FUPA Round 2 - In this sand (Villanelle) (895 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryLabels: uber-related
Rating: 1.73 on 17 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Circe <fickle.muse.at.gmail.com> (View user info) at 2006-03-27 08:17:56 EST
There are bones beneath my feet. They sigh
with the weight of eons, and shift
And, shifting, crumble - all things die.
I was not the first to walk here. I
in the complex thread of lifedeath, drift
There are bones beneath my feet. They sigh
that every breath that crackles, dry
into me has been used by men - a dying gift
As they shift and crumble - all things die.
This sand, bleached shell, a silent cry
'We lived forever in the rift'
There are bones beneath my feet. They sigh
Of battles fought and won, and why
I dare to touch them, now, and sift
and let them crumble - all things die
An endless beach - white sand, blue sky
I stand carelessly on what once lived
There are bones beneath my feet. They sigh
and, shifting, crumble - all things die.
User Reviews
Submitted by Alter (user info) at 2007-09-26 22:07:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No, Comment.
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2006-12-09 12:18:12 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2006-12-09 12:08:29 (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
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Damn it +2ing all of circe's posts is MY QUEST.
MINE.
FIND YOUR OWN.
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2006-12-09 12:08:29 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-03-30 16:16:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
LOOK UPON MY WORKS YE MIGHTY, AND DESPAIR
Submitted by VelvetElvis (user info) at 2006-03-28 00:51:32 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Reminiscent of Pablo neruda.
Submitted by LadyPlural (user info) at 2006-03-27 22:31:29 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by MyTeeOne (user info) at 2006-03-27 16:04:49 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow. This should have WAY more reviews. I liked the flow of it.
You rock Circe. If you ever want to become an American you can marry me.
Submitted by PokeyPecker (user info) at 2006-03-27 13:48:53 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
CIRCE TOOK BACK UBERSITE!!!
Submitted by nitty34 (user info) at 2006-03-27 13:35:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
THIS WAS GREAT.
(this was better http://www.ubersite.com/m/85873)
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-03-27 13:25:06 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Why doesn't this have more reviews?
I swear, the great stuff gets overlooked.
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2006-03-27 10:51:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-03-27 09:44:03 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-03-27 08:57:54 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
solid.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-03-27 08:28:39 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Caesar's Last Breath +2
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-03-27 08:24:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Proper. For some reason I pictured Son House singing this. But that's most likely my problem.
You should've saved this one for the time/history theme and written another for this round, heh.
This was really good.
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2006-03-27 08:21:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-03-27 08:20:16 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
Rumor has it that you're going to win even with this probably undeserved -2.