UberTines: Do you realize? (1088 hits)
Category: RomanceRating: 1.35 on 36 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Crystle <crystlesun.at.aol.com> (View user info) at 2006-02-02 22:19:39 EST
She closed her eyes and moaned deep in her throat as her senses were overwhelmed by the gush of warm liquid velvet that filled her mouth. Morgan was so engrossed by the experience that it seemed like her world stopped for a moment. She felt the sugar hit her blood stream and the tempo of her heart picked up. Theo walked into the room at that moment, and stopped, his jaw dropping at the sight. Her head was thrown back, her cheeks were flushed and she had an expression of ecstasy on her face so intense that she glowed with it. His throat went dry and he lost all thought - except one...
"Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face?"
As Morgan returned to awareness, Theo moved closer. She opened her eyes, looked up at him and smiled, stretching out her hand to take his. The warm afternoon sun streamed in through the sheer curtains, creating a glow in the richly appointed room, surrounding Morgan with white light. She stood, dark and lovely, stunning in her red satin gown.
Theo took her hand in his. "You look phenomenal. Did I interrupt anything?"
"Oh no, I was just enjoying a truffle. Would you like one?"
As he picked his truffle from the box, Theo mentally went through the 5 years that had brought them to this point. He thought of the extensive preparation, the grueling training, the agonizing sickness, the intense loneliness of leaving behind loved ones... with little or no contact for months on end. But it had all been worth it.
He remembered most vividly the moment, just about 8 hours after launch, when Morgan had turned to him and said, "Do you realize we're floating in space?" And as the tears glistened on her face, he held her gently and softly whispered "Do you realize that happiness makes you cry?" just before he kissed her.
It had been hailed as the "best scene on the small screen" for 2036.
What a memory! He was still amazed that they had made the cut. Thousands of eager actors had lined up auditioning for months on end to be stars of the first reality show actually shot in space. Of course, it helped that they had both worked on soap operas for years, and were well known and already loved by the American people. The producers had wanted to guarantee the show's success...and rather than use unknowns and risk losing all the money when "Stars in the Sky" tanked, they went with big names, knowing that should the 'reality' part flop, they could script a drama and have the actors carry it.
Morgan cut into Theo's thoughts. "Theo? What's wrong? I can see that your mind has gone somewhere far away"
"I was just remembering Antonia, and how she felt about having the baby here. Makes me think of life, and how quickly it goes by. Do you ever regret leaving your family and friends behind and being up here? I worry about Mom dying and not having the chance to say goodbye."
"Oh, Theo... You're so melancholy! No, I have no regrets. I left my life behind for a reason. I need to be here, I need to be with you. As for dying, do you realize that everyone you know will someday die? What is important is how you live, and that you love. When someone you know nears the end of life, tell them you love them, and instead of saying all your goodbyes, let them know you realize that life goes fast."
"It's just that sometimes I feel so far away, that I'm missing something by being here, and not on earth. It's HARD to make the good things last. One day you wake up, and you're 40. You see the fingers of light creeping over the horizon. You go to the window, draw back the curtain, and you realize the sun doesn't go down. It's just an illusion caused by the world spinning 'round. Time goes by, but really, nothing changes. It makes you cling harder to what you have here and now."
Morgan gently touched his arm "I'm here, we are together for now. We can make this time beautiful. As for Bella, call her and tell her you love her. Send her flowers for Valentines Day. She knows, but it's nice to be reminded."
As he turned to embrace her, Theo murmured "Do you realize you have the most beautiful face? Do you realize..."
Flaming Lips - Do You Realize?
Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face??
Do you realize we're floating in space??
Do you realize that happiness makes you cry??
Do you realize that everyone you know someday will die??
And instead of saying all of your goodbyes
Let them know you realize that life goes fast
It's hard to make the good things last
You realize the sun doesn't go down
It's just an illusion caused by the world spinning round
Do you realize that you have the most beautiful face??
Do you realize??
User Reviews
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2007-09-25 15:40:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Mmmm...chocolate.
Submitted by Danger_Ranger (user info) at 2006-07-05 20:04:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i'm at work you ditzy yank.
Submitted by no_one (user info) at 2006-03-15 15:32:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by GuinnessSince1759 (user info) at 2006-02-03 02:37:36 (#)
Ranking: 2
FUCK YOU I LOVE TRUFFLES. Good post.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-02-17 16:14:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Sorry!!!!
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-02-17 16:14:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Come play with us: http://www.ubersite.com/m/84210
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-02-06 19:19:01 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
What you tried to do with this post just didn't work for me, Crystle...but don't feel bad, because what you were going for is NOT easy to do.
Submitted by kissmyarse (user info) at 2006-02-06 13:20:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked it, a lot.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2006-02-06 13:09:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
And Rad.. don't worry about it!
You always sound creepy.....
