Hereditary Murder - part 10 (445 hits)
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Submitted by Da MagnificAnt Dyldo <lordofduct.at.gmail.com> (View user info) at 2006-01-09 06:58:59 EST
Ummm, another part of the story... I'm not the happiest with it, but I'll see what you guys think.
Part 1 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/79905
Part 2 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/79987
Part 3 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/80099
Part 4 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/80174
Part 5 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/80346
Part 6 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/80414
Part 7 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/81171
Part 8 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/81231
Part 9 - http://www.ubersite.com/m/81285
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Danny is never well informed by his family the details of his families secret lives. All he gets to see is the consequences their actions have on his family. Richard spending a week in the hospital seemed bad enough; but why did he get in that fight and what is he going to do about it? These are things his family will never tell him. Chris and Danny are told fairy tales about their family, but the rest of the town knows the truth and they can't hide it forever.
It has been a little more then a week since the fight behind Sean's apartment and Danny was beginning to anticipate the thrashings he would receive from the seniors. It has now been proven his older brother is a push over and the high schoolers will no longer be afraid to taunt the younger brother of the bad ass Richard. Danny's school had an entire wing used only for the Jr. High schoolers and he wouldn't have to trek into any other part of the school until last hour for Gym. He had a feeling today will be the day because the story of the fight had reached his peers.
"Look at Dorkman, his older brother is just as much a fucking pussy!" Steven pointed at Danny from across the classroom and whispered to his friends.
"Steven that is a second point and not even minutes into class." Ms. Smyth walked over to the black board and struck a hash mark beside Steven's name. Danny snickered from across the class, "That's a point for you as well Mr. Dircman." She wrote 'Dorkman' below Steven's name; the class busted out in quiet laughter.
"That's fucking messed up!" Danny blurted out without thinking, like usual.
"That's another point. OK class, it's time for attendance." Ms. Smyth pulled out a sheet of paper and started calling off name followed by a complimentary "here!"
"Joseph, Crystal, Julian... Julian." Everyone looked around class, "absent, Steven..."
"What about Dorkman? You didn't call the dorkmeister!" Steven pointed out the teacher's failure to say Danny's name which was supposed to be the second on the list.
"We all know Danny is here."
"I thought you weren't allowed to call me that Ms. Smyth?" Danny stopped fussing around his desk and looked up and smiled at his teacher.
"Call you what?"
"Dorkman..."
"I did not."
"Yes you did, you wrote it on the board. You shouldn't be enabling the kids like that."
"Heh, I didn't say it..."
"How fucking childish of you!" Danny cut her off quick pointing out his own administrations immature nature.
"You're calling me immature? Are you going to call your mommy again and have her 'talk' to me again?" The class broke into laughter, "Quiet down kids, it's time for class!"
Danny lowered his head in shame and grimaced at his desktop. The entire town thought he and his family were worthless and this fight didn't help anything. Dreams of moving to Florida passed through his head. Getting away from the hatred no one believed him about, live in a house with food in it and not have to here is father get made out as a drug addict by his mother. It couldn't be true or is it just like the stories he tells his family about town? Does he ignore the apparent truth because it seems so unbelievable?
"Hey, don't listen to those assholes." Lynda leaned over and smacked her hand into his.
"Yeah..." Danny smiled at one of the few people who admitted he existed.
"Here, coffee?" She handed over a giant coffee cup she always brought into class. Danny snatched it up and kicked back a small sip, then a bigger one and finally a decent size gulp. The taste of Vodka burned his throat and he coughed a bit.
"Thanks." He handed the cup back.
"Good stuff ain't it?" She tipped the cup his direction as cheers and smiled and then turned back to her sketch book and went on with her day.
"Hey, you know where Julian is?"
"Hmmm? Julian? I couldn't tell ya; he wasn't here yesterday either."
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Danny spent the day looking over his shoulder. Julian not being in class concerned him even more. In the town they lived in there wasn't much to do if one skipped class. Julian was one of the few who would and he'd spend it in the lavatory smoking marijuana and then getting in a fight in the hall so he could get sent home. Danny knew he was going to receive the beating that day.
He had made it through most the day and now it was time for final hour. He had to walk down the hall and pass the elective hallway where the senior privilege kids hung out before leaving school. Danny could feel it in his gut as he inched down the hall and past the seniors.
"Hey it's a Meyer's boy!" Danny immediately froze, he heard his brother's last name and knew something was about to come his way.
"Tough it up Danny, don't run, running is for pussies." Danny whispered to himself, he knew if he ran he would face an ass whooping ten times worse at home.
"Dude, his name is Dorkman... you know all of Richard's brother's are bastards children!" Another senior yelled out for the entire hallway to hear.
"So I hear your brother is paralyzed and shit! Ha, your family... pussy ass bastards!" Danny turned toward the taunts and looked for Julian amongst them. Thank God he was no where to be found.
"Let me see you take on 5 guys at once!" Danny yelled down the hall.
"Ha, don't take that attitude with us punk. You looking for an ass beating?" One of the smaller kids punched his fist into his palm, "keep walking pussy."
"Nah, little fucker aughta hear this. Learn what a bastard he really is!" Another one chimed in, "You always walked around here with your head high because of your big brother. Open your fat mouth and shit, well it's time to learn different."
"Did you fail grammar school? How'd you even get senior privilege?" Danny smirked at the kids and held his piss at the same time.
"Oh your gonna get it lil' punk!"
"Wow,wow, hold up Eric." A hand wrapped around the kids body and held him back, "be careful you don't need Richard on your ass."
"Richard is just a fucking punk... didn't you here? He was put in the hospital."
"Yeah, but now he is out."
"So, we could easily put him back."
"Haven't you noticed something strange since Richard got out?"
"What?"
"Tell me this... where is Damian and Julian? They haven't been around for a couple days. I even tried calling them and the phone was disconnected."
"Huh..." Danny smiled and turned away from the kids and continued on to gym class. Behind him he could hear some slight bickering about the matter.
"What? Dude, are you saying they dead?"
"Are you dumb shit for brains... that'd be on the news."
"Nah, no one would kill them and their entire family bro, remember the phone was disconnected."
The voices faded out into the regular analog sounds of the hallway.
User Reviews
Submitted by ripple (user info) at 2006-01-09 11:37:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
a little disjointed. if you make it relevent in the next one, id give it a 1.5. but as it is. . .
oh, and try to proofread a little more.
Submitted by Ditka (user info) at 2006-01-09 08:41:23 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
that took you 2 hours?
not being facetious, i'm serious. I'll read the previous parts from the beginning to see if i can make some sense out of it.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-01-09 08:02:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I thought this was ace.
Submitted by lordofduct (user info) at 2006-01-09 07:30:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Thank you...
Oh and for a warning
All the parts of this thing I'm writing is written in less then 2 hours. It is a rule I set for writing this so I could see what would come out of it. -2 this one away if you'd like I personally was upset with it myself, but it's a rule I set from part 1 and I can't quit now.
Submitted by MavisMing (user info) at 2006-01-09 07:28:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
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Submitted by fudge_me (user info) at 2006-01-09 07:01:50 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
This is the worst piece of shit ever. I can't believe I took the time to read this shit. Do you know what I'm going to have to do now? I'm gonna have to go kill myself... thanks a lot. Asshole.