was disfigured--streaked deeply with purple and red scars.
Bruce remembered little of the accident. He recalled walking across the construction site, hard hat on his head and blueprints under his arm. He remembered hearing a cable snap, looking up the see steel girders tipping. When he woke up in the hospital, hooked to a respirator, Carol was sitting in a chair next to his bed. She was barely able to look at the mess of his face through her tears.
Now, in the bedroom, Bruce asked her, "Have I told you today how lucky I am to have you?"
Carol said she could stay like that, arms around each other, forever, but that they should be going. "We want good seats, don't we? I'm not settling for a rear-pew experience." Carol knew this wedding was important. Sarah, the bride-to-be, was Bruce's college girlfriend, his first love. She lived nearby, and she and Bruce had kept in touch through the years--more often since his accident. Carol accepted, reluctantly, that Sarah would always be part of Bruce's life.
User Reviews
Submitted by sinna (user info) at 2006-01-06 05:25:13 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Yeah, Moe, that team sure did suck last night! They just plain
sucked! I've seen teams suck before, but they were the suckiest bunch
of sucks that ever sucked!
-- Homer Simpson
Team Homer
Submitted by fluff (user info) at 2006-01-05 17:50:19 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I fucking hate you alter asshole.
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-01-05 14:05:40 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
What the holy living jesus fuck?
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2006-01-03 17:12:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I actually liked the last one, minus the fact that it direly needed some spacing.
This. Not so great.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-01-03 17:09:55 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
You call THIS "making up"?
Show us your hole, bey-otch. That'll make up for a lot of stuff.
Submitted by NotSteve (user info) at 2006-01-03 16:58:30 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Again, Fuck you.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-01-03 16:53:22 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I'm sad that I spent time reading this.
Submitted by userpete86 (user info) at 2006-01-03 16:30:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I'd negatively rate this... but I'm not sure if I'm doing it properly... Is this good satire on a funny post? A short story that will happen in the future? Possibly a strange anagram of a short story where you created a short story using every letter that the previous story used without omitting a single letter?
That last one would be cool.
Submitted by pantsarestupid (user info) at 2006-01-03 16:22:52 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
How in the hell is this making up for it?
Submitted by proofofpurchase (user info) at 2006-01-03 16:15:52 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Please God, make her stop.