Thrice Denied - an Introduction of Sorts (606 hits)
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Submitted by Id (View user info) at 2006-04-13 20:45:28 EDT
Who knew the clatter and jingle of coins could be so loud, as they were now?
Who knew that the sound of a bag of silver could penetrate the soul, as they were doing now?
Who knew of the terror that a mere pile of metal could instill upon the human mind, as they were doing now?
Judas Iscariot had not known. But he did now.
Within the darkness, he tred hurriedly to the designated spot. Where he was to show the temple guards the location of the camp. Where he was to earn his price. Where he was to betray Christ.
What thoughts did race through his mind, as his wide eyes scanned the darkness ahead? Could he have possibly known of the ramifications of his deeds on this night? Surely, the accusing clang of the silver he clutched must have been playing tricks on his mind. Did they whisper to him, his ill-gotten gains? Did the coins silently bray "Traitor", did they mock "Coward", had they silently screamed "Damned One"? His pace quickened.
Mayhaps the shadows began to dance around him. Perhaps the darkness took shape of ghosts and demons, reaching out with spectral hands to seize his pounding heart. Maybe he saw the face of his former Messiah, looking down upon his shaking wretchedness, now looking upon the silver that had sealed his date with the cross. And....for what? What Judas pondering that? Why?
Why was he sending his Christ to his assured doom? It could not possibly have been for want of money. From the look of his face, Iscariot wanted nothing more than to be rid of the vile stuff, yet still he held them to his heart. Ahead, he could make out faint torch light: the guards he is to meet no doubt. He must have been at least slightly relieved to be delivered from the crushing solitude that even now was beginning to claim his sanity.
And for all the guilt and shame and suffering, amidst the now overwhelming sound of the coins upon his mind, in spite of the terrors he must have known would soon unfold....did he ever wonder for one moment what he was about to make happen upon the world? Could he fathom the impact the death of his Christ, the ripples that would turn into a vast wave upon the spiritual conscience of the world? Would his crazed mind have been eased with the knowledge of the future Christian empire that was to be sown with the crucifixion?
Who knows.
I most certainly did not.
But oh how those silver coins did clatter as I buried my knife into his terrified heart.
He died quietly enough. Certainly with less suffering than...say....hanging oneself.
I looked up from the body. Dawn was fast approaching. Jesus must be watching the rising sun as well, awaiting the fate he has known was his since his little stroll in the desert years ago. Only, it no longer is his fate, now is it?
I chuckled to myself, eager to watch the new strands of history unfold.
Could the Christ be the Messiah, now that he no longer shall be a Martyr?
User Reviews
Submitted by ticklish_squirrel (user info) at 2006-12-18 18:45:15 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
Interesting thought, what would've happened...
Submitted by wookie (user info) at 2006-12-18 17:30:00 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-12-18 17:02:36 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
mayhap?
ahahaha
Submitted by cuberat (user info) at 2006-04-14 13:26:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Pretty good.
Submitted by leilani (user info) at 2006-04-14 10:30:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by FilthyAssistant (user info) at 2006-04-14 06:36:03 (#)
Ranking: 1
It's a bit grandiose with all the mayhaps and perchance shit, but ok.
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-04-14 09:04:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by FilthyAssistant (user info) at 2006-04-14 06:36:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
It's a bit grandiose with all the mayhaps and perchance shit, but ok.
Submitted by wetyourself (user info) at 2006-04-14 04:01:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
+1 = benefit of the doubt. I don't like this writing style or the subject, but it's something I don't see much. I think it's just too many questions, not enough description. Seemed distant to me, as if the Bible isn't distant enough. Also, I'm pretty sure there are no "real" authentic ideas especially in this area, so I don't really care that it's an overdone topic, but it's presented in an all too familiar way (especially for a Judas story).
That's just my take, but what the fuck do I know? I'm just a person capable of opinions and I write about people named Smitty.
Cool idea. Jacksuckass.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-14 03:38:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Quite decent. Keep at it.
Submitted by DavyJones (user info) at 2006-04-14 01:32:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I can't say I did or will read this, but jesus titty fuck man, 1 review in how many hours?
Take this pity +2 with my condolences.
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2006-04-13 22:13:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
this has got to be killing you...hell it's killing me...an hour and a half and not one review yet?
ok, i liked the beginning and the end and felt meh about the middle