..poem (391 hits)
Category: NoneRating: -1.68 on 14 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by gothica (View user info) at 2006-02-13 18:23:24 EST
In the dark forest you seek me out,
In the dark forest under the willow
we are found.
You have been playing with me,
Teasing me all along,
Just to lure me into your trap,
To sing me your victimizing song.
You pushed me down with a force
unknown to man,
Before i knew it you had me in a
trance.
You tilted back my head,
Kissed my neck,
Then a piercing bite,
As you held me up,
Took me around the world on this
painless flight.
The rush it gave me surged
through my veins,
The feeling of blood on it's outward
race.
When you were finished you layed
me on the ground,
Then said your goodbyes,
Your love to me never again
found.
User Reviews
Submitted by Foonbo (user info) at 2006-02-14 14:13:03 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Needs more rape.
Submitted by Zoidberg (user info) at 2006-02-14 14:05:52 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
ok people, enough with the shitty alters
Submitted by GuinnessSince1759 (user info) at 2006-02-14 01:57:50 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
This rating is way to high.
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:46:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Though....you didn't know not to post poems. I will explain that.
There is a guy on here named Orgasmatron. He probably never leaves his parents basement but he is a GENIUS. He can make fantastic poems up on the spot. Before him, poems where always ratings bombs. You do a poem, you get a bad rating. Then Orgasmatron came along and showed off his skill. Granted he likes to do a lot of comedy poems, but he also does serious ones as well. They are very well written. Well the problem is now, if you enter the poem arena, you compete against Orgasmatron's stuff. Now I'm not saying that your stuff wouldn't do well on www.allpoetry.com or whatever, but here, O-man is a crowd favorite, and you would have a lot to overcome.
So I'm just warning you, poems are HORRIBLE for ratings. Why do you think I never post any?
Submitted by gothica (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:46:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
It was a poem that was inspired from a friend.
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:42:24 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
If you really want to see how Vampire crap is done: http://www.ubersite.com/m/82258
And stop rating yourself, YOUR ratings don't effect the average rating. All it shows is that you are superficial enough to go and change your rating every single time you comment on your own stuff.
Submitted by Dead_0hi0_Sky (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:39:20 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
if the title would've been Porn, and you would've posted a picture of some naked chicks hanging out and eating nachos, then and only then would you have recieved a +2 from me.
Submitted by Snowynorth (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:38:35 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
ok so there's this poetry contest, the object is to make a poem on the spot that includes a word given to you by a panel of judges.
So it's the finals and there's a newfie and a harvard grad left. Harvard grad is first to act, the word is Timbuktoo...
The grad thinks about it for a second and comes up with
Across the dusty desert sands,
Winds a lonely caravan,
As they march on two by two,
Destination Timbuktoo.
Crowd loves it, not fucking bad for a poem made up on the spot. Newfie walks up not phased at all, takes a look at the audience and says
Me and Tim a hunting went,
Found three whores in a popup tent,
They was three and we was two,
So I bucked one and Tim bucked two.
Gothica was in the contest to but went out in the first round... had to use the word 'joy'
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:36:05 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I ain't buying the "I'm a 19 year old chick" bit for a second, alterboy.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:35:35 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
no even otron's alters would write better than this.
Submitted by gothica (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:32:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
no i am not an alter I am a 19 yr old chick who was told about this site a few days ago
Submitted by Jacobt26 (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:26:56 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Even the user name begs -2
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:25:49 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
I just KNOW that this is Orgasmatron;s shitty emo alter, i just KNOW it
Submitted by The_taste_of_Monkeys (user info) at 2006-02-13 18:25:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
this might interest you: http://www.ubersite.com/m/83875
or not, see if I care