Forgiven (2712 hits)
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Rating: 1.68 on 114 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Sacrilicious (View user info) at 2006-03-02 16:47:58 EST
Sometimes, I wonder if I'll ever be even half the person you are. This is one of those times.
As I sit here at your table, I wonder how this all came to be. You have taken such care to arrange this little oasis for us, away from all the chaos. I raise the glass set before me to my lips, and slowly sip your sangria. I savor it as much as I savor your company. You have no way of knowing, but the crystalline glass and its contents strike me with such symbolism, I can barely restrain myself from incoherently gushing to you in this perfect moment.
The rich liquid is brimming with sweet fruits that I know you have chosen for me. In my mind's eye, I picture your frenzied and cheerful preparations this afternoon; I've witnessed them countless times before.
(You were standing at the counter in your blue paint stained t-shirt, with cats underfoot, as you scrubbed and pared and sliced. First came the berries, then the oranges, peaches, and limes. Apples were always last. As you mixed them all in to marinate with the wine, you thought of me and smiled. You bounded out to your garden for the fresh mint you know is my favorite. On your way, you gathered a handful of hyacinths for me. I wasn't there, but I know it all happened, just the same.)
As we discuss the week's events, I seek a balance. I desperately want to devote my attention to you, while I struggle with the constant knowledge that I don't deserve your attention in the least.
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I remember that night you came to me, distraught. Your usually warm and calm demeanor had vanished and you silently begged me for any words that might help you find the answers you were looking for. We both knew I held those words, and no matter how tightly locked I kept them or how desperately your eyes pleaded with mine, I denied you. It was at that moment that I committed my greatest sin. While it's been years since the last remnants of my faith scattered and fled, I know of no penance that could ever rid my soul of such a vile act. Yet even then your acceptance of me barely wavered; at my lowest point you embraced me.
Months later, just as the occasional spark returned to your eyes, tragedy struck yet again. That's when it became clear to me that the karma I wanted to believe in couldn't possibly exist. With your head held high, you braved another storm and emerged wounded, but triumphant. Somewhere in your battles, you found strength I will never know.
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Today, as we sit here in the home you have made, we are finally at peace. The table is set for us, and the glorious scent of the flowers you picked for me permeates the air. I neither understand nor deserve your efforts in any way, but for them I am infinitely grateful. As I trace patterns in this freckled face I adore, I'm taken with your beauty, your grace, your boundless ability to laugh with me and to love me, despite our past. Together, we share this cup you have filled, and know that it is more than the fruit of your labor; it is the blood of our friendship.
User Reviews
Submitted by webcorona (user info) at 2007-01-09 11:29:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2007-01-08 15:03:02 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-07-27 11:54:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-07-07 16:48:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Where in the world are you, anyways?
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-03-19 18:53:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
how do i always miss rating your stuff?
glah.
glah glah glah.
Submitted by angel_2k01 (user info) at 2006-03-07 09:36:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i really liked this. made me kinda sad
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-06 23:32:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
THE WOMENS CHAMPIONSHIP BELT? LOL!
This is full of wrasslin jokes
I know a guy who went to High School with Trish.
Silly Canadians.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-06 22:21:33 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
UGH..I did it AGAIN with the +2. Only this time I didn't notice.
I need the belt.
Submitted by BranDo (user info) at 2006-03-06 22:16:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Life is like a box of chocolates.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-06 22:11:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Trish Stratus should thank her stars she survived being their manager.
She's still standing, after all...
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-06 21:55:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
T&A
Test and Albert?
(Orgasmatron will get it... I hope)
For shame, +2ing your own work.
My little love mistress, what has become of you.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-06 20:38:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I hate professional wrestling, but I'll wrestle you both.
I also like T & A.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-06 20:07:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm sure I'll be checking out more of TNA in the coming weeks.
I'm a bit of a completist, so once I find someone I like I'm bound to track down the rest of their matches.
Angle/Benoit from the Rumble a few years back is a fucking ace match.
Austin/Hart from WM...of course.
Austin/HHH @ No Way Out, HHH/C. Jack @ the Rumble, Steamboat/Savage...don't get me started.
Loved ECW in its prime, too. I consider it a loss that I never went to see a show when it was active.
