FUPA Round 4 - Kalgoorlie (1192 hits)
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Rating: 1.74 on 36 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Circe <fickle.muse.at.gmail.com> (View user info) at 2006-04-10 23:24:45 EDT
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Submitted by Alter (user info) at 2007-09-26 22:08:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No, Comment.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-04-12 20:22:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I hate to say this, but I was never able to get into this.
Maybe it's because I don't have an understanding of, or appreciation for, the material, and that disconnect is responsible for my feelings towards the piece.
That could be, but I'm a smart monkey and can read a piece for languge, theme and style despite not being absolutely familiar with the subject matter.
Even then, there's something about it that never grabbed me, never made me sit up and say "yes."
The backbone of the poem is good, and you've some wonderful word weaving in your stanzas.
It's just not enough for me, particularly when compared to your other excellent entries this round.
As scourge has said a few times during this comp - it's a bitch to rate poetry. So personal.
Submitted by gank (user info) at 2006-04-12 09:56:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I've read this thing about 5 times or so since you first posted it, trying to find a reason to give it better than a 0.
I settled on a 1 for spots of insightful language and that you tied the whole thing together nicely.
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2006-04-11 18:04:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Bloody hell, I'm sorry for looking suspicious, it's a damn good poem.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:53:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:38:11 (#)
Ranking: 1
I object to that- I'm not important enough to have an alter... wasn't it you who told me something like that? Maybe it was someone else. Hell, I'm surprised I haven't been accused of being one myself. This is a good poem and a good competition and I wouldn't want to disrespect either by fucking with it in such an obvious way. And besides, you can get to all the posts in this round from this post which is on most heated...
I suppose you could be accusing someone else, but this seemed like an obvious accusation against me and I'm somewhat insulted.
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I've only ever rated one of your posts and I don't believe it was to call you an alter or say you were important enough to have one, so no, it wasn't me who made the accusation in the past.
I'm accusing whoever is doing it. If it was you, you're a dipshit. If it wasn't you, whoever it was is a dipshit.
Someone is playing games, the way I see it.
You don't see it as odd that these two posts- NO OTHERS, INCLUDING THE OTHER TWO IN THE COMP- are the only ones that were rated and the user saw fit to give each one of them one of the extreme ends of the rating scale?
You don't find that to be the least bit fishy? C'mon man...
So...
Be insulted all you want chief, I'm not going to bother caring because I didn't level any accusations at you. OK?
I harbor no ill will towards you and I didn't say that you did this, so don't jump to conclusions.
Last thing, this isn't the place for you to say something to me about it. This is your competition right here. Kind of poor form in these contests to be replying on the oppo entry unless you're dropping a deuce.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:46:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by clairitea123 (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:14:03 (#)
Ranking: -2
-2 for the picture
it's pretty but it destracts from the poem itself i think
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equalizer
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:38:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:32:15 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by clairitea123 (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:15:13 (#)
Ranking: 0
and i'm giving your poem a zero because it's not as good as the picture
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Submitted by clairitea123 (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:14:03 (#)
Ranking: -2
-2 for the picture
it's pretty but it destracts from the poem itself i think
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Whose alter are you?
It seems a bit odd to me that you have only ever reviewed two posts. This one and the one that it is up against in this competition. Neither of which is on the front page or in the MRR.
And the opposition post is solid gold, but this got a -2 for the PICTURE?
What a strange coincidence...
Good thing you just happened to have stumbled across both of these exact posts and were able to skew the competition in the right direction.
I suspect absolutely no foul play here at all.
None whatsoever.
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I object to that- I'm not important enough to have an alter... wasn't it you who told me something like that? Maybe it was someone else. Hell, I'm surprised I haven't been accused of being one myself. This is a good poem and a good competition and I wouldn't want to disrespect either by fucking with it in such an obvious way. And besides, you can get to all the posts in this round from this post which is on most heated...
I suppose you could be accusing someone else, but this seemed like an obvious accusation against me and I'm somewhat insulted.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:37:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
really fucking nice
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:32:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by clairitea123 (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:15:13 (#)
Ranking: 0
and i'm giving your poem a zero because it's not as good as the picture
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Submitted by clairitea123 (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:14:03 (#)
Ranking: -2
-2 for the picture
it's pretty but it destracts from the poem itself i think
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Whose alter are you?
It seems a bit odd to me that you have only ever reviewed two posts. This one and the one that it is up against in this competition. Neither of which is on the front page or in the MRR.
And the opposition post is solid gold, but this got a -2 for the PICTURE?
What a strange coincidence...
Good thing you just happened to have stumbled across both of these exact posts and were able to skew the competition in the right direction.
I suspect absolutely no foul play here at all.
None whatsoever.
Submitted by clairitea123 (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:15:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
and i'm giving your poem a zero because it's not as good as the picture
Submitted by clairitea123 (user info) at 2006-04-11 17:14:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
-2 for the picture
it's pretty but it destracts from the poem itself i think
Submitted by Kopesh (user info) at 2006-04-11 16:42:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-04-11 12:39:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"drink too much and fuck too soon
smoke ciggarettes in rented rooms
quit our jobs and shoot the moon
slit our wrists and sleep til noon"
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2006-04-11 11:51:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
you're just an easy target, dipshit
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2006-04-11 10:35:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2006-04-11 02:37:30 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2006-04-11 01:57:51 (#)
Ranking: 2
There are some places on this planet that I picture as just desolate, lonely, and disjointed from the rest of the world, and I thank God every day that I was not born in such a place. I think Kalgoorlie is now one of them...right behind Antarctica.
