as she lay (951 hits)
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Submitted by Corn Nugget (View user info) at 2006-02-01 23:37:44 EST
The linoleum was blue and grey with a slight spattering of red.
The red was from the wound in her side. The wound in her side was from me.
Earlier in the night, as we sat on the sofa discussing racism, she chortled. She laughed at my ideas and scoffed at my nightmares. Her words directly contrasted with my thoughts, and our bodies, while wound together, distracted me from my feelings.
My initial feeling of lust- of wanting to slide into her and feel her. To fill her up, consume her while constricting my own manhood. I wanted to touch every curve on her body, acost her, inter her. I wanted to see her face while I pulled her hair, making her arch away from me.
My secondary feeling of love (could it be?)- when she talked about fate, religion, philosophy. When she laughed at my humor and thought about my inquiries. She furrowed her brows while she pondered my life, she caressed my hand while she listened to my stories.
So it came, my ideas of mice and of men. My thoughts on culture and freedom and fairness. So it came, her frown and her pondering me. Her quips about mortality and rage and history.
And then, my thoughts turned from niggers to knives. A serrated blade in my hand.
In her side.
And the blood flowing freely, within all the tile.
The blood cascading gently down the stairs.
And I thought- oh it's me, my visions. My life.
Who can keep me from these morbid doings?
My wife.
And in the eternal search for a woman as such, I've berated all others of those who I've touched.
But it's not me, it's not my fault, mother has created a demon.
For those final words, I'll let her rest....
In my semen.
User Reviews
Submitted by leilani (user info) at 2006-05-04 11:38:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 i meant
Submitted by leilani (user info) at 2006-05-04 11:22:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-02-06 11:17:07 (#)
Ranking: 0
Possessions never meant anything to me
I'm not crazy
Well that's not true, I've got a bed and a guitar
And a dog named dog who pisses on my floor
That's right, I've got a floor
So what, so what, so what?
I've got pockets full of kleenex and lint and holes
Where everything important to me just seems to fall right down my leg
and on the floor
My closest friend linoleum
Linoleum
Supports my head, gives me something to believe
That's me on the beachside combing the sand
Metal meter in my hand
Sporting a pocket full of change
That's me on the street with a violin under my chin
Playing with a grin, singing gibberish
That's me on the back of the bus
That's me in the cell
That's me inside your head
That's me inside your head
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heh i was JUST listening to this song. good one.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-05-04 11:08:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
really interesting pacing.
Submitted by kimmy02721 (user info) at 2006-02-25 21:41:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
..?...
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-02-06 11:17:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Possessions never meant anything to me
I'm not crazy
Well that's not true, I've got a bed and a guitar
And a dog named dog who pisses on my floor
That's right, I've got a floor
So what, so what, so what?
I've got pockets full of kleenex and lint and holes
Where everything important to me just seems to fall right down my leg
and on the floor
My closest friend linoleum
Linoleum
Supports my head, gives me something to believe
That's me on the beachside combing the sand
Metal meter in my hand
Sporting a pocket full of change
That's me on the street with a violin under my chin
Playing with a grin, singing gibberish
That's me on the back of the bus
That's me in the cell
That's me inside your head
That's me inside your head
Submitted by PokeyPecker (user info) at 2006-02-02 18:51:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I enjoy fucking fruit and dairy products and byproducts.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-02-02 18:45:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
hahahaha wtf? hahahah
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-02-02 18:39:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
let's go camping
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2006-02-02 16:55:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I seriously have no idea what happened with this post. I was drunk, about to take off, and I figured, "hey, I'll write something" and then this happened, and it felt GREAT.
So as far as why certian things are how they are or what anything means... I have no idea.
I felt possessed whilst writing!
Submitted by remote_narcotic (user info) at 2006-02-02 14:33:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Semen always makes me smile.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-02-02 07:15:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This was scattered and weird, but still interesting. I particularly liked the little rhyme at the end. It's hard to understand why he did it, and I'm not sure what the racism implications had to do with anything...I thought that was getting a little off-topic.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:43:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nah, it's not abnormal. The only real difference between men and women, I reckon, is anatomical. Everything else is just learned gender disticntion preached by society.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:26:59 EST (#)
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Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:23:06 (#)
Ranking: 2
That's horrible Red.
Never cared for quickies myself. Just seems like too much effort for what is essentially a wank you can show off to a girl. Cause that's all a quickie is; sex with no real emotional involvement. If anything the action is to 'get rid' of an erection, you know?
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See that was my point. A fancy wank. But apparently it is abnormal for a bloke to think this way.
