FUPA - A Chink of Light Between Eternities (1014 hits)
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Submitted by Axolotl (View user info) at 2006-04-03 08:27:28 EDT
All right, I'll be serious. No shenanigans with the title, no borderline shock porn, no videos of old women getting kicked in the head...the poem is serious.
By the way, who laughed last night watching the Sopranos when the rapper kept telling the other guy to hold the sattelite dish out of the window? Cool cat.
I turned sixteen years old at 12:04 this morning. Also, I now have 100,000 hits, since Friday. I thought once I passed the hundred-grand mark I would be blessed with perfect ratings, free food, strippers, and a commemorative plaque...but I have learned that Uber is just a website. No trophy or plaque. Ah well, I'll be driving soon. I can pick up food and plaques.
After the Pandemic coming up soon.
FUPA - Time and History
-----------------A Chink of Light Between Eternities-----------------------
Past the maternal waterways the babe
Tumbles out onto the vast dusty earth
Nine months of placental pleasure departs
Security lost in the pain of birth
A year can pass and the mewling child grows
Hair on his head, his clown visage transforms
And now he is a boy! He has his snakes
Dinosaurs to play with, and ants, and worms
All in his mind, his imagination
He quits the breast, and shuns his infant toys
With his schoolmates. They learn to read and write
The freedom to traipse to school with the other boys
A year seems forever in a child's youth
He grows to a man, now a grumbling teen
A lover, a friend, with all the troubles
No longer from his old mother does wean
Still he cleaves to his mother's dear bosom
He weeps, loves, and laughs, his emotion high
And like father from whom the boy was sir'd
The best years of his life soon pass him by
The years pass quicker, he now sees time's flow
The years of his childhood depart and go
He is a man, a soldier, and a judge
Clawing his place in the sun for his life
Breaking his back as he is torn screaming
Into the world. From young love, a wife
The years fly by, the traumas of childhood
The juvenile tears, the infantile cries
And imagined toils of his young life
Father Time reaps all, and Father Time flies
Middle age sets in, his thick hair is lost
He has children himself, the cycle starts
Anew. Sickness, and death, and mortgages
Tear away with time through his soul and heart
His parents die, and his hair becomes grey
Slowly sinks to the evening of the brain
Joints pop, bones grow weary, white teeth decay
Straddling the border of sane and insane
Eighty years pass in less than a second
The mind past on, with soul and his body
Dying, dying, dead. For what is life but
A chink of light between eternities
Flesh rots, mountains crumble, and empires fall
For Father Time, in his time, conquers all
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This is a picture I took in the Sierra Nevada last summer. I thought it seemed fitting.
User Reviews
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-05 16:27:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
1.5
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-05 16:27:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked the title.
I liked the piece.
I just didn't LOVE it.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-04-05 16:26:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-04-04 09:54:28 (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn...you're only 16?!?
You've got potential, kid.
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Agreed.
Unless you're 37 and just look young for your age.
I like how this rolled as I read it, and really appreciate how you stuck to your syllables and rhymes.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-04-04 09:54:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn...you're only 16?!?
You've got potential, kid.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-04-03 19:42:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You have aptly put what I was striving for in my post. The life of a small boy
seems an endless blending of new experiences, and three months of Summer may
seem an eternity. The older one gets the faster time seems to move.
Of course, that is pure crap. The hours in a day are the same at my age (56) as
they are at your age (16). Fuckin' punk. :-D
I don't have a clue what causes the difference of perception, but it is there. . .
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 17:27:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
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Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 16:43:41 EDT (#)
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Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-04-03 16:29:31 (#)
Ranking: 2
What do you get to do now, that you're sixteen?
OH THATS RIGHT GET A JOB SPONGER
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I work at TWO jobs as a matter of fact, JonnyX, and I have since last June. I started my first job, finished school, and joined Uber on the same day - June 9.
My parents are definitely not paying my college. It's my responsibility to work for my money.
Who says Generation Y is a bunch of spongers?
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-04-03 16:29:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
What do you get to do now, that you're sixteen?
OH THATS RIGHT GET A JOB SPONGER
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 12:37:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Shlongy is an elderly man in the nursing home, and he is senile. He accidentally shot Tony Soprano because he thought he was a pussy of some sort.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 12:16:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-04-03 12:13:44 (#)
Ranking: -2
Needs less poetry.
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Weeps. There was an introduction, and a pretty picture for you to look at as well.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-04-03 12:13:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Needs less poetry.
Submitted by The_Cyst_Master (user info) at 2006-04-03 11:38:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The Ax Man makes my clit hard.
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-04-03 10:28:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
happy birthday.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 10:13:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-04-03 10:01:27 (#)
Ranking: 2
ok you should do poetry more often you're good at it.
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Maybe occasionally, but I'll stick at fiction mostly.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-04-03 10:01:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
ok you should do poetry more often you're good at it.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 10:00:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
The picture was taken on Kaiser Ridge near Mt. Whitney in California.
Submitted by Grimm (user info) at 2006-04-03 09:18:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:55:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Excellent work. More comments when I get off work.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:54:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:50:32 (#)
Ranking: 2
Ax- I didn't know you had this poetry in you. It's great, and I'm impressed.
I still thought it had something to do with an Asian.
Happy Birthday.
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Thanks, Sacrilicious.
There was a video about an Asian knight called "A Chink in the Armor" that was fairly coo.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:50:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Ax- I didn't know you had this poetry in you. It's great, and I'm impressed.
I still thought it had something to do with an Asian.
Happy Birthday.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:49:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Or old women being kicked in the head.
The intro was necessary.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:44:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:42:17 (#)
Ranking: 2
You STILL had an intro. I fucking saw it.
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Well YEAH. But it didn't involve any Sex Fuck Porn Black Man Penguin or such nonsense.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:42:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You STILL had an intro. I fucking saw it.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:36:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks, I'll be sure not to hit either of you while out taking my permit!
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:34:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Happy Birthday. You talented fuck.
Submitted by JMG114 (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:30:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Right on. Happy birthday, and I like the picture.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-04-03 08:28:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I was originally going to title this a Chink Between Eternities, but it would seem like I'm talking about an Asian guy in limbo.