Virginal (1768 hits)
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (View user info) at 2006-03-05 02:57:22 EST
The promise of the ages so foretold
In plain and in part by an angel's tongue,
The mortal cough heavy upon his lips
As if an insult to more heav'nly strains,
Brought at once to me a peace consuming
And made of me a vessel for the Lord.
A trust between us, yes, but something more
Was given me, neither requested for nor
Denied once offered despite the sorrow
It brought my mother's mind, given freely
So that I might come to see how the hand
Of the divine would touch the face of man
To free the fallen from the darkness and
Make of death a fool: I was shown the end,
How this child alive inside me would grow
And walk through streets with wonder in his heart,
Stumble in his steps, tremble from nightmares
And learn the Law; grow and walk through deserts
Of the soul and sand, strong and sensible,
Friends beside and family beyond, in love
Working feats impossible; grow and walk
Down a path lined with grimacing faces,
Ripped and ridiculed before me, my love,
My little one, the nails, oh God, the nails,
Leaving you expired on the wood, red
As robins bathed in bittersweet and blood.
This, and more, my young eyes both were offered,
The seraph patient and afraid before
Me as I paused, despite my knowing the
Answer to be yes, always yes, always
You - you, the promise, but moreso my son;
With grief in my heart and joy on my lips
I agreed: the presence came into me and
I understood that I would lose you twice.
I swear it made me love you all the more.
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Submitted by darko (user info) at 2006-06-20 02:12:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by paulblakeford (user info) at 2006-03-28 14:06:26 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
No Comment
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-06 12:16:02 EST (#)
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Haha...an art post made it to Heated.
Woo.
For those of you interested in the poetry competition, more details (sort of) here:
http://www.ubersite.com/m/84915
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-06 11:24:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Just didn't have a word to finish the review with, that's all. The language is leaving me. I find it to be an effort to even write in complete sentences this morning. The past week or so actually. Can't shut off the little random swirling thoughts this morning. My focus is fucking shot
bah
just bah
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-06 11:06:06 EST (#)
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HA! Your ridiculously dated pop culture references never cease to amuse me.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-06 10:52:01 EST (#)
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...uncivilized?
Someone call Charles Barkley and see what he has to say about this.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-06 10:21:55 EST (#)
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 21:32:33 (#)
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I'll devote a post to it...get a list of who's interested.
Don't know if it should be a competition or just a festival of sorts.
If it's a comp. I'd like to participate in it, but I see that as being a complete conflict of interet
So maybe, like Dre, I'll just be a producer.
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Conflict of interest how exactly? Stroke that ego much my good man?
Participate in the damn thing you cravenly bastard. Delight in the sound thrashing you pass out to all those involved or be (only in this instance of course as few here could write good verse as prolifically or proficiently as yourself) unseated. Either way, to not participate would be...
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-06 10:12:00 EST (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Maddog (user info) at 2006-03-06 09:12:54 EST (#)
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shite.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-06 08:54:08 EST (#)
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Betwen the Uberbury Tales, the Marlowe spoof, and this recent art post, I'd say you were right Thorns. But look back to one of my first few posts - 'Mack-Beth' - I've been kickin' it old school 'round here from the start.
This will likely not be the last you see art of this sort from me.
Don't underestimate rhyming with filth, Bubs. After all "milf" rhymes with filth, and we all know how much fun hot mothers can lead to.
I'd probably try to make it legitimate, but I'm sure a few people would go the other way. Like Voltage on lonely weekends when his girl's out but his boys are free.
Look for a post on this today or tomorrow for quasi-details.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-03-06 08:49:00 EST (#)
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O-Man, you've been going all Renaissance on us lately, it seems.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-06 07:16:20 EST (#)
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Are you suggesting a REAL poetry fest as opposed to
"Rhyming with Filth?" If things settle down at work
I might be able to jump on that. . .
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-06 07:12:28 EST (#)
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Submitted by charminglybeef (user info) at 2006-03-06 02:46:02 (#)
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I like to think I'm "raising the bar" with my consistently sober and constructive reviews.
http://www.ubersite.com/m/84881#1867865
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GOLD.
CB- Uber is a better place when you're here.
