Beautiful (1323 hits)
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Rating: 1.76 on 41 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by FunnyAsCancer (View user info) at 2006-03-19 19:45:40 EST
There once was a girl who was beautiful. And I don't mean the "damn I'd like to get my hands on her" type of beautiful, I mean the real type of beautiful, the kind of beautiful poets dream of for inspiration.
I knew that girl. She was my friend.
And it was only natural that at one point I began to have feelings for this girl. For you see, she was beautiful, and who doesn't love beautiful?
And so I tried to win her. That may sound like a horrible phrase, "win her," but I feel it's a fair phrase. For you see, I was not the only one trying to be with her. After all, she was beautiful.
So in a sense, it was a competition, a race to obtain her affection. And while the motivation may have varied, the prize was always the same: her.
We began our small battle on some odd day way back when, an invisible war where the combatants never saw each other, only strove blindly forward to the end of the rainbow.
I had always thought I had the upper hand, a secret advantage in this dangerous game we played, for you see, I was her friend. And I had been for a fairly long time. And I had loved her for a very long time, as well. Four years, in fact.
Now tell me, after four years, of love and friendship, wouldn't you expect some form of positive reaction? Some sense of warmth and understanding, a mutual agreement that it might be time for romantic momentum?
I did.
And so I tried to show her a beauty she had not seen before, one stronger than what God saw when he looked down upon her. I tried to show her my heart.
I took it slow, for I knew in this world we now live in, romance has taken a backseat to cynicism, apathy towards love. What in one time may have been adorable, downright sweet and touching, can now instigate fear, a repulsion that somehow your suitor may be obsessed, unable to control themselves.
The odd visit here and there, the occasional night on the town, the brief bit of flirting every once in a while...nothing too horrible, I would say. I was still trying to be her friend, just with a little bit more behind it.
And things were great. We were on a level of friendship I had never knew before, she wanted to spend more time with me, and we were both happy. Times were good.
And then I did something stupid. I would not know it was stupid until a month later, for at the time I thought it was beautiful.
I gave her a valentine. Granted, it was at midnight at the beginning of Valentine's Day, but I thought that made it all the more special.
Unfortunately for me, I forgot that beauty is dead, murdered at the hands at apathy. Turns out my friend was not so beautiful after all, or else she would have been able to relate.
And so, like I said earlier, I found out that what I had done was quite possibly the most stupid thing I have ever done, even worse than when I pushed the button on a car's cigarette lighter and touched my finger to the other end. I had tried to show the beautiful beauty, and the end result was a beauty overload that led to a fiery explosion.
Something died in that explosion, whether it was our friendship, my love for her, or maybe even the dreams of all hopeless romantics out there striving for something they can't quite comprehend. In any case, the remains were unrecognizable, charred beyond all belief.
I survived that explosion, walked away on my own two feet. I never found her, though, perhaps she survived as well and hid herself to prevent another incident.
And now, much much later, even though she hurt me, after she threw away all the good times we had together, I find it odd that I still care for her. I wonder if she's all right, how she's doing now that I'm out of her life. I dare not inquire, for I know that would only hurt her once more, and I don't want to do that again.
Perhaps I had it backwards all along. Maybe it was my naiveté, my blind trust in believing that beauty might still exist, that led me to love her. Maybe I was the beautiful one after all. It's hard to say.
But the one thing I do know is the times we shared together. Even though I've lost the lover, the memories of her and I remain, and still they make me smile.
I knew a girl, and together we were beautiful.
User Reviews
Submitted by r0fl (user info) at 2006-03-23 00:58:33 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
My bad for not catching this guy earlier.
Or girl, if your wanna be a dick about it.
Submitted by Istaros (user info) at 2006-03-21 00:46:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
"Submitted by Professional_Peon (user info) at 2006-03-20 16:30:36 (#)
Ranking: 2
'Fact: It is nigh on impossible to go from being close, intimate friends to sleeping together.'
Um... that's just an excuse chicks use when they really aren't interested."
yeah seriously
Submitted by Sheba (user info) at 2006-03-21 00:16:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Professional_Peon (user info) at 2006-03-20 16:30:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
"Fact: It is nigh on impossible to go from being close, intimate friends to sleeping together."
Um... that's just an excuse chicks use when they really aren't interested.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-03-20 15:54:51 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
now I got that Christina Aguilera song in my head.
Submitted by FunnyAsCancer (user info) at 2006-03-20 15:49:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Well Ozzy, seeing as I met her when we were both 13, putting the moves on her right away might have been a bit weird.
