FUPA- Unrequited (773 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryRating: 1.56 on 45 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Bubba2341 (View user info) at 2006-03-15 19:41:00 EST
"I'm so tired
Tired of waiting
Tired of waiting for you."
-Ray Davies-
O wretched curse! most vile of pain, thy heartache brought to bear
The innocence of life itself, to one unseeing, fair.
The tender cup of love was full, impassioned by my youth,
For blindness of the soul is raw, unheedful of the truth.
Old Winter's death, renewed in Spring, brings life and hope anew,
But ne'er to one whose life was crushed by love that was not true.
Your words brought joy, your kisses hope, your smile would warm my heart,
The slattern's mind cannot be known, the pain doth surely smart.
The village pub was all abuzz with stories of your deed,
"Not so," I cried, "'twould surely cause my heart to break and bleed."
Thy brother bent my ear in truth, the age-old story told,
And cut my mind much surer than the loss of Midas' gold.
"Oh haggard slut," my dagger cried, as ope it ripped thy breast,
"Your rancid heart I shall exhume from out thy putrid chest."
For life is frail; forgiveness? Nay, with life ye'll surely pay,
My love for you is dead, sweet dear, they're hanging me today.
User Reviews
Submitted by GetNakeddd (user info) at 2006-07-17 23:54:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
By agreement
Submitted by georgemichael (user info) at 2006-04-26 23:29:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
yeah nice one ... ray davsie SHITTY ALTER
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2006-03-26 14:35:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i think you accidentally -2'd my fupa post when you reviewed it the second time... that or you meant to and you hated it, not sure...
Submitted by DCWoody (user info) at 2006-03-26 13:53:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-26 13:20:32 (#)
Ranking: -2
Plutocracy: A government run by Mickey Mouse's dog. . .
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+2 for this
Submitted by Leftwingandunafraid (user info) at 2006-03-26 13:44:37 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
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YES BAN ME UBERSITE. THIS SITE IS POPULATED BY MORONS.
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Submitted by Leftwingandunafraid (user info) at 2006-03-26 13:35:13 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Bubba you're setting new standards for stupidity. But we all must be number one in some area.
Submitted by wardy (user info) at 2006-03-26 13:29:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 to balance out the retard below. he got mine as well... fucking tools...
Submitted by Leftwingandunafraid (user info) at 2006-03-26 13:18:32 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Damn are you a moron.
Submitted by Leftwingandunafraid (user info) at 2006-03-26 13:14:41 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
You get a negative two just for being a complete idiot.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-25 19:37:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-25 11:24:55 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-24 19:00:19 (#)
Ranking: 2
O-man usually gets +2s from me because he is good. He rated my entry, which
many people liked, with a +1. He didn't blindly rate it, but gave his reasons
for what he left.
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*Ahem*
I gave this a 1.5, gringo.
:)
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Not only can I NOT write, I can't read, either :(
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-25 11:24:55 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-24 19:00:19 (#)
Ranking: 2
O-man usually gets +2s from me because he is good. He rated my entry, which
many people liked, with a +1. He didn't blindly rate it, but gave his reasons
for what he left.
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*Ahem*
I gave this a 1.5, gringo.
:)
Submitted by Coleslaw_Murphy (user info) at 2006-03-22 18:45:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Uh, what they said. And what you said 2 below that.
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Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-03-22 16:23:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-16 14:01:25 (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-16 03:46:22 (#)
Ranking: 1
This was pretty good, but something about the language used didn't quite ring true to me.
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Agreed. I couldn't really figure out what year you were intending this to take place in.
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2006-03-20 13:25:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-18 13:13:48 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
It should have been done all in one style or another.
Disregard my nasty comment. It was based on 3 or 15 beers. . .
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-03-18 13:06:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
i'm sorry i didn't add a comment bubba.
i really thought the language you used came across as tedious and forced.
it was uncomfortable to read and seemed like it was probably uncomfortable to write.
i'm generally fond your work, this just didn't do anything for me.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-18 02:18:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-03-17 16:33:58 (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-16 18:58:58 (#)
Ranking: 1
i mean really man, makes me want to bash my head against a wall
sorry.
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-16 18:58:26 (#)
Ranking: 0
the old english usage makes baby jesus cry.
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C'mon, Ghola, what the fuck is yer problem? You can't put in a comment of
your own? You have to repeat the brainless drivel proferred by the ignorant
masses? Jesu Christ, woman, I really thought you were smarter than that.
Guerss I was wrong. Bite me. . . Oh, by the way, FUCK NINJA suckasses!
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-03-17 16:33:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-16 18:58:58 (#)
Ranking: 1
i mean really man, makes me want to bash my head against a wall
sorry.
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-16 18:58:26 (#)
Ranking: 0
the old english usage makes baby jesus cry.
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2006-03-16 21:28:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Yay for creative rhyming
Submitted by Can_Always_Trust_A_Liar (user info) at 2006-03-16 21:15:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I really liked this.
Submitted by Waxinmyeye (user info) at 2006-03-16 19:17:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
you seem to know what your doing...
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-16 18:58:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
i mean really man, makes me want to bash my head against a wall
sorry.
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-16 18:58:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
the old english usage makes baby jesus cry.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-16 14:02:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
The flow, however, was rockin', and the story was killer. Har har 'murder joke.'
1.5
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-16 14:01:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-16 03:46:22 (#)
Ranking: 1
This was pretty good, but something about the language used didn't quite ring true to me.
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Agreed. I couldn't really figure out what year you were intending this to take place in.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-03-16 08:20:23 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
"haggard slut" = auto +2
Submitted by DizzyMissus (user info) at 2006-03-16 07:06:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Good
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-16 03:46:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
1.5 overall.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-16 03:46:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
This was pretty good, but something about the language used didn't quite ring true to me. Seemed to stifle the flow a bit.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-16 03:44:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice work
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-03-16 02:06:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
remindad me oaf cash. forgive the spelleing plase it's not my fualt right now. but i really do mean tihe plus @. i'ma gonna lose.
Submitted by LadyJay (user info) at 2006-03-16 00:59:46 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i liked it, flowed well
Submitted by joedaddy (user info) at 2006-03-15 23:47:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-15 23:47:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked it I did. Well played Bubba.
Submitted by knucklesnelson (user info) at 2006-03-15 22:40:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
seek help
Submitted by knucklesnelson (user info) at 2006-03-15 22:40:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Lemme geuss sombody is getting geared up for a renascance (or however its spelt) fest. You people with your fake swords, and body armor frighten me, much like them trekies (shlongy).
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-15 21:42:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks, Shlong, you "Kinky" polesmoker.
L...O...L...A...
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-03-15 21:37:55 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
You only get a -1 for mentioning Ray Davies and , in a strange turn of events, "rancid".
Submitted by VelvetElvis (user info) at 2006-03-15 21:15:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Very good. Also I like people who capitalize the seasons.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2006-03-15 20:44:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This was good
Submitted by Death_Metal_Dude (user info) at 2006-03-15 20:36:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-15 20:35:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Just teasing, Bubba. I was just jealous.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-15 20:10:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Sacky, sorry if I took your title. It fits so well
with the theme... :)
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-15 20:07:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Thanks for stealing my title, Bubba!!
*crumbles paper, lights on fire*
Fine. This was good. Take your +2 and go.
Oh..your post, eh?
*hangs head, slinks out*
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-03-15 19:46:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Ye Olde Engglish