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-06 19:57:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Styles is fucking amazing.
There's alot of talent that TNA doesn't showcase like Austin Aries, but he's probably just playing around on the independant circuit.
You need to see The Fallen Angel Christopher Daniels at his prime- it would literally addict you to TNA.
www.youtube.com
there's plenty of TNA shit around there if you're interested- also, some damn good WWF matches from years ago
if you have a chance, check out Undertaker and Big show vs. The Rock and Mankind buried alive match
it's amazing
and Sacrilicious, i want to wrestle you in a bit of dirt with thousands of fans watching while the undertaker shovels dirt on us
right on?
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-06 19:46:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I've seen a bit of it lately, yeah. More now that Christian and Sting have been around, but I saw my share of AJ Styles and Samoa Joe matches before then.
I think it's great that they're getting that prime time deal this spring. I'd like to see them start to compete with the Fed.
It could only mean good things for everyone involved.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-06 19:45:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Decon- I'm sure you meant no harm, darling. I just wanted clarification, is all. I haven't written much uber-serious, and this was pretty personal to me so I felt the need to defend it a bit more than I might another post.
And by no means do I mean to imply the 'post or go'. You need not write to have an opinion; I'm no musician but still have the passion and ear to be a critic. I was just making one point. You are a prolific reviewer (and quite articulate below), and if that's what makes you happy, then I'm happy.
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-06 19:28:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Monty Sopp
Hahahahahahahahahaha
Why isn't JAMES GANG on TNA anywhere near as bad ass as NAO was in DX or WWF?
It's the same people, pretty much same catch phrase...
TNA needs more Air-time.
Do you watch iMPACT at all O-tron-bot?
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-06 19:20:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
New Age Outlaw - I think all she means is that it's nice to have the option to exchange ideas with someone whose material you've read before. It also evens the playing field a bit, offering something of your own for criticism just as you read and criticize others' works.
It just makes it more of a give and take, instead of a give and give, y'know?
To each his own, though. You'll post when you're ready.
Mr. Ass's real name is Monty Sopp. No wonder he preferred to be called Billy Gunn.
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-06 19:12:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
posts L-I-K-E
forgot to capitolize the important part of what i was trying to say because i'm braindead
asplode
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-06 19:12:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-05 23:13:34 (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm sorry but posts like these are becoming Generic and get floods of +2's for no reason
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note: posts like these
Ladies and Gentlemen, Children of all ages, D Generation X proudly presents to you the TAAG TEAM CHAAAMPIONS OF THE WOOOORLD
ET CETERA ET CETERA
SUCK IT.
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-06 19:09:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I was rating it a two because it was well written.
Maybe your post wasn't the right one to say it on, but too many of these types get thrown on Uber and not enough criticism goes their way. It didn't have anything to do with your post, I was aiming my previous comment at those ones in particular. Yours kept me reading, but 80% of them don't.
Don't get offended, my sex goddess, if I didn't like your post I wouldn't have rated it well. I was throwing the criticism at posts that have the same general idea but don't hit the nail on the head but receive acclamation as if they did.
And for the record, the POST OR GO attitude is really frustrating: I have the right to voice my opinion on the work of others just as they have the right to disregard the opinion. It's not like I'm diagnosing disease without a Medical Degree, I'm just sharing my opinion. What I have to offer has nothing to do with it. People like Method are hilarious but post complete trash, so how does what I post have anything to do with the credibility of my opinion?
I'm going to go curl up in bed and cry now. Thanks.
Look, a Heart: <3.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-06 17:10:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by drivebyasshole (user info) at 2006-03-06 16:37:07 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-06 16:29:05 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-06 16:07:16 (#)
Ranking: 2
How did I get brought into this? I'm kind of flattered.
But anyone who knows me knows I'm too loquacious and opinionated to have written only 30 reviews since I signed up.
That said- if DBA is an alter of anyone who has my e-mail address, you'd better come clean to me before I find you out.
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Although I have enjoyed reading many of your eloquent posts, I do not have your email.
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A mystery man (or woman)! I'm intrigued.
