Hear Me? (388 hits)
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Submitted by Atheist Embryo (View user info) at 2006-02-07 01:29:01 EST
In the morning I woke up sucking on my mind.
Live and learn. Live and learn. Live and learn.
Woke up sucking on my mind. There are voices inside my head. They control the things I have to say.
"I love you." We said.
Slurping on my mind.
"Shut up when I'm talking to you."
They had to say.
"Don't blow smoke up my nostril."
My face told us.
"Stop abusing me, I'm trying to cleanse you."
My liver killed my body with its infected tongue.
"We're not here to sever you, we are one with you."
They are voices inside my head.
Live and learn. Live and learn. Live and learn.
"Stop taking those dissolving papers on our tongue."
My spine began to hiss with its flexible lips.
Everything has its time and space, in my mind and body as an infected boy. There are so many voices inside of my head.
What did you say?
I can't diverse the pitches of different people's voices when we're all sounding the same.
User Reviews
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2006-02-07 12:02:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I've tripped, fallen, and can't get up.
Submitted by MrSparkle847 (user info) at 2006-02-07 08:58:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by YELLOW-MAN (user info) at 2006-02-07 08:49:56 (#)
Ranking: 2
You sucked your mind.
Submitted by YELLOW-MAN (user info) at 2006-02-07 08:49:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You sucked your mind.
Submitted by SiddleyHawker (user info) at 2006-02-07 04:27:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Reminds me of "Shower Days" by NOFX for some strange reason. I thi
Submitted by Lisa (user info) at 2006-02-07 03:33:35 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Atheist Embryo? Ath--COME ON, PEOPLE, FOR GOD'S SAKE, GO OUTSIDE AND BREATHE FRESH AIR!
Submitted by Iago (user info) at 2006-02-07 03:18:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
It felt like i was watching 'Solaris' again
Submitted by belowground (user info) at 2006-02-07 02:55:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I like where you went with this, and the POV was very offbeat and original, but it was both poorly written and too short.
You've done some very good stuff here, i'd like to see you get back to that sort of writing.
Submitted by Chroniclysm (user info) at 2006-02-07 02:11:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
+1
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-02-07 01:42:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
only drug i ever wanted to do,
let my girlfriend at the time talk me out of the
only chance i've had...
*sigh*
fair enough to say i wouldn't do it if
i had the chance now.
Submitted by Embryo (user info) at 2006-02-07 01:37:57 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
For the record - I haven't done acid in almost 8 years, however..I would like to do it again =D
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-02-07 01:33:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
less acid.
and i do not sound like your spleen, so STFU.