Igneous Kane - Part 1 (835 hits)
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Submitted by Snark << snarkk.at.gmail.com (View user info) at 2006-01-26 03:10:24 EST
Igneous Fall - http://www.ubersite.com/m/79673
Igneous Intent - http://www.ubersite.com/m/79748
Igneous Ngana - http://www.ubersite.com/m/80031
Igneous Interrupted - http://www.ubersite.com/m/80458
Igneous Impervious - http://www.ubersite.com/m/81600
Igneous Delaney - http://www.ubersite.com/m/81983
Igneous Dilemma - http://www.ubersite.com/m/82492
Igneous Pitt - http://www.ubersite.com/m/82563
Igneous Inside - http://www.ubersite.com/m/82666
Igneous Run - http://www.ubersite.com/m/82844
IGNEOUS KANE - PART 1
Once upon a time, in a world grim and dreary, there lived a girl.
Her name was Darla Dalia Penance and she languished in a dark house under the vile tutelage of her evil father.
She was a creature of beauty and lust. She was called a Succubus by those who'd never felt her touch and a Goddess by those who had.
For her entire life, she remained a prisoner in that dark place because despite the purity of her being, she was different from her family. They came from a particularly tainted bloodline. Her father and brother were both students of a magic wicked and foul, but she was not born with different talents, so they reviled her. The kept her locked away, for fear the rest of the world might know their shame.
Then one day, when all seemed lost, a man visited her.
His name was Luis and he was a friend of her father, or at least, as much of a friend as anyone practicing their dark art could have. He was a man of the same bloodline and just as evil, and he had hatched plans to stop her father from completing a ritual that would turn him into something called a Necrosiac.
He bade Dara visit him in his room one evening, and she did, thinking that Luis was her friend as well. When she arrived, there was a strange woman there. She too was introduced as a friend, but when Dara let her guard down and took her hand in friendship, she realized too late that the woman was a Seer.
The Seer forced herself into Dara's mind. She filled it with the image of a symbol, and a man, and the notion that she loved him, for it was Luis intention that she would go to him and use the symbol to put him on the path of destroying her father's plans for the future.
The notions and feelings implanted by the Seer burned in Dara's head for many weeks, until one day, she fled the home she was never allowed to leave to visit the man from her dreams; never truly seeing the irony that a woman who was born to bend men to her will, was risking everything for one she'd never met.
Luis Penance watched her go and smiled because his plans were coming to fruition, and for the most part, they did, but he miscalculated how far she would go for the sake of false love, and he miscalculated the twisted lust her brother bore for her, for he had seen her leave and followed.
Dara was supposed to become the man's lover and lead him to the house of her family. She was supposed to show him a symbol to lead him to a book that Luis mind was bent on retrieving, but the lie of her love burned her as deep as she'd burned any man before. When the time came, and she was finally face to face with the prince burned into her mine, she used her power to make him her lover. She carved runes that would protect him from her families Necromantic magic, deep into his back, and then when she realized her brother had come to collect her, she put a hole in her heart rather than be removed from her lover's presence forever.
And that is how this whole mess started more or less - at least - that's how I would explain it to the son I will never have.
It's a romantic telling to be sure but it ain't entirely wrong.
Sure, Dara is probably as screwed up as the rest of her family. I don't think anyone could grow up in this house and remain entirely sane, least of all a Dame with her looks.
Sure, the man of her dreams turned out to be more bastard than prince, but I need to think of things this way friends. I need that romantic notion cuz I feel like I'm drowning in filth, and it's the only thing that's keeping me from losing myself in it like I almost did after I met the beast upstairs.
So give me a break will yah? Stay with me a bit and try not to judge me too harshly. I ain't a good man, I'll grant you that, but I ain't half as bad as the two men on the other side of this door. I've been a fool and a pawn, but I've got some things figured out, and when I pass from here to there and stand tall before The Man, maybe you can speak up in my behalf and say "I know him. His name is Igneous Kane and at least he tried."