Submitted by charminglybeef (user info) at 2006-03-06 02:46:02 EST (#)
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I like to think I'm "raising the bar" with my consistently sober and constructive reviews.
http://www.ubersite.com/m/84881#1867865
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-06 00:37:26 EST (#)
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I have a feeling that I'll be doing more of these 'works inspired by art' posts in the coming weeks.
Again, damn Axolotl and his Art Post Wednesday concept.
And how dare you legitimately critique my post, CB? That's such a foreign concept 'round these here parts.
Thanks for your comments, though. And no worries about the WIAN thought - not everything can blow everyone's skirt up, y'know?
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 23:53:39 EST (#)
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O-Tron, if you're interested, get yourself over to Coyote's 'Centaur Project' series. Really good stuff.
Submitted by charminglybeef (user info) at 2006-03-05 23:34:30 EST (#)
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Interesting to read that the attachment was not selected after the writing, but was instead the inspiration.
I found this to be a unique look at the human side religion, as opposed to the typical, supernatural theme. The idea that the virgin is a mother like any other made this ring profoundly true.
Your best posts are the ones like this, where the beauty of the language is surpassed only by that of the content.
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By the by, there was nothing in particular that offended me about your "What's in a name..." post -- it just wasn't that good.
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-05 23:23:28 EST (#)
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Vaginal
harhar
not your best, sorry loverboy.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2006-03-05 23:10:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-05 04:42:46 (#)
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I always appreciate your taking time to convey your meaning to those of us...
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He won me over with that one civil act, especially after being the recipient of
quite a few unfounded, unflattering reviews and comments by me.
Class act.
<suspends love fest>
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 22:57:55 EST (#)
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Pah, I waste my time with a lot of shitposters.
Thanks for coming back and push this a little closer to Most Heated...
Submitted by RogerForrester (user info) at 2006-03-05 22:50:47 EST (#)
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wow you really don't get it? Whose playing who here? lol you're so stupid for wasting your time with me.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 22:40:53 EST (#)
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I told you to eat the keyboard, dickshine, not attempt to use it again.
You've already disappointed yourself tonight, don't disappoint me too.
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2006-03-05 22:40:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by RogerForrester (user info) at 2006-03-05 22:28:52 (#)
Ranking: -2
wow you're such a great poet. Some people like to express there emotions directly. Others like poetry. But anyway you wrote a response to one of my messages and I didn't read it cause it was too long and it said something about unplugging a keyboard. I'm sure it was very creative though and maybe someday I'll get around to reading it. I'll write a poem too.
hahahahahaahhaah this cracked me up, especially since this fag got so pissed about your poem on his post
Submitted by RogerForrester (user info) at 2006-03-05 22:28:52 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
wow you're such a great poet. Some people like to express there emotions directly. Others like poetry. But anyway you wrote a response to one of my messages and I didn't read it cause it was too long and it said something about unplugging a keyboard. I'm sure it was very creative though and maybe someday I'll get around to reading it. I'll write a poem too.
My love for you
is like a pond that's lilac blue
that red rubies rain into
You are the breath of the ocean
The wind that causes trees' motion
A sweet melody
that harmonizes phonetically
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 21:41:29 EST (#)
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You can participate through me...wink, wink.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-05 21:34:10 EST (#)
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No way, you must participate.
I'd be down.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 21:32:33 EST (#)
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I'll devote a post to it...get a list of who's interested.
Don't know if it should be a competition or just a festival of sorts.
If it's a comp. I'd like to participate in it, but I see that as being a complete conflict of interet
So maybe, like Dre, I'll just be a producer.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 21:25:16 EST (#)
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I did. Are you going to organise that poetry write-off soon? That'd be cool.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 21:05:46 EST (#)
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I'm sitting about eight feet away from my Riverside Milton.
Check out my "Damon Agonistes" if you want to see a much-shortened, baseball-ized version of his Samson story.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 21:00:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The football comments on another post made me question the suspicions. His answer about the Dark Tower series on his own post was a clue that the suspicion may be correct.
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Wait, O-tron, does this mean that you like the Dark Tower as well. Also, you're an American who's heard of The Cave. This is incredible.
Are you a Milton fan at all?
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:58:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
mmm...riding the O wave..