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Do you thank God for your good fortune before or after you slash your wrists while listening to Nirvana?
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Ok, so you come to a poetry post and still immediately seek out whatever I said to comment on it. You're a real winner, Caul.
You know, now that I think about it, you're probably my most loyal follower.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-11 10:26:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
And we drink too much and sing too loud, pour water on the dirt
Winner.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-04-11 08:35:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Ainkara (user info) at 2006-04-11 06:39:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No idea what FUPA is, but I liked this. Never been out to Kal, furthest I've been in Northam, and that was only once... for about half an hour maybe... Lived down south till I was 5 though. It's prettier there. I like Balingup...
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2006-04-11 06:29:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Lovely
Submitted by iddqd (user info) at 2006-04-11 03:59:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
the problem i guess you have, caul, is due to the usual figurative nature of language, and in poetry the inferred knowledge i guess people need to understand some of it. the sounds, which are jsut as important (even to english) as the images in poetry will also possibly be alien to your frankophonic ear.
or, maybe you just havent indulged in enough. i recommend frost (if of course you havent already). its really accessible and beautiful language.
nice poem lynn. id like to be able to do this, but i just dont got it.
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2006-04-11 02:37:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2006-04-11 01:57:51 (#)
Ranking: 2
There are some places on this planet that I picture as just desolate, lonely, and disjointed from the rest of the world, and I thank God every day that I was not born in such a place. I think Kalgoorlie is now one of them...right behind Antarctica.
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Do you thank God for your good fortune before or after you slash your wrists while listening to Nirvana?
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-04-11 02:36:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2006-04-11 01:03:23 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-11 01:01:35 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2006-04-11 00:56:24 (#)
Ranking: 2
Can you beleive that, they grow banana's in WA?
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Get out of here. Really?
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I shit you not, still cant remember the name of the place, perhaps Circe will enlighten us?
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Sadly, as Stagger is my alter and I think Australia is a venomous place, I did not know this. Hence, he did not know this.
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2006-04-11 02:02:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Yes it was carnarvan, just north of there we were driving along and all of a sudden the sky was a mass of colour and horid noise as hundreds of small colourful birds bounced off our car like ping pong balls. They didnt bounce much after hitting the ground.
The silly things took flight from the road in front of us as we got to where they were on the road.
Submitted by electrictoothsyndrome (user info) at 2006-04-11 01:57:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
There are some places on this planet that I picture as just desolate, lonely, and disjointed from the rest of the world, and I thank God every day that I was not born in such a place. I think Kalgoorlie is now one of them...right behind Antarctica.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2006-04-11 01:33:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Carnarvon. About 1000 km north of here, on the coast - I went there on a fishing holiday a few years ago.
They grow mangoes, too.
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2006-04-11 01:03:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-11 01:01:35 (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2006-04-11 00:56:24 (#)
Ranking: 2
Can you beleive that, they grow banana's in WA?
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Get out of here. Really?
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I shit you not, still cant remember the name of the place, perhaps Circe will enlighten us?
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-11 01:01:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2006-04-11 00:56:24 (#)
Ranking: 2
Can you beleive that, they grow banana's in WA?
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Get out of here. Really?
Submitted by Saxon (user info) at 2006-04-11 00:56:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I have been to Kalgoorlie, peed on the main street and didnt find any opal. Quaint place with many bordello's and weird looking people.
I left when i got a job at a place called Mnt Tom Price, got stuck at a truck stop called Nanutara < check spelling. Driving up there i learnt they grow banana's at a town i cant remember the name of.
Can you beleive that, they grow banana's in WA?
Submitted by georgemichael (user info) at 2006-04-11 00:52:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
that is a great picture
Submitted by fried-green-potatoes (user info) at 2006-04-11 00:23:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Advance Australia Fair... that's far enough, mate.
Submitted by Caulaincourt (user info) at 2006-04-11 00:08:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I must confess. I can read most english writing and I'll usually understand 99% of it. But somehow, my brain is completly uncapable to compute English poetry, however rich or poor the vocabulary is.
All I see, even though I read, re-read and rereread it, is:
AL;SDKJFL;ASHDF4444ALKDFJ;A
;KJ;LKFE,.RNX,.MZNO;IFOIRJ
OEPRFN,.XMZCNV;LKSNFÉKLSNFG
ÉÉÉFASKLJÀÉAA¸<E;FKJA;JKF;E
I'd like to know why. Perhaps my brain needs to reject the outrageous act of using english for poetry.
I can't read these strophes but +1 because I liked the picture. :-/
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-10 23:53:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I had the tiniest bit of trouble with the flow on the first read, but I got it the second time around.
You've got some great imagery here, and it reads like an anthem of sorts- hard and resilient, but not sad. All in all, I love the hell out of it.
Submitted by EntityErased (user info) at 2006-04-10 23:49:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this.
One question though, what is FUPA?
I stopped reading Uber for a long time.
Now that I'm back, I've been seeing FUPA frequently, and can't quite figure out what it means.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-10 23:37:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Biased towards the poem, that is.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-10 23:36:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm so digustingly biased towards this because I'm Australian. Good show.
There she goes, my beautiful world...
Submitted by Coyote (user info) at 2006-04-10 23:30:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Sweet.
You forgot the occasional nuclear test perpetrated by Japanese death cults though...