FUPA Round 3 - Spoils of war (1045 hits)
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Submitted by Circe <fickle.muse.at.gmail.com> (View user info) at 2006-04-04 13:37:10 EDT
Eighteen years, trapped in a box of wood and glass
Caught in cogwheels
Pinned like butterflies
And chiming every quarter hour
There is time we waste
Time we spend
Time we lose
And there is the time caught in that wooden clock
Which is true.
I took it not because it was mine
But because it was me
Because it had ticked away every second of my life
Because that brass second hand swept the empty moments away like broken glass
And left the future clean
They
Screamed
Like
Children
Fighting over a sweet
So I
Me
I took it off them.
and left them to divide up the record collection and my baby pictures
and throw china plates at each other
at least until the divorce went through
Put the clock on my wall and watched it
once again, that true solid timekeeper
time might fly or crawl
But not in the presence of my clock
And for nine years
Polished, shining, loved, hung straight
In every new house
In every new town
Opposite the front door
Always, fucking always, do you see?
Always the same
She, indomitable spirit of an unstoppable harpy She
Took it today
Off my wall
Every quarter hour I wait for something
Long gone unnoticed, but always heard
And the house is silent
And I don't know what time it is anymore.
User Reviews
Submitted by Alter (user info) at 2007-09-26 22:07:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No, Comment.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-12-09 12:23:42 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2006-12-09 12:21:10 (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn it +2ing all of circe's posts is MY QUEST.
MINE.
FIND YOUR OWN.
********
Doodles, do you need more applesauce? I need to drop a deuce....
Submitted by Doodles (user info) at 2006-12-09 12:21:10 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Damn it +2ing all of circe's posts is MY QUEST.
MINE.
FIND YOUR OWN.
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2006-12-09 12:10:22 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
beautiful as always
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-04-06 05:29:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
OMG LOOK ETS IS NOT ONLY A SCIENTIFIC GENIUS AND A SOCIO-POLITICAL GENIUS
HES A LITERARY GENIUS AS WELL
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-04-05 16:35:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-04-04 18:54:44 (#)
Ranking: 2
Pretty good for something you pulled out of your ass at the last minute,
but it washed up just fine. :-D
---
She's a woman, after all.
Anything coming out of a proper woman's ass is compact, clean and carries with it a hint of cinnamon.
Anyway...this was good. You know it, I know it.
I tend to like more traditional forms of poetry, as I get either bored or irritated with pieces that stray from the standard. This is typically because a lot of people don't know how to work with the style. You, on the other hand, do, and as such there's nothing I've read of yours that I haven't enjoyed.
So...thanks for that.
Submitted by Coleslaw_Murphy (user info) at 2006-04-05 10:04:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-04-05 08:06:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Flanders: "Sometimes you've got to SPOIL yourself, SPOIL yourself, SPOIL yourself, SPOIL yourself, SPOIL yourself, SPOIL yourself, SPOIL yourself,...."
Homer: "Mmmmm....must have expensive running shoes." *drools*
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-04 22:21:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Yes! I call all the credit! I told her to write this gem!
(She may or may not have already been planning to write said gem.)
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-04-04 21:24:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2006-04-04 21:21:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Circe Circe Circe. I have nothing to say, just wanted to say your UBER name three times. you know if you say it out loud it sounds like a drunk guy saying hes thirsty. Oh and you work mates look at you strangly. Carry on.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-04-04 21:11:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
ETS offset
Who the fuck uses the word "offset"?
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-04-04 21:09:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Whoa!! ETS, I never knew ya had it in ya. Anyway, I didn't put it
in ya.... :-/
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2006-04-04 21:05:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I like it that you understand the lyrical quality of poetry - that not every sentence has to end. That sometimes emotions are little more than shards of a whole, where half are mysteriously missing and the half that are left leave us with an undefinable sense of all that is possible - but through it all courses the emotion...sure and steady.
I think you could clean up some of your phrases, but overall, the shards are there.
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2006-04-04 20:55:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Shlongy offset.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-04-04 18:54:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Pretty good for something you pulled out of your ass at the last minute,
but it washed up just fine. :-D
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-04-04 16:43:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
first line i thought snow white.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-04 16:32:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Meaning I liked the way it made my head feel after reading it.
I'm done.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-04 16:23:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
huh
This was just right.
Submitted by Kopesh (user info) at 2006-04-04 15:20:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
... okay...
Submitted by MyTeeOne (user info) at 2006-04-04 15:11:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-04 14:31:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fantastic, Circe.
They
Screamed
Like
Children
Fighting over a sweet
So I
Me
I took it off them.
I felt your frustration when I read this.
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2006-04-04 14:31:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2006-04-04 14:11:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by toucan_sam (user info) at 2006-04-04 14:07:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
meh...
Submitted by c1ndy (user info) at 2006-04-04 13:50:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I've just realised why I hate poetry so much. It's because of my job. I read your poem and all I could think was a list of poetic devices you have used....
ohhh look enjambement!
run on lines!
Unequal metre!
blahblahblah
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-04-04 13:47:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Too late...Tits or not.
DQ
DQ
DQ
DQ
DQ
I call DQ
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2006-04-04 13:45:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hey, there's a Blue Öyster Cult fan in the house! Rockin.
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2006-04-04 13:44:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
In San Dimas, the clock is always ticking.
This was good. I thought for sure the clock was going to get destroyed and time would come to a stop or something. Nicely avoided!
Submitted by PokeyPecker (user info) at 2006-04-04 13:41:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm spreading a plastic sheet over the wall to my right at this very moment so that when I pull the shotgun trigger, the brains won't stain the wall.
Thanks Circe, for driving me to suicide. I'll be haunting you, your children and your grandchildren till you all DIE BITCH DIE!!
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-04-04 13:39:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
time everlasting,
time to play B-sides...