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:56:14 EST (#)
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It's certainly a unique way of getting known here.
It speaks volumes for you that people think you're my alter.
Ride the O-wave to fortune and glory...
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:52:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm just loving the publicity.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:46:47 EST (#)
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Your love for me will simply have to be enough for you scourgey. Trust in that, and know that I tell you true when I tell you I have no alter(s).
Your attention to detail is impressive, though. Good to see someone's paying attention to people around here.
Submitted by williamson (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:46:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Whenever I read that word I pronounce it in my head as "Vaginal".
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:41:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The football comments on another post made me question the suspicions. His answer about the Dark Tower series on his own post was a clue that the suspicion may be correct.
Having both of the two posters in question deny the assertion is in no way proof that what they claim is true. Still haven't made up my mind. There are a few things that suggest he is your alter O, but there are thngs that belie the idea as well.
So, in conclusion,
I really don't care all that much either way, nor will it ever be conclusively proved unless this guy does the whole camwhore with a sign thing.
And that would make me like him less, so I hope it doesn't happen.
I need something to do about now...
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:27:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Well, it wasn't the first time I fucked up a rating of yours, and it won't be the last. Fair warning.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:22:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:03:44 (#)
Ranking: -2
Did I just fucking +2 my own post? I have a feeling I did.
Despicable, truly.
Because they mean so much, after all.
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I forgive you.
Also, I got up at 7 fucking am for the Man United game, only to realise it's on tomorrow. This displeased me, and I got on the phone to Old Trafford to complain. They told me to get bent and now I have to pay for calling the UK for nothing.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:03:44 EST (#)
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Did I just fucking +2 my own post? I have a feeling I did.
Despicable, truly.
Because they mean so much, after all.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 20:02:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm American. But I'm thin, so I'm not THAT American.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 19:57:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You also have to ask yourself if O-Tron is self-fellating enough to create an alter, use that alter to +2 himself, then go and +2 that alter's posts with the main account.
Besides, I think's he's American, and I'm from Sydney.
Not that I can prove that, so that doesn't help.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 14:17:09 EST (#)
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Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-05 05:10:45 (#)
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I'm not sure, someone else suggested the idea to me, so I just went and reread after seeing you were online.
I'll figure it out eventually however. Or maybe not. Doesn't matter.
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A) And so begins Star Trek VII: The Search For Who Suggested I Have An Alter.
B) I'll figure it out for you. He's not my alter, nor I his. My ego's too big to deny credit coming my way, or direct it to another name or account. As a Simpsons episode put so brilliantly: "Oh that's it baby. All for Moe..."
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Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-05 04:42:46 (#)
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:09:04 (#)
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Mortal cough = a fancied up way of trying to say that to angels' tongues the language of man must be something rough and base, or that the words, however pronounced, must sound like the hacking of a sick man to someone accostomed to the strains of archangels, thrones and dominions.
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I always appreciate your taking time to convey your meaning to those of us whose mortal tongues are not of the pure silver that can only be yours in this little cyberworld we like to call home.
In the light of my night of sin, this made me feel a bit tainted.
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A) Come now. The man asked a question, and I tried to explain myself to him. No pure silver here...just simple, sturdy mahogany.
B) Don't feel tainted. Embrace the sin. It's the only way to defeat it.
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LadyPlural - we all grow up eventually, right? I wouldn't get too worried, though, because I'll offset this entirely if I post what I'm thinking I might post tonight.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-03-05 12:43:12 EST (#)
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sigh
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2006-03-05 11:44:24 EST (#)
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http://www.ubersite.com/m/80826
Huhuhuhuhuuhuhuhuh.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 06:54:15 EST (#)
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I went out to dinner, came home, read the poem again. It was still great.
Submitted by VelvetElvis (user info) at 2006-03-05 05:33:21 EST (#)
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Byronic.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2006-03-05 05:21:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:05:27 (#)
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You and me O-town, may be the only ones up at this holy hour.
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yea for us!
<sigh>
and on a Saturday night no less...
Christ, it's so pathetic I don't even want to consider contemplating it anymore.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-05 05:10:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 04:40:47 (#)
Ranking: 2
Well, scourge, thanks for reviewing my posts. Did/do you think I was O-tron's alter? Was that what this was about? I think I just got that.