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2006-02-06 13:07:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Wanted to wait until the end of the "voting" so that it wouldn't seem like I'm whining and trying to change ratings.
This was a bit a different style for me.
I specifically chose to base this on the song.. which I have never heard, so I built it around the written lyrics. I also chose to not have a story, per se, but to instead give a peak at what might be termed a "snapshot" that the lyrics brought to mind. (Too bad Uber demands story lines)
The overblown diaglogue caused by the lyrics - that's why they were soap actors.
I had fun cranking this out, but it's not something I'm incredibly proud of.
Congratulations Orgasmatron...
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-02-04 16:49:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
if you know what I mean.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-02-04 16:49:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I have no idea how to express how the first paragraph made me feel without sounding creepy.
Submitted by Viciousriffs (user info) at 2006-02-03 16:04:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Chupacabra!
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-02-03 15:23:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by VelvetElvis (user info) at 2006-02-03 00:57:18 (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-02-03 00:40:20 (#)
Ranking: -1
This wasn't really a valentines story as much as it was a few paragraphs with as many lyrics from a Flaming Lips song crammed in as was humanly possible -- and then the lyrics were listed at the end, just for safety's sake.
Sorry Crystle. There's no story here.
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agree. not enough here to even call derivative
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though i just can't give a negative rating for anything that includes truffles.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-02-03 13:28:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I've read this four times now and I'm still very much on the fence about it.
I think the fact that most of the song is incorporated into the story does it a disservice. Maybe that's just my own familiarity with the song, though, and that I can't buy that characters would speak like that when having a conversation. If that's the case, that's my fault and not yours.
Regardless, I think I'd liked to have seen more of the story and less of the lyrics.
The idea you have is an interesting one, and it would be worth seeing what more you can pull out of it.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-02-03 13:17:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
alright, a little higher than 1.5 cause I did like it.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-02-03 13:15:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
+1.5, I went back and forth on this for a little while. I see what thecaes is saying but it is well written.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-02-03 13:08:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Lechuga (user info) at 2006-02-03 11:47:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Word up. This was good.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-02-03 11:47:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
just felt kinda meh about this. and now i feel the need to apologize.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-02-03 11:46:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
"you realize the sun doesn't go down- it's just an illusion caused by the world spinning 'round."
I rated fairly; tried not to allow my adoration for the song affect my rating.
This was really good.
Submitted by SiskelandFatboy (user info) at 2006-02-03 09:03:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Hey You! Long time no hear.
Submitted by Badlands (user info) at 2006-02-03 08:55:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Nice.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-02-03 05:18:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
nearly smiled.
Submitted by GuinnessSince1759 (user info) at 2006-02-03 02:37:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
FUCK YOU I LOVE TRUFFLES. Good post.
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-02-03 02:21:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
*sighs*
we're floating in space...
Submitted by VelvetElvis (user info) at 2006-02-03 00:57:18 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-02-03 00:40:20 (#)
Ranking: -1
This wasn't really a valentines story as much as it was a few paragraphs with as many lyrics from a Flaming Lips song crammed in as was humanly possible -- and then the lyrics were listed at the end, just for safety's sake.
Sorry Crystle. There's no story here.
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agree. not enough here to even call derivative
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-02-03 00:40:20 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
This wasn't really a valentines story as much as it was a few paragraphs with as many lyrics from a Flaming Lips song crammed in as was humanly possible -- and then the lyrics were listed at the end, just for safety's sake.
Sorry Crystle. There's no story here.
Submitted by ScottPeterson (user info) at 2006-02-02 23:43:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ghirardelli Chocolate
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2006-02-02 23:28:29 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
no.. he remembered the previous 5 years that had brought them to this point...
Submitted by fried-green-potatoes (user info) at 2006-02-02 23:26:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
"As he picked his truffle from the box, Theo mentally went through the 5 years that had brought them to this point."
Remembrance of Things Future?
(Think about actually speaking the dialogue--make the words come out of your mouth--so it sounds authentic.)
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2006-02-02 23:08:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I dunno williamson.. I really don't. It's kind of scary, isn't it?
Submitted by williamson (user info) at 2006-02-02 23:04:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Where do you just come up with the idea to write about drama actors in a reality TV show in space?
Submitted by OneCheapGeek (user info) at 2006-02-02 22:43:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
So I went back and read it. this was really good. But I think you might have missed that one lyric that said that thing...
Kicked ass.
Submitted by OneCheapGeek (user info) at 2006-02-02 22:41:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
So the first sentence screamed blowjob. Then I scrolled down and saw the chocolate balls.
You are such a pervert.
Submitted by coocoocachoo (user info) at 2006-02-02 22:39:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Very clever. Love. It.
Submitted by LiquidPaper (user info) at 2006-02-02 22:31:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
didn't read it. all this talk about food is making me fucking hungry.