Not to mention the fact that I did ask her out at 14, 16, and 18.
So don't think I'm "just a pussy who couldn't muster up the balls." This, looking back, was just a spectacular exercise in futility that makes a nice little story/moral.
As for this type of story being overdone, I challenge you to find a topic that hasn't. You're hating the game, and as the player, I'm doggone pissed off.
Submitted by Snark (user info) at 2006-03-20 14:45:31 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Rose colored eyeballs.
Submitted by ozzy (user info) at 2006-03-20 10:04:47 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
Urgh. I don't enjoy this type of post for 2 reasons.
Firstly, it's been done a bazillion times (as you know).
Secondly, it frustrates me to read when guys have these feelings for women, but don't say anything to her for fear of being rejected. Just so you know, if you'd have actually made a move immediately after you first met her, you'd probably have bagged her.
Fact: It is nigh on impossible to go from being close, intimate friends to sleeping together.
If you want to bang /have relationships with that kind of woman, you need to develop an ego.
Submitted by Susie_Derkins (user info) at 2006-03-20 09:28:25 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Beauty and those who truly appreciate it are out there, they're just extremely hard to find.
Submitted by DCWoody (user info) at 2006-03-20 09:00:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Better this than you just put off making a move out of fear, and you put it off and put it off and she goes off to uni and you never see her again.
Submitted by DizzyMissus (user info) at 2006-03-20 07:30:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Nellypaal (user info) at 2006-03-20 06:37:38 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Magic_Monkey (user info) at 2006-03-20 05:34:11 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Yup , somehow every guy gets a chance to meet this beautiful girl and later , once all the mystery is gone that's when you realize nothing is as it's seems ...
Submitted by blueboy (user info) at 2006-03-20 05:16:47 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I have class in three hours and haven't slept yet.
And for some reason I thought you all should know.
Submitted by FunnyAsCancer (user info) at 2006-03-20 04:54:50 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
My life would make an excellent chick flick.
Every time I write a story like this, it's 90% true. So if it's depressing but beautiful, and doesn't end with the girl dying, it happened.
And for some reason I thought you all should know.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-03-20 04:54:04 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Hang on, I'm not having this. You loved this girl, right? Then suddenly, after four years, you suddenly decide that she's not as great as you think she is?
It's ok though, the reality is probably a bit too horrifying to pen. I'd rather not see it myself to be honest, that shit is really depressing.
Submitted by a_reader (user info) at 2006-03-20 03:48:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Fuck, how I can relate to this....
... and it was really good.
Submitted by blueboy (user info) at 2006-03-20 02:55:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Well look who got over 20 reviews.
Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2006-03-20 02:45:30 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Sehr Gut.
-Dave
Submitted by erosion_rules (user info) at 2006-03-20 00:59:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Ugh, gay!
In all actuality, it was good.
Submitted by Jejune_Jesuit (user info) at 2006-03-20 00:54:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm a sucker for Múm-style paintings.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2006-03-19 23:16:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2006-03-19 23:08:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
fuckfuckfuck...
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2006-03-19 23:08:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
DAMN
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2006-03-19 23:08:19 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
SORRY
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2006-03-19 23:08:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
SHIT
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2006-03-19 23:08:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
w00t, man. woot.
Submitted by pragmatic (user info) at 2006-03-19 22:59:56 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I like
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-19 22:42:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
impressive!
Submitted by Kale (user info) at 2006-03-19 22:35:18 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by ripple (user info) at 2006-03-19 22:23:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by MetalMilitiaMan (user info) at 2006-03-19 22:17:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by ampersand (user info) at 2006-03-19 21:53:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I shouldn't read things like this because they just knock my courage down further. Now it'll be at least three years before I ask another girl out. Thanks jerk.
'Beauty is truth, truth beauty,—that is all
Ye know on earth, and all ye need to know.'
-Keats
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-19 21:44:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by psychodude98 (user info) at 2006-03-19 21:19:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Moving.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-03-19 21:06:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Great writing. Now track the bitch down and kill her. :)
Submitted by mockidol (user info) at 2006-03-19 20:59:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
mmmhm
Submitted by blueboy (user info) at 2006-03-19 20:59:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You ever plan on finishing fired or scapegoat?
Submitted by blueboy (user info) at 2006-03-19 20:58:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Great as usually.
Submitted by earth_collapse (user info) at 2006-03-19 20:44:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
For you see...
I did like this as well.
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2006-03-19 20:32:27 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this.