I'm pulling as much strength from the brick wall I'm leaning against as I can. Behind me is a trail of fresh wet red. It leads from me in a winding path of splatters and footprints to the lift that sits grinding and sputtering as shot out gears try to lift it. A bit further beyond is a metal door with a plain white sign labeled 'CAGES'. Muted howls and grunts sound out occasionally from the other side of it. They're not quite human but close enough to tell me that beyond it is where they keep the majority of their pets, at least, the ones they don't use for furniture or sex.
To my right at the other end of the hall is another door. This one is labeled 'Armory' and has a thick lock dangling from it. Inside is everything I need to finish the job and then some, but the lock is too sturdy for a bullet and I don't have the key so I guess I'll have to make due with what I have.
I'm leaning from the wall as much as I dare and peeking through the small window in the doors immediately before me, the thick metal double doors beneath the sign labeled 'Temple'.
The window is little more than a slit but it's big enough to let me see things that make me wish it didn't exist.
A row of stained wooden tables sit in the center of the room I'm peering into. The wood of each is scarred, chipped, and covered with an array of chains and straps. They are operating tables, or torture tables, or both.
The walls are red brick and covered with an array of instruments. They range medieval to modern, from toothed to scooped, and every one of them is rusted and stained, because this isn't a place for the living and the dead don't need to be sterilized, they just need to be cut and ripped and pried a part.
On the far right side of the room is a row of low cages. They are empty save one, where I can see the huddled form of a shivering boy.
Two of the tables have bodies on them. One is covered in a white blanket and there is an exhausted looking man sitting on a chair next to it. His mouth works mechanically as he chants words I can't hear through the thick doors and a thick chain is wrapped around his neck.
I can't see the body he's chanting to but I don't have to, to know it's Dara. I don't need to see her face to feel her pull. It wraps me like a warm tropical wind and whispers sweet promises of an encounter renewed.
The body on the table beside her is partially obscured by two arguing men. They are grey haired and dressed in black. One wears a suit, the other a thin robe over silk pajamas. The room is soundproofed somehow. I can't make out what they're saying but I'll bet ya a sawbuck that the shorter of the two - the one in the robe - is Paulos. He's angrier than the other and his features are more rugged. I can see some of his children in it, and nothing of them in the hawkish face of the other.
Yeah, the tall sharp featured one is Luis alright, he keeps glancing at the boy like a thief at a bank teller.
One of the two is gonna die right now, One of them is going down, but for the life of me I can't decide which.
I got one runed bullet and two men. I got a few rounds in my roscoe and a lot less than half a drum in the tommy. I got what it takes to put them both down long enough to make sure I ain't gonna miss with the bullet I took from Martini, but there's no way I can beat them both. I can chew the second one up pretty good, but in the end, he's gonna win... so who then?
Paulos Penance, the man who would be Necrosiac? (whatever that is), or Luis Penance, orchestrater of my demise.
Sounds easy don't it? One bullet in Luis, then Paulos reaps his sons revenge.
Yeah, Kill the man who brought me to this end.
Except.
I know what Paulos will do to me. He'll kill me then bring me back, and I'll become another tortured soul bound to whatever perverse blasphemy fits his whim.
I gotta make a choice. Time and resolve is pooling crimson at my feet. That elevator can't be the only way down here...
The men quit arguing and take a couple steps towards the cages, and suddenly I can see Ngana. She's on the table next to Dara and she's been butchered. Her death face is frozen in agony but untouched, while everything below it is a mess of meat and glistening tubes, and there, crucified to the portion of the wall that was blocked by the Penances, the partially slumped body of Martini himself.
His once trademark white and blue pinstriped suit is stained pink and red. He's pinned to the wall in a dozen places with what looks to be iron spikes, and he's snarling at the men with the kind of voracity only the dead possess.
He snarls at them, then stops and sniffs the air before turns towards the door and howling.
I can't hear it but I see it and I can't help but wonder if it's undead rage he's shooting at me or genuine hate because I took the one thing that could have saved him?
The Necromancer's turn too. They know that howl. They know the hunger in the voice of the uncontrolled undead when it catches the scent of the living.
Realization of what it's seeing registers in their faces, and their twin stares turn from it, to the direction of its gaze, just in time to see me lurch through the door and level the tommy.
