The day everything changed (481 hits)
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Submitted by DizzyMissus (View user info) at 2006-03-27 18:49:07 EST
It was 1978. Early May.
My brother and I were sat at the table eating our breakfast. Just a normal beginning to a normal school day.
There was a knock at the door; I went bounding through the hall to answer it. It was my Aunt and Uncle and some other guy that I didn't recognise I was really happy to see my relatives. I don't know why but I didn't think it was strange that they were knocking at our door at such an early time of the morning. They lived 20 miles away and hadn't come visiting at that time of the morning - ever. But still I didn't think it anything of it.
I bid them a cheerful 'hello' and shouted to my Mum that we had visitors.
Stupid fuck.
I went back to the table and continued with my breakfast. My brother and I sat there, me still not thinking that anything out of the ordinary was happening.
The next thing I hear was my Mum shouting out my Dads name. I can still hear it now - and the noise of her collapsing in the hallway.
My brother and I were still sitting at the table, in silence. After a while, it must have been minutes, but it felt like hours, our eyes met.
"Its not Dad" I said. "It can't be, it must be Granddad." I needed coherence. I needed to protect myself from the pain that was slowly coursing through my being.
My brother lowered his eyes, not being able to meet mine for any longer. I was desperate to push away the knowledge that was slowly being pushed in front of me.
My Dad had been working abroad; I had only spoken to him a few days before. He had told me about the things he had bought for me and how he was looking forward to seeing me. I had felt safe then, everything had been normal I couldn't have imagined that only days later he was dead.
26 years later. I am still a 'Daddys Girl' and it still kills me.
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Submitted by Goneril (user info) at 2006-03-28 05:26:09 EST (#)
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I hear that. I was sat in a pub the day i got that phonecall, it's good to know that they're never forgotten though.
Submitted by Mrdurden24 (user info) at 2006-03-28 03:42:22 EST (#)
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no comment
Submitted by DizzyMissus (user info) at 2006-03-28 03:02:24 EST (#)
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No, last night, after a few bevvies. Maths went a bit wrong!
Submitted by Psycosis (user info) at 2006-03-27 23:51:21 (#)
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I take it you wrote this a few years ago
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2006-03-28 00:27:10 EST (#)
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Feel your pain.
I won't forget the day my parents died.
Submitted by Psycosis (user info) at 2006-03-27 23:51:21 EST (#)
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I take it you wrote this a few years ago?
Submitted by Still-Life (user info) at 2006-03-27 23:44:43 EST (#)
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I was desperate to push away the knowledge that was slowly being pushed in front of me.
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That was the only line I didn't really like. The push and push made it a bit off-kilter. Maybe "Thrust away the knowlege that was slowly being pushed in front of me" or even reword the entire thing..
Submitted by Psycosis (user info) at 2006-03-27 23:09:29 EST (#)
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I think that was really well written.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-03-27 19:35:11 EST (#)
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Could have used more fleshing out.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-03-27 19:21:49 EST (#)
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I needed to protect myself from the pain that was slowly coursing through my being. """
jeeeeeezus!
sorry your da died and all but the CLICHE ALARM IS RINGING OFF THE HOOK.
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2006-03-27 19:11:35 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
"Grandfather dies, Father dies, Son dies".
How would you have it?
A decent read, though.