Do you WANT my e-mail? ;)
Submitted by ih8u2man (user info) at 2006-03-06 17:00:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-06 16:45:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by RogerForrester (user info) at 2006-03-05 22:45:41 (#)
Ranking: -2
Wow, this was truly beautiful! I'm sure you worked very hard on this. I'd love to meet you in person.
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I apologize, my adoring fan got out of control for a moment.
I now have him back in his crate, it's all better.
Submitted by drivebyasshole (user info) at 2006-03-06 16:37:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-06 16:29:05 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-06 16:07:16 (#)
Ranking: 2
How did I get brought into this? I'm kind of flattered.
But anyone who knows me knows I'm too loquacious and opinionated to have written only 30 reviews since I signed up.
That said- if DBA is an alter of anyone who has my e-mail address, you'd better come clean to me before I find you out.
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Although I have enjoyed reading many of your eloquent posts, I do not have your email.
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2006-03-06 02:24:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
good enough. 'stream of consciousness' doesn't really have anything to do with this.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-06 01:45:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-05 23:13:34 (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm sorry but posts like these are becoming Generic and get floods of +2's for no reason
Keep in mind that it was well written, hence the rating, I'm just getting tired of seeing posts like these.
Will you still let me engage in sexual acts with an inpenetrable part of your body?
LOLZ LOLZ?
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So which is it, Decon? Was it well written or was it rated as such for "no reason"?
If it isn't to your taste, that's fair. But if you check my history, you'll see I've not really written anything like it, so I'm not responsible for "all these posts" you speak of. I wanted to try something I hadn't done, and this was the place for it.
I'll make you a deal- you can penetrate me after you try posting something yourself- something you would want to read out here. Share something, man. You're my boy and all, but your criticism would mean more if you contributed as well.
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-05 23:13:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm sorry but posts like these are becoming Generic and get floods of +2's for no reason
Step 1) Thought provoking single worded title, like "LOVE" or "TRUTH"
Step 2) Content that is some stream of conciousness or other "unique" writing method regarding someone or something that is purposely left amiguous for "each reader to get something from it".
Step 3) Fill with metaphor
Shake, Add Water, Mix, and wait for the +2's.
Nothing against you, Poot. Keep in mind that it was well written, hence the rating, I'm just getting tired of seeing posts like these.
Will you still let me engage in sexual acts with an inpenetrable part of your body?
LOLZ LOLZ?
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-05 22:57:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
A retaliatory -2? How sweet. And all this time, I didn't know you cared.
Keep fighting for that freedom, slugger.
Submitted by RogerForrester (user info) at 2006-03-05 22:45:41 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Wow, this was truly beautiful! I'm sure you worked very hard on this. I'd love to meet you in person.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-04 03:23:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Rock on, sweetie. . . .
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-04 00:53:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 23:59:20 (#)
Ranking: 2
Orgasmatron- bulllshit it was your first guess. I've dropped it here before, you just remembered because you love me so much.
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Strangely, it WAS my first guess.
Can't explain that, but them's the facts.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-04 00:17:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Coat's on, keys are in hand, obsession makes me check one more time before I leave to meet my lovely wife.
#9 Heated.
Good work self, good work.
I'm a loser.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-04 00:06:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Night Lish, enjoy your newest boy toy for the evening now he's here. Enjoy the heat.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 23:59:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Orgasmatron- bulllshit it was your first guess. I've dropped it here before, you just remembered because you love me so much.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 23:19:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 23:02:06 (#)
Ranking: 2
I have strong feelings of happiness in regards to you now Val. I want you to know that.
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And I for you, Matt. You've been a good friend this evening. And I'm not talking about heat.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 23:15:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Heated baby. #10
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 23:02:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I have strong feelings of happiness in regards to you now Val. I want you to know that.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:52:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
If she read it, Anastasia would know who she is. That's all I can say.
The album is The Final Cut.
Kisses on the cheek are welcome.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:50:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Who is Anastasia?
What's the album?
I'll kiss you when we meet, just on the cheek. Maybe the collarbone too, if we're both lucky. That's it.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:28:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm gonna get in my car right now.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:27:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:24:37 (#)
Ranking: 2
You know what I mean Sacrilicious, not HighVoltage. Are you game or what Sacrilicious? Ass question applies to you, not any boy.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:23:12 (#)
Ranking: 2
concession: I would let you stick a finger in my ass, I just wouldn't let you fuck me there.