Right now, at this very second, I'm thinking to hell with fairy tales and killin choices.
To hell with murderous plans and finding the best way to die.
Sometimes you just gotta pull the trigger and see who goes down and who gets back up first.
Sometimes you gotta stick your tongue in Death's mouth and pray it don't bite down too hard.
My tongue's all the way in friend. It's in so far I can taste the Reaper's bile, and it ain't never coming out.
User Reviews
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-30 15:12:55 EST (#)
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Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2006-01-30 14:54:04 (#)
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Enter a comment here (optional): Man O Man I likes me some Donkey Lovin.
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2006-01-30 14:54:04 EST (#)
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Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-29 22:52:55 EST (#)
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Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-01-29 18:44:47 (#)
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Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-29 05:11:23 (#)
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I'm almost done part 2
It's a masterpiece of hedenestic literary felacio
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Hopefully it's a masterpiece of spelling, too.
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Nope
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-01-29 19:00:14 EST (#)
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Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-01-29 18:44:47 (#)
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Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-29 05:11:23 (#)
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I'm almost done part 2
It's a masterpiece of hedenestic literary felacio
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Hopefully it's a masterpiece of spelling, too.
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BWAHAHAHAHA!! The entire series kicks ass.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-01-29 18:44:47 EST (#)
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Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-29 05:11:23 (#)
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I'm almost done part 2
It's a masterpiece of hedenestic literary felacio
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Hopefully it's a masterpiece of spelling, too.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-29 05:11:23 EST (#)
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I'm almost done part 2
It's a masterpiece of hedenestic literary felacio
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-01-29 02:32:31 EST (#)
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Ohhhh, because it's meant to be one chapter but you're submitting it in two parts because we're too lazy to read more than 500 words strung together.
I get it. Eventually.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-01-29 02:31:36 EST (#)
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And hey, why is this called Igneous Kane part 1?
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-29 00:01:22 EST (#)
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hahahaha
I dunno.
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2006-01-28 22:25:55 EST (#)
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double oops
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2006-01-28 22:25:46 EST (#)
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hahaha, oops
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2006-01-28 22:25:10 EST (#)
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snark, why are you angering the noobs?
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-28 22:18:12 EST (#)
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Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-28 03:23:22 (#)
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Don't stop posting.
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Hahaha a retialiatory 1
Submitted by solipsism (user info) at 2006-01-28 21:01:39 EST (#)
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Don't stop posting.
Submitted by pen_name (user info) at 2006-01-28 16:46:05 EST (#)
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hahaha
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-01-28 16:32:43 EST (#)
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?
So, if someone voices an opinion that's negative, you get upset. If someone does not voice their negative opinion, you become indignant.
I think you need to work on how you receive criticism.
Submitted by Off_The_Wagon (user info) at 2006-01-28 14:54:31 EST (#)
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Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-01-28 10:59:49 (#)
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Off the Wagon, I didn't like your balls post either. I just didn't bother to rate it.
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Way to voice your opinion. You must be an American.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-28 13:06:58 EST (#)
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Submitted by Off_The_Wagon (user info) at 2006-01-28 04:05:25 (#)
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Homophobic, are we? I bet your the kind of insecure asshole who only watches lesbian porn because you think Harry Smear's titfuck scene will make you gay.
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hahahaha what the fuck?
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-01-28 10:59:49 EST (#)
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Off the Wagon, I didn't like your balls post either. I just didn't bother to rate it.
Submitted by Off_The_Wagon (user info) at 2006-01-28 04:05:25 EST (#)
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Homophobic, are we? I bet your the kind of insecure asshole who only watches lesbian porn because you think Harry Smear's titfuck scene will make you gay.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-28 03:47:25 EST (#)
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Not being an appreciator of balls was probably the first thing that set me off.
Oh wait... there goes the sarcasm thing...
Ok... how do I put this.
I don't like balls.
That better?
Nope, still sarcastic.
I HONESTLY DIDN'T THINK IT WAS FUNNY.
How's that?
My reply on your post wasn't good enough?
To me, Your post sucked balls (Pun Intended)
I don't give a shit what 13 people on this site thought of your post. I've seen Tubgirl pics get positive ratings here.
