What A Wonderful World (543 hits)
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Submitted by Poison Oak (View user info) at 2006-02-18 12:05:32 EST
"I see tree's are green, red roses too, I see them bloom for me and you."
Through the forests canopy I could see the ocean; I could hear the waves slowly crashing against the cliffs, progressively rolling up the sand. I was standing in the middle of a field searching for the shore. There were trees ubiquitously soaring up high into the clear crystal blue. The yellow stems of grass stretched up to my knees, rubbing against my lukewarm barmy skin. The air was fresh; the breeze warm, this place was so tranquil. I could not tell where I was, I knew I was in Spain, I knew that I was in a forest looking for a hidden cove that was theoretically meant to be the most beautiful cove in all of Menorca. I was lost. I stood for a moment, and I thought to myself...
I hunched down under the murky green bush, above me a barred wire fence stood between me and the field next to me. It was a bitter cold; I could see my own breath. A bird flew over head, its wings soared with wind beneath its wings, and I smiled. I crept then along the bottom of the bush, in the field in front of me was seven or so deer, all I was doing was watching them. Crouched down on the wet green grass, I loved the English winter. There was nobody around for miles to see, just me and the deer. I closed my eyes, I stood for a moment, and I thought to myself...
The child pulled on her father's long coat; she had golden blonde hair, big blue eyes and was wearing the tiniest of petticoats. She pointed at the poster of Wallace and Gromit that was hanging outside of the cinema, her father looked down at her, he made a joke about the poster and implied that they would see the film later on. The child laughed with delightful joy, her smile widened, I stood for a moment, and thought to myself...
The snow slowly edged towards me, it was coming. Over the fields, over the sky, it fell rapidly all over the garden. I had never seen snow come so abruptly and fall so expeditiously. A robin sat on the edge of the bird table and sang to the world his song. He looked like a Christmas card in the snow. I sat in the window; the wind blustered through and slowly clanged the chimes. I stood for a moment, and I thought to myself...
"I see skies are blue and clouds are white, bright sunny days, dark sacred nights."
She stood before me, long brown hair waving in the gentle breeze, great big brown eyes ready to get lost inside of, and a fashion sense that was to die for. She wore her beauty with such light heartedness, such serenity, and she wore her power so lightly. This woman would surely be the one; they say when you meet the woman you will love that time stops. That is true. I stood for a moment, and I thought to myself...
I put the record into my record player, I had been anticipating this my whole life, this was the one record that I knew would change my life. The music started, slow, the clanging of drums, the flickering of a harp, and then the voice came, slow and soft it shattered dimensional walls, this music was perfection, it was beautiful. I stood for a moment, and I thought to myself...
The owl soared onto my arm and collected the maggot that was struggling to live between my thumb and index finger. The owl looked me straight in the eyes, as did I him. You could see stars in these birds eyes, he moved my hand towards the sky and the owl flew off into the distance. I looked up at him as he soared into the clouds. I smiled and stood for a moment, I thought to myself...
I slam my diary shut. So many memories. So much happiness concealed within the pages of a book. I put it down and walk over to the front door, opening it up and letting the gentle western breeze sift across my face, I breathe, and think of all the good times.
I stand for a moment and look out on the prairie, and I think to myself...
...what a wonderful world.
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Submitted by mtgn37 (user info) at 2006-02-20 09:32:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
that hill would look nice with a power plant on it.
Submitted by crazyaardvark (user info) at 2006-02-20 00:38:19 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
"I see tree's are green"
Incorrect use of plural apostrophe: auto -2
Shitty, waste of space creative writing: auto -2
Some days I wish Uber had scores lower than -2, dumbass.
Submitted by munkeypants (user info) at 2006-02-19 23:49:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Good job!
Submitted by ampersand (user info) at 2006-02-18 18:11:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
It should've gone more like this:
Through the forests canopy I could see the ocean and it was on fire like that river in cleveland because we dumped so many fucking chemicals in it; all the whales and dolphins were crying. That made me sad so I looked somewhere else and a woman was being gang raped by sheep and then the world exploded and everyone died!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-02-18 14:58:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2006-02-18 14:30:29 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm not sure what to make of this, the imagery was beautiful, but it felt so jagged... jerky.
I'm giving you a +2, but i'm not confident in this decision
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-02-18 13:40:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Sometimes I sing that song in a faux Louis Armstrong voice. Really emphasising his gravelly voice. Keeps me amused.