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Then it's a deal, Scourge. You can stick your finger in my ass, but I won't let you fuck me there.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:25:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Oh shit. I'm in trouble. Sacrilicious save me. PLEASE. I LOVE YOU.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:24:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You know what I mean Sacrilicious, not HighVoltage. Are you game or what Sacrilicious? Ass question applies to you, not any boy.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:23:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
concession: I would let you stick a finger in my ass, I just wouldn't let you fuck me there.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:16:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
What a bitch, acting like she knows me. SHE DON'T KNOW ME
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:15:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Tell your girlfriend to take her penis out of your ass, and shoot a nice load in her own eye.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:14:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'll take care of that whores crack.
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:13:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Actually I still really like that post. It holds a special Uber-nostalgia to it.
But my girlfriend is calling you a cracked out loser.
Alright I'm off because Susie Derkins and I finished our chess game. See ya ladies.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:11:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
HAHAHAHAHA
comma
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:09:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
com·ma Audio pronunciation of "Comma" ( P ) Pronunciation Key (km)
n.
1. Grammar. A punctuation mark ( , ) used to indicate a separation of ideas or of elements within the structure of a sentence.
2. A pause or separation; a caesura.
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scourge is on grass again isn't he?
Well if you need to switch hands when your beating it, which honestly you shouldn't have to do if your wife is in the house.
She must be too tired once I'm done with her.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:09:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/79663#1707327
HV wants my man bits. See?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:07:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Weak? I'm a strong mofo boy. See no comma again.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:06:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You play on gameknot HIV? My arm got tired from beating your girlfriend.
Choose me
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:05:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:03:59 (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm ambidextrous boy. One arm gets tired, I switch her up
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Why would your arm get tired? How weak are you?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:05:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
He doesn't even know what comma means.
Nanny nanny boo boo
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:04:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Fine<,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,comma
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:03:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm ambidextrous boy. One arm gets tired, I switch her up
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:02:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:01:56 (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
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Story of your life right there huh?
No not my left hand. I hate lefty. It's like having sex with a retarded kid.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:01:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:01:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Your "girlfriend"? Don't you mean left hand?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:00:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You guys want to do something. I figure we could all make it to say Cleveland in about eight hours.
Self +2ing you selfish bitch
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 22:00:09 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
And you have me so worked up, I just +2'd my own post.
Sigh.
(contented sigh).
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:59:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm watching a movie with my gf while I play chess online cause I've seen 40 yr old Virgin before
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:59:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ummm....dipshit you're here.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:58:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The inside of an oven hot?
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:58:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
scourge we all know the last time you tried to have adult time your wife had to console you for several hours as you cried your eyes out and she said "Don't worry it happens to a lot of guys."
It doesn't...You just fail at life.
Seriously why are you guys here? It's friday night don't you have lives?
Oh wait you have a kid, nevermind.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:58:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Like a McGriddle hot?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:57:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I know what you're doing right now HIV, just stop typing and hit the rate button bitch.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:56:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Hot like how hot.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:56:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Boys, stop fighting!
(And by that, I mean please continue..it's kind of hot).
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:56:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Sacrilicious is my Uber bride. I own her body and soul now. This I demand.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:55:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
What are you doing here you little fuck monkey, we're trying to have some adult time.
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:54:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Holy fuck scourge you responded quickly.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:53:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Go away Bryce the big people are playing now.
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:52:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-02 22:31:20 (#)
Ranking: 2
Just train the intern and stop killing our accountants (Rating: 1.95 on 58 reviews, last by ampersand 3 hours ago)
Submitted by HighVoltage900 [Authenticated] (View user info) at 2006-03-02 10:24:57
The Shamrock Open - Fuck Me I'm Irish (Rating: 1.9 on 44 reviews, last by Susie_Derkins 3 hours ago)
Submitted by Orgasmatron [Authenticated] (View user info) at 2006-03-01 23:21:46
Forgiven (Rating: 1.9 on 19 reviews, last by Snark 53 minutes ago)
Submitted by Sacrilicious [Authenticated] (View user info) at 2006-03-02 16:47:58
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Damn, you guys..can I get on top JUST ONCE?