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Withholding judgment yet.
I honestly did start to read both part one and two, I just got sidetracked by work. This is busy season for me and things come up that draw me away for days at a time. I've been told to pack my bags and get on a plane with two hours notice and this is the time of year when that happens.
Anyway
I'm not sure, someone else suggested the idea to me, so I just went and reread after seeing you were online. O-man has some distinguishing marks to his work, both in choice of wording and certain stylistic choices. I'll not belabor the idea here. If you are his alter, I could care less... I like the pulp magazine style going on in the posts under your name. They'll get a good reception regardless of who the author is because they are well written. Good posts all...
The bit that threw me off were the reviews about football, as O never really talks about sport besides baseball and prof. wrestling. Who knows or cares?
Me a little bit I guess.
I'll figure it out eventually however. Or maybe not. Doesn't matter
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-05 05:05:59 EST (#)
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Scourge! I did.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-05 04:51:18 EST (#)
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Sacrilicious! Read your email.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-05 04:42:46 EST (#)
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:09:04 (#)
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Mortal cough = a fancied up way of trying to say that to angels' tongues the language of man must be something rough and base, or that the words, however pronounced, must sound like the hacking of a sick man to someone accostomed to the strains of archangels, thrones and dominions.
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I always appreciate your taking time to convey your meaning to those of us whose mortal tongues are not of the pure silver that can only be yours in this little cyberworld we like to call home.
In the light of my night of sin, this made me feel a bit tainted. Makes me wish I still had faith that the hand of the divine would touch the face of man to free the fallen from the darkness. But as I walk in this darkness, I try to keep with me the inspiration of The Virgin. It's as close as I will get to salvation.
And so it goes.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 04:40:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Well, scourge, thanks for reviewing my posts. Did/do you think I was O-tron's alter? Was that what this was about? I think I just got that.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:22:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
And O, I question whether there has been prose posted by yourself on this site recently or not. Still withholding judgment personally.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:21:34 EST (#)
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Let us have a little drunken 2:30 in the morning convo if you will, Mr. Stagger Lee.
I must admit I've only half read two of your posts. Not finishing due to outside influences calling me away from the magic computey box, not lack of interest in the posted material.
You come highly recommended and so I suppose I must go back and read the remainder of these things I breezed over. I've gotten to the point where I read posts only of a few certain people and skim a lot of the front page. I also check the heated posts and MRR, usually only to be disappointed, so I miss a lot of the good new stuff that comes around.
Back momentarily...
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:14:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Thank You
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:10:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:05:27 (#)
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You and me O-town, may be the only ones up at this holy hour. Beautiful stuff here.
This Stagger Lee, I have questions about this user....
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Question away. Do it on my posts and +2 them. That'd be cool.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:09:47 EST (#)
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"accostomed" means it's officially time for me to peace out.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:09:04 EST (#)
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Mortal cough = a fancied up way of trying to say that to angels' tongues the language of man must be something rough and base, or that the words, however pronounced, must sound like the hacking of a sick man to someone accostomed to the strains of archangels, thrones and dominions.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:07:08 EST (#)
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Me too, SOTS. Given my love of Nick Cave, I'd say he would be a lock for my alter.
And yet he writes prose, so we know that can't be.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:07:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I do not understand the mortal cough reference, however I do love the painting.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:06:02 EST (#)
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That was basically the first part that was written. Not that you were wondering, but I'll tell you all the same.
It's just after 3AM. Going to bed now. Hopped on a little bit ago, came across this Botticelli painting and figured I'd try forcing out a quick little whatever about it.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:05:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You and me O-town, may be the only ones up at this holy hour. Beautiful stuff here.
This Stagger Lee, I have questions about this user....
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2006-03-05 03:04:57 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
WOOO +2 VAGINAL!
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-05 02:59:26 EST (#)
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Ripped and ridiculed before me, my love,
My little one, the nails, oh God, the nails,
Leaving you expired on the wood, red
As robins bathed in bittersweet and blood.
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This part in particular was great.
What the hell time is it where you live?
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-05 02:58:44 EST (#)
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Damn you, Art Post (Wednes)day, for being stuck in my head this weekend.