That fateful day (456 hits)
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Submitted by The_Cole_Guy (View user info) at 2006-01-24 13:28:40 EST
"Ya'll just gonna sit there and jib-jab or are you going to get to work!" Chief bellowed. "It's time for chow and we need people on the line".
"Right on that, Chief!" Stew replied, grumbling a whole string of expletives under his breath as he dumped his tray. It was only 1100 but the temperature was already well over 100 degrees and getting hotter. "At least I'm not out there helping the "deck apes" refuel", thought Stew. The days were getting easier and he just found out that he would be transferred to the reefers in a couple days. Only two more months and he would be back with "R-div" and welding again.
As he walked into the galley, he could see the cooks and a couple "cranks" setting up the line for chow. It would be fajitas again. For some reason, the smell of lube oil and JP-5 always made him motivated for work. He fell into line and started to bring a pan of water to the line when time seemed to stop.
The whole room went white and Stew's body started to shake. No matter how loud he screamed, only a high-pitched squeal, not unlike a boiling kettle of water could be heard. "Help me, I'm being electrocuted", was all that he could manage to say as his body was lifted off of the ground.
When he opened his eyes, everything was dark. There was a thick, acrid smoke in the air and the smell of diesel fuel all around him. "Holy shit", thought Stew, "there must have been a fuel line rupture". He started to check his injuries and surroundings before hustling off to perform damage control when he noticed his right forearm in an unnatural angle. He was buried waste deep in debris and a small refrigerator, the size of a college dorm fridge, was lying across his knees. He felt down his legs, only to feel a bone and the sticky feeling of fresh blood. Shock had set in and there was nothing but a minor aching going through his body. Panic sets in and suddenly everything goes black again.
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Submitted by GuinnessSince1759 (user info) at 2006-01-25 01:09:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
saldy to disagree with the others...I liked this post.
Submitted by the_cole_guy (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:46:30 EST (#)
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Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:39:16 (#)
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Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:34:32 (#)
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You forgot the beginning and the end.
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...and you put this crap in place of the good part in the middle.
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Well we all can't have your writing ability skrapmetal
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:39:16 EST (#)
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Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:34:32 (#)
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You forgot the beginning and the end.
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...and you put this crap in place of the good part in the middle.
Submitted by the_cole_guy (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:37:35 EST (#)
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Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:34:32 (#)
Ranking: 0
You forgot the beginning and the end.
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Where I started was really the only thing that I remember from the beginging. There is more to the end of the story, actually a lot more, that I just haven't written yet.
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:35:56 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
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Submitted by Jeanneee (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:34:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
You forgot the beginning and the end.
Submitted by the_cole_guy (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:32:39 EST (#)
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No, I was thinking that the best way to write a true story for this site was to put it all in third person.
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:31:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Is this the script from a Steven Seagal movie?
"I'm only a cook."
Submitted by the_cole_guy (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:30:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Damn, the spacing didn't translate over.
Submitted by ubetidid (user info) at 2006-01-24 13:30:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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