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No
Submitted by charminglybeef (user info) at 2006-03-03 21:37:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow. Nice to see you contributing -- I've checked your 'user info' so many times, and you never seem to post!
"While it's been years since the last remnants of my faith scattered and fled, I know of no penance that could ever rid my soul of such a vile act."
Somehow, I enjoyed that particular line more than any other. Flowing and lyrical, and brimming with purpose. Such a wonderful, honest, and soulful declaration.
I love your style, very beautiful and at the same time, economical. The content loses no meaning or focus even as you play with the language.
Keep 'em coming.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 20:48:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Natural Lemon Flavor?
Thats just fucked up man. Plain fucked up.
Juice loves you.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 20:39:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Read this guy
http://www.ubersite.com/cgi-bin/message_get.cgi?user_id=14094
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 20:33:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
tee hee
Aren't we clever little devils?
http://www.ubersite.com/m/59505 #13 So Filthy
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 20:31:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I know what you're doing right now.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-03 20:30:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 20:27:54 (#)
Ranking: 2
But do you know what I'M doing right now?
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Building a kite?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 20:27:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
But do you know what I'M doing right now?
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 20:22:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I know you know what I'm doing right now.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-03 20:11:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I know what you're doing right now.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 11:55:55 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks, Katy.
And Nelly- Just to clarify- I wasn't trying to be dismissive about the importance of clarity. When I mentioned who I wrote this for, I was referring to your "it didn't do it for me" comment. I understand if it didn't- can't please everyone or expect them all to relate to something personal to me. That's all. I do appreciate the criticism.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-03-03 11:40:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
wow nelly you took it as trampling cats? i so just thought cats getting in the way, that's what underfoot always sounds like to me. anyway, this made me want to drink.
good, a little weepy. but still not less than a 2 in my mind.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 11:36:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2006-03-03 11:27:22 (#)
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Re. your comments regarding my interpretation of 'cats underfoot': before being so dismissive, you may do well to remember that when writing for public viewing, and criticism, it's really not enough to just say 'I knew what I meant.'
How you express yourself to the reader needs to come first.
I contest the legitimacy of your turn of phrase.
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Main Entry: un·der·foot
Pronunciation: -'fut
Function: adverb
1 : under the foot especially against the ground <trampled the flowers underfoot>
2 : below, at, or before one's feet <warm sand underfoot>
3 : in the way <children always getting underfoot>
Definition 2 or 3 is as legitimate as 1, no?
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2006-03-03 11:27:22 EST (#)
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Re. your comments regarding my interpretation of 'cats underfoot': before being so dismissive, you may do well to remember that when writing for public viewing, and criticism, it's really not enough to just say 'I knew what I meant.'
How you express yourself to the reader needs to come first.
I contest the legitimacy of your turn of phrase.
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-03-03 10:23:39 EST (#)
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Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-03-02 20:48:16 (#)
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-02 20:18:10 (#)
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I like this post.
I like this author.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-03 09:59:38 EST (#)
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Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2006-03-03 08:23:31 (#)
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Didn't do it for me.
And it sounded like she was trampling on cats.
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Well, thanks for reading anyway, Nelly. To be honest, I wrote this more for those who inspired my characters than anyone. I appreciate your honesty. As far as cat trampling goes though, mine was a legitimate use of the word underfoot. Sounds like you may have attached something else to it; that's all you.
Catalyst- You say that like it's a bad thing. I think sangria should bring back such memories.
Balmy days
sweet sangria
she's been gone
have you seen her
senorita shyly turning away
leaving me your fading flame
yeah, you think about that
what you believe in
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-03 09:08:05 EST (#)
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sweet...
although sangria brings back funny drunken memories of spain.
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2006-03-03 08:23:31 EST (#)
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Didn't do it for me.
And it sounded like she was trampling on cats.
Submitted by beatjunky (user info) at 2006-03-03 04:43:13 EST (#)
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DONT GET IT!!
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-02 23:02:40 EST (#)
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This pleased me.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-03-02 21:28:26 EST (#)
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Nice
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-03-02 20:48:16 EST (#)
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-02 20:18:10 (#)
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I like this post.
