FUPA Round 1: A Girl I Knew (2135 hits)
Category: GeneralRating: 0.88 on 32 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by JMG114 (View user info) at 2006-03-16 09:07:12 EST
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Submitted by Coleslaw_Murphy (user info) at 2006-03-22 18:56:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I would've went with 1, but I guess I'd like for you to win this round.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-21 07:46:14 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This deserves a higher rating, in my opinion. It may not be lengthy or relate a detailed story, but its very well written.
Submitted by Carmiya (user info) at 2006-03-21 07:34:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
very nice, I liked it alot.
Submitted by jonukah (user info) at 2006-03-18 19:05:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
FUPA? Is this poem about your ex's fat-upper-pussy area?
Let me try to dissect it...
"A crack in time"...I am assuming that is referring to her labia?
"A journey of a thousand miles..." a really large labia?
"As dragons slept upon the shores
of whispered, waving lakies.." hmmm....dragon, whispering...dragon breat on the shore of something wet...bad-breath pussy?
"specter haunt the moors
when from the grave she wakes..." ugly without her makeup?
"That phantom with her head of gold" Blond.
"whirls 'round beneath the moon" Airhead.
I don't get the rest, but from the preceding lines, I don't think I'm going to ask you for her number.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-03-17 16:39:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-16 11:06:44 (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:37:53 (#)
Ranking: 0
Solid 0 material
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2006-03-17 12:10:08 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I'm not sure what it was missing. Maybe some backstory, maybe an image...
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-03-17 11:54:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
what they said
Submitted by Can_Always_Trust_A_Liar (user info) at 2006-03-16 21:16:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
This was good. Didn't wow me or blow me away, but it was good.
Submitted by Waxinmyeye (user info) at 2006-03-16 19:17:18 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
what the? boring... i've seen much better poems in this competition
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-16 19:06:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
not much
not much
not much
water coming over that hill.
Submitted by Jacobt26 (user info) at 2006-03-16 18:42:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
I'm just going to give you a 0 out of sympathy for this contest...
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-03-16 16:17:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:18:55 (#)
Ranking: -1
I upped your rating for using a different font from the rest of the Longfellow-wannabes.
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2006-03-16 13:59:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-16 13:44:15 (#)
Ranking: 1
You made some good choices with your words (though "idyll" made that second to last line a little choppy).
Submitted by Average_Dan (user info) at 2006-03-16 13:57:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-16 09:57:57 (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked it, it flowed really smoothly from onbe stanza to the next. The image it started to paint was nice. But...it just seemed unfinished to me.
Sorry.
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Agreed. Sorry J.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-16 13:44:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I can see why people are saying this is 'worth reading,' as it kind of left me asking "so?" at the end of it. Though while it didn't draw anything out of me, or tilt my feelings one way or another, it was well written. You made some good choices with your words (though "idyll" made that second to last line a little choppy).
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-16 11:06:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:37:53 (#)
Ranking: 0
Solid 0 material
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:53:52 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
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Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:37:53 (#)
Ranking: 0
Solid 0 material
All poetry STRIVES to be solid 0 material!
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:37:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Solid 0 material
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:18:55 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
I upped your rating for using a different font from the rest of the Longfellow-wannabes.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:16:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Worth reading. Just.
Submitted by Grimm (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:12:07 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by firefly (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:11:21 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by ess-arr (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:06:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
and they say this isn't a popularity contest...
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2006-03-16 10:02:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Made me smile.
Submitted by GodLovesALittleLovin (user info) at 2006-03-16 09:58:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
You should think about joining a black metal band.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-16 09:58:17 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
1.5
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-16 09:57:57 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked it, it flowed really smoothly from onbe stanza to the next. The image it started to paint was nice. But...it just seemed unfinished to me.
Sorry.
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2006-03-16 09:40:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice.
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2006-03-16 09:29:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
fuckin homo
Submitted by RyuFu (user info) at 2006-03-16 09:18:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Fuck off, n00b.
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-03-16 09:11:34 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Okay.
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2006-03-16 09:11:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Short and sweet.