FUPA R#2: Bella Blue (1341 hits)
Category: NoneLabels: poetry
Rating: 1.61 on 30 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Sacrilicious (View user info) at 2006-03-26 23:08:14 EST
She began as shallow whispers in October
When leaden hearts, unswayed by sodden autumn winds,
Spawned clenched hands and furrowed brows,
Dewy sideward glances and pursed lips
As blood and breath flowed through her,
Hands began to yearn, while softened brows
Framed glances turned inward
And lips turned upward
Into plaintive, pensive smiles-
worried, wanting, and waiting
She blazed forth as a sunburst in June,
And all in her presence took heed
Mother's milk turned fear into wonder
She was here, she was ours, she was love
The summer's swelter could not quell
Her blooming, beaming spirit
The kind that made men move mountains
And women sing starry hymns
One tender blossom, sweet and strong,
Saved souls and raised the heavy hearts
Then, like ink stained on gray canvas,
The blackbird set to flight
That cold January night
With not a moment's notice
A gasp, a choke, and she was gone
She was gone
Our wretched cries, our desperate pleas
That rattled earth and shook the skies,
Were helpless to amend her cruel fate
And under winter's white blanket,
A tiny oaken box was entombed
Amidst wails of kin and darkest dirge
Her sweet swan song
Haunts me still
The fairest of all
Our Bella Blue is gone
User Reviews
Submitted by webcorona (user info) at 2007-01-09 11:29:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2007-01-09 11:00:04 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2006-12-11 13:54:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by ticklish_squirrel (user info) at 2006-12-11 12:18:20 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
makes my heart hurt
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-12-10 22:35:59 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
SUPA IS COMING........SOON
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2006-12-10 22:20:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-07-27 11:55:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
fucka
Submitted by ruthless (user info) at 2006-04-03 16:20:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-04-01 11:13:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
hey wifey, i didn't say the douche like comments left on my post's reviews. simple catalyst logged in as me said that shit.
glah. i look like a douche now.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-30 16:28:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2006-03-30 08:36:49 (#)
Ranking: 2
"She blazed forth as a sunburst in June"
The second time through, that's where I choked up.
Lovely poem, and not merely overblown emotional catharsis - I love this.
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Thank you, Circe.
That means something coming from you. Sincerely.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2006-03-30 08:36:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
"She blazed forth as a sunburst in June"
The second time through, that's where I choked up.
Lovely poem, and not merely overblown emotional catharsis - I love this.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-29 19:46:44 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
You KNOW I liked this.
You're still a peach.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-29 00:29:28 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
If you read only one heartbreaking poem this year, make it this one.
You emu-posting motherfuckers.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-28 09:33:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
My alpha, my omega
Sweet and silver sounding savior
Whether it's ridiculous
Or cuts down to the quick of us
In the end we'll always be
My diamonds, your mahogany
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-28 02:33:24 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
I walked the Uber wide and wild
Where rabbits roam and emus smile,
The miles below my feet left sole
And soul together tired; but rest
I found in seas of scarlet, she the
Red-locked former harlot, I a poet
Searching for a muse to mend my rhyme;
The waters of my Magdalene
Washed doubt away and on my skin
The touch of inspiration came as
With her hair she dried the douse
And dose, the woman's trick, the
Lines were penned, the posts were
Clicked, and in the streets of
Bartville minus twos were seen as crimes.
If hard times come for Mags and me
With "oh noes," there's a remedy:
We skate it off by hopping on a
Plane to Honalee.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-28 01:34:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Still brilliant
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-27 18:14:58 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Why wouldn't you share the story with Uber?
::MAKES RAPE AND NECROPHILIA JOKES::
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-03-27 17:25:02 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
i liked it.
also the best writing is always the personal stuff you don't want to share.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-27 14:57:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks, everyone.
I considered not sharing this story with uber; it's really very personal to me. But I'm glad to know it's appreciated.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-27 14:38:09 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Look at you coming out of your shell and such.
So this IS personal, huh? I was wondering when I read it. It reads like you 'know' what you're trying to say - it carries that undefined nature of a subject that you don't need or want to hold anyone's hand for while they read it.
Nice split from the rhyming form, too.
Submitted by MyTeeOne (user info) at 2006-03-27 12:19:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
That was very pretty and I'm sorry for your loss.
If it makes you feel better you can come over and cuddle.
Submitted by leilani (user info) at 2006-03-27 12:07:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
:( this was really good but sad.... that she only lived less than a year
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-03-27 09:30:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 0
For my niece
Isabella Aislinn Kelly
6/11/04-1/20/05
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-03-27 08:16:21 EST (#)
Ranking: -1
I upped your rating for your interest in my nuts.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-03-27 07:58:26 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-27 06:53:13 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
This seriously needs more reviews.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-27 01:36:52 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Comments seem a bit silly here. I'd like to give you a hug is all.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-26 23:16:43 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
'tis beautiful.
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-03-26 23:12:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Reminds me of Nevermore's "Dreaming Neon Black" album.
Well written, loveslave.
(DISCLAIMINATOR: Nobody here likes Nevermore or much less knows who they are- but if anyone actually does then they are worthy of a blowjob on my part and totally see where that comment is coming from)
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-03-26 23:11:37 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
"i loved a maid, as cold as winter"