I got bark and mud up my arse as well.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:23:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
That's horrible Red.
Never cared for quickies myself. Just seems like too much effort for what is essentially a wank you can show off to a girl. Cause that's all a quickie is; sex with no real emotional involvement. If anything the action is to 'get rid' of an erection, you know?
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:16:50 EST (#)
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Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:13:52 (#)
Ranking: 2
Hence why your current thoughts on sex are to be praised for your performance, power and so on? To stand above the quivering mound of woman flesh like a conqouring giant? To have her prostrate and enthralled before you, sort of thing?
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Well. Kinda.
Now I feel all silly. I got bollocked for this in the past too. "sometimes you just want a quickie - stop messing about with all that shit".
I got a wet arse from the grass that day too. Manchester park is no place for a quick shag.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:13:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Hence why your current thoughts on sex are to be praised for your performance, power and so on? To stand above the quivering mound of woman flesh like a conqouring giant? To have her prostrate and enthralled before you, sort of thing?
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:12:45 EST (#)
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And now Will Young is on the radio. Could this get any worse?
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:11:14 EST (#)
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Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:06:07 (#)
Ranking: 2
Well of course you've done a good job. I mean if you'd done a crap job you'd known you've done a crap job, just like if you do a crap job at anything. You know. 'Cause you were, like, there.
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I mean if you just use her as a fleshy cum recepticle. It's just bad form.
I am majorly grumpy today. My paycheque has been assailed by the student loans company, payroll have taken 2 months to pay me all that they owe me - which means I seem to have been taxed at a higher rate on some of my income. Sepp Blatter still hasn't told me if I have or have not got tickets for the world cup. And as it's now late morning I'm guessing I'm going to get a 'fuck off English swine' message from the Swiss.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-02-02 06:06:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Well of course you've done a good job. I mean if you'd done a crap job you'd known you've done a crap job, just like if you do a crap job at anything. You know. 'Cause you where, like, there.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-02-02 05:54:55 EST (#)
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Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-02-02 05:30:49 (#)
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So, like, is this a woman's idea of how men percieve sex? 'cause you've done made a minor error there.
See a man essentially either want to cradle the laydeee as he comes inside her or he wants to hurt her with his mighty pork sword and make her cry.
As a man I often wonder about the females perspective on sex, as you'd expect, and how much they feel a man's ejaculation inside them, whether they find it dirty and repplant or warm and tender like a nice warm bath.
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Warm and tender like a warm bath Berty.
However, you have forgotten about the man's desire to impress. Major thing for me - I want them to gasp and say nice things about my prowess. Ego.
Cradling is good too - but you want to know you've done a good job.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-02-02 05:30:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
So, like, is this a woman's idea of how men percieve sex? 'cause you've done made a minor error there.
See a man essentially either want to cradle the laydeee as he comes inside her or he wants to hurt her with his mighty pork sword and make her cry.
As a man I often wonder about the females perspective on sex, as you'd expect, and how much they feel a man's ejaculation inside them, whether they find it dirty and repplant or warm and tender like a nice warm bath.
Submitted by forthewin (user info) at 2006-02-02 01:13:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I ain't quite sure what's going on, this post screwed up my head.
First he wanted to do her, but now he just done killed her dead.
Sometimes it seemed like poetry, sometimes just broken spaces.
Something about some messed up guy, who was being a dirty racist.
Submitted by belowground (user info) at 2006-02-02 01:09:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Well, i'll give you this. The ending caught me totally off guard.
Submitted by AsshOly (user info) at 2006-02-02 01:04:39 EST (#)
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this sounds like the story i'm trying to write right now. I'm about to murder the wife too, like in the next paragraph. i dont know how the story ends yet though.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-02-02 00:53:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
interesting train of thought
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-02-02 00:43:32 EST (#)
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"other peoples lives
are alot more interesting
cause they aint mine.
other peoples lives
are alot more innocent."
Submitted by coocoocachoo (user info) at 2006-02-02 00:38:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Now I really want to sleep with you.
Submitted by Lisa (user info) at 2006-02-02 00:09:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
You're a fucking weirdo.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2006-02-01 23:59:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Humm
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2006-02-01 23:55:19 EST (#)
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He wanted to screw her and he killed her instead?
What psychotic ruin goes on in his head?
Submitted by Jacobt26 (user info) at 2006-02-01 23:44:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Needs more Necrophilia.
Submitted by Herpes (user info) at 2006-02-01 23:40:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Fucking Psycho...
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2006-02-01 23:39:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
what the hell is this? It seemed almost poetic when I wrote it.