Submitted by Off_The_Wagon (user info) at 2006-01-28 03:37:04 EST (#)
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Evidently, dick jokes are above you. I honestly don't see how 13 some odd people can think something is funny, and one person can't rationally say that I shouldn't even bother. There are differences of opinion, to be sure, but then there is just being a dick. Did it offend you that something so purile could be ranked so high? If that isn't the case, I'd like you to tell me why it wasn't funny without dipping into that shitty well of sarcasm.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-28 03:26:32 EST (#)
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Elitist how?
Submitted by Off_The_Wagon (user info) at 2006-01-28 03:21:12 EST (#)
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Fuck off elitist.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-28 03:13:56 EST (#)
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Retaliatory -2 any time now.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-27 04:27:58 EST (#)
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Thanks,
Finale should be up tomorrow sometime depending on how busy I get.
Submitted by RonArtestPunch (user info) at 2006-01-27 02:02:32 EST (#)
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I sat down and read everyone of these today.
Bad ass man...
any idea when you'll post the finale?
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-26 23:51:57 EST (#)
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He's a friend and a distant relative. They both have the same last name.
It all comes together next story.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-01-26 23:20:59 EST (#)
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"I'll have to make due with what I have"
That's 'make DO'.
I liked this a lot...the last line about french kissing death was friggin' awesome, dude. The catch-up portion was appreciated, too.
I'm a little confused though...Luis is a friend of Dalia's father, but he has the same last name...he's of the same bloodline, but I don't really know what that means.
I have to go back and re-read some of this stuff. I tend to read your stories too fast sometimes because I'm eager to see what happens. Bad habit of mine.
Submitted by Benny (user info) at 2006-01-26 21:08:36 EST (#)
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Very cool. I wondered at times why the bad guys labelled the doors though. If it was your creepy mansion wouldn't you know what room was for what?
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-01-26 19:33:55 EST (#)
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missed this.
whoops.
Submitted by Yes (user info) at 2006-01-26 19:00:09 EST (#)
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you rock my socks all the way to the bank.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-26 17:25:16 EST (#)
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Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2006-01-26 17:12:36 (#)
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Gneeeeerrrgh. I've noticed that this character sounds a lot like Bickerstaff. Not that that's a bad thing or anything, just that it is.
Oh, and you rock.
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He sounds street is all.
And thank you :)
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2006-01-26 17:12:36 EST (#)
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Gneeeeerrrgh. I've noticed that this character sounds a lot like Bickerstaff. Not that that's a bad thing or anything, just that it is.
Oh, and you rock.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2006-01-26 15:07:56 EST (#)
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Submitted by shitfuck (user info) at 2006-01-26 13:34:50 EST (#)
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Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-01-26 13:14:15 EST (#)
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fucking 'a' man.
Submitted by wookie (user info) at 2006-01-26 10:09:06 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2006-01-26 09:26:13 EST (#)
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When you went from the narrator explaining things to actually being involved in the story confused me at first, but I read it again and it's more like a friend catching you up on parts of a story you need to understand what he's talking about. Great, per usual.
Submitted by MyNameIsTim (user info) at 2006-01-26 09:01:19 EST (#)
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i don't think you had to cut it in half. anyone who's reading these wouldn't have minded if it was long...i wish it were longer, as i did with all the others.
i sure hope the broad can heal wounds and kill bad guys...
Submitted by sheckynecky (user info) at 2006-01-26 08:53:29 EST (#)
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Great chapter. Very smooth reading, except for the name mix up. I give it two out of two rating point thingies.
Submitted by HadToBeDone (user info) at 2006-01-26 08:32:08 EST (#)
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Yuh....Yuh......Yuh.....
WOW.
Submitted by Wisher (user info) at 2006-01-26 04:56:03 EST (#)
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Darla Dalia.
Some of the best writinng I've seen on here in my few months. Well, almost the best.
Submitted by Dreg (user info) at 2006-01-26 03:39:40 EST (#)
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+2 for being awake
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-01-26 03:11:22 EST (#)
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Yup, had to cut it in half.
Second half is mostly done.
Looks like I'll have to post the Epilogue seperately, so two more posts after this.