I like this author.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-02 20:47:27 EST (#)
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Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:56:09 (#)
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In fact, I am so impressed by your review I need to swap an email with you.
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I will e-mail you soon, red.
I'm glad you enjoyed my review, 'cause goddamn..I loved your post. I'm vaguely familiar with Arctic Monkeys from Sirius radio; I'll have to check out Skindred.
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And dearest Scourge-
My love knows no earthly boundaries. Orgasmatron understands this, and despite first laying claim to me (well, I to him, but petty details matter not) he seemingly indulges my polyamorous leanings as long as I understand he can break me if I stray too far and show him disrespect. So in short, we can all enjoy each other and breed as long as I remain faithful to him in spirit, at least on Tuesdays. I love you, Scourgey. You know this.
I'm sure O can come along and explain that in more salacious terms that may or may not rhyme..or else I'm getting the belt. We shall see.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-02 20:18:10 EST (#)
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I like this post.
I like this author.
I like puppies.
I like lots of things.
I DO NOT like my boss who has me at my office, after starting work at 6:30 this morning, waiting for her to finish a phone call she started two hours ago so that we can debrief. This happens quite often.
No, I do not like her a bit.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-02 20:04:52 EST (#)
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This is the longest Hallmark card I've ever read...
Submitted by THE_MASKED_MACABRE (user info) at 2006-03-02 18:18:12 EST (#)
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DRINK UP, PITIFUL HUMAN!
FOR THE BLOOD AND FLESH OF EVERYONE YOU HAVE EVER LOVED
WILL BE TAINTED BY THE HIDEOUS TRUTH!
YOU WILL RECOGNIZE *NO ONE* IN THE WORLD OF THE MACABRE,
ONLY ENEMIES...
THROUGH THE MADNESS OF UNQUENCHABLE HUNGER!
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-02 18:01:12 EST (#)
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Good post too.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:56:09 EST (#)
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In fact, I am so impressed by your review I need to swap an email with you.
Have you heard of Skindred? What about the Arctic Monkeys?
redskieslookfake.at.hotmail.co.uk
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:53:55 EST (#)
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Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:24:19 (#)
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HV- My relationship with the person who inspired this is very much alive.
O-
You. Me. Babies. Clear enough?
Orgasmalicious.
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You shameless Hussy!!
This I won't allow.
Unless you're looking at a man-harem kind of thing and then I may be down. Lounging around on pillows all day, eating exotic fruits and just waiting toi be beckoned to you for some sweet lovings.
Yeah, that could definitely work for me....
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:52:15 EST (#)
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Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-01 18:05:21 (#)
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This post makes me wish I could rate it much higher than your average +2. I've all but written the same post.
I'm a woman who has infinitely more pride in my music collection (which includes The Pixies and Com lag) than I ever will in accessories. My guilty shoe pleasure ends with my Doc Martens.
I try not to be judgmental, but generally speaking, I can't help but think an absence of passion for music (or failing that, art of some sort) indicates a lack of soul in some respect.
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MARRY ME.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:27:54 EST (#)
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Which exhausts me.
*shoots*
*collapses*
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:27:39 EST (#)
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It forces me to repeatedly fuck the ones you HAVE posted
*shoots*
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:27:16 EST (#)
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And if you don't post that much
*shoots*
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:27:01 EST (#)
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What I mean is I need to drop my seed in as many of your posts as I can to make sure I fertilize your ubereggs.
*shoots*
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:24:19 EST (#)
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HV- My relationship with the person who inspired this is very much alive.
O-
You. Me. Babies. Clear enough?
Orgasmalicious.
Submitted by AshK (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:23:20 EST (#)
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beautiful and evocative.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:09:12 EST (#)
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Your speaker gets so intensely personal in your posts that I can almost touch it and taste it.
Again, you should really post more often.
MORE OFTEN I SAY.
If you don't post a lot how can I ever expect to plant my seed in you and ensure that the Orgasmalicious line will grow and flourish?
Submitted by BrownEyedGirrl (user info) at 2006-03-02 17:02:17 EST (#)
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Let her read this....
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-02 16:51:30 EST (#)
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Does the blood represent the relationship is dying or that it is the lifeforce behind it that keeps it strong?
Really it could be either.