FUPA Final: 12 Years (2013 hits)
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Submitted by Sacrilicious (View user info) at 2006-04-17 08:05:42 EDT
There was no April of mine that year
The fragrant haze on which I thrive
Was choked and veiled by
Souldust and ashes and
The cutting remnants of
A morbid year's passing.
I went walking,
To catch the sun,
To fill my head with it
But found it was obscured by clouds.
And so I sat, lost girl on the hill
When above me-
You happened
And my eyes met the kind of light
That burns fierce through the black
And stays, and stays
Like a beacon for all my nights.
To the swing and slide you were my guide
And as we glided through the mist
I knew I'd be unburdened by
The dusty, dismal bitterness
"Should we shout?
Should we scream?"
You said.
And yes, we both cried out.
We soon would play for days-
"Let's dye our hair,
Then go get high, and get some air.
We'll see a rock'n'roll show,
Doesn't matter whose or where."
And with the crowd we'd jump and sing
In kinship with those unknown souls
And know we both believed
These were our holiest of things.
We climbed the mountains
Lit our fires
On moonlit bayside shared desires,
We drove down to New Orleans
And to the drunken jazz we swayed.
We'd walk the city in the night
Dream dots melting in our mouths,
Tripping past the ghetto,
Seeking treasures of the town,
Gazing at the murals,
Color-basking in the lights,
And spinning circles in the fountain
'Til we headed for the bridge:
"We should share the same zip code-
Let's just go and make a home."
"You don't read my letters anyway,
So yeah, let's find a place to stay."
And so we went, for seven years.
We shared it all, our fears, our tears
The music, laughter, even sneers,
And sympathetic silence.
There is no wrong, there is no right-
I would have stayed forever.
But change, we should welcome
And the growing is in the going
On, and so we packed our things.
Each made our own way
Together, in a way
With not a mile in between.
Though sometimes, it surely seems
Like you are a world away.
"As soon as I get my head 'round you"
I always sang, and always knew
The complications we've endured
Have shaped us into who we are.
Last night we shared
Both smoke and bottle,
And spoke of new and troubled times.
In your eyes I saw the history
We've penned between us, sacredly,
I know we'll keep on writing
I for you, and you for me.
User Reviews
Submitted by rob_berg (user info) at 2008-03-11 02:51:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
<3
Submitted by experima (user info) at 2007-11-06 21:10:16 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
absolutely fantastic. thanks for the link.
i have a folder called "favourites" and now this is in it.
Submitted by webcorona (user info) at 2007-01-09 11:28:41 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Stabkill (user info) at 2007-01-08 22:31:05 EST (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2006-12-29 00:10:45 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
beautiful.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-07-27 11:56:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
that
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-05-15 23:50:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i missed the list of acceptable nicknames.
ha.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-24 18:25:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm sorry.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-24 17:21:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
p.s.- are you TS?
What does this mean?
Submitted by Mr_T (user info) at 2006-04-24 12:50:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
What all this jibba jabba? I like the picture and the fact that you dig the Hulkster.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-24 09:52:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by lickityspeed (user info) at 2006-04-23 01:50:37 (#)
Ranking: 2
ok, mr. scourge, i will. i was thinking of changing my name to sirlickityspeedymcspeedysamsneed. is that more lovable/less hatable? let me know.
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It's certainly more something.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-04-23 08:38:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
My user name is inadvertently ultra emo
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-23 08:19:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
VALERIE'S WORLDS ARE COLLIDING! And she loves it:)
ubernames are more important than you might think. I didn't consider mine would be shortened to "Sac" when I chose it. And now, I'm going to have to call you "lick". Ha- "Lish and Lick". Aww. I think I'll call you "speed". Unless I can use your real name.
As I said in a different review:
Not very fond of Sac. or Val. The following are acceptable:
Sacrilicious
Lish
Licious
Lishy (just for O, though)
Valerie
Baby Mama
Harlot of Scarlet
Wifey (just for ghola)
Magnificent Cunt (just for Circe)
Stupid Bitch (just for Sphagnum)
Valkyrie (just for TTOM)
..and a few more I can't think of. They'll come to me.
Oh, and for disclosure, I'm ubermarried to Orgasmatron and ghola, with a few pieces on the side.
And I'm kind of a whore, too.
Here's ghola, and my pie:
http://www2.ubersite.com/m/86759
Submitted by lickityspeed (user info) at 2006-04-23 01:50:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
ok, mr. scourge, i will. i was thinking of changing my name to sirlickityspeedymcspeedysamsneed. is that more lovable/less hatable? let me know.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-22 23:12:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Mr lickityspeed guy,sir,
Go read some of these: http://www.ubersite.com/u/scourge
Sincerely yours,
Yeah.
NOW I'm leaving.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-22 23:11:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm safe as sinning with Asian hookers on a saturday night.
I'm going to write my IGKTWFDreSWF!!!@YDKUI^Y, whatever the fuck that string of letters is, post tonight.
Gotta be good and drunk for that, maybe start a fight with my wifey first too, to get me good and bitter down deep in my bones. I have only had a shell of an idea, but it just took a fire...
The Robert Johnson disc is already in the drive and ready to go.
Going home dearest, sorry about that last rating...blah and Jameson and whatnot.
(insert something endearing here),
Matt
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-22 23:03:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
ssssssshhh...
(Yes, he knows.)
Be safe, Matty.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-22 23:02:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Hate is a strong word. I'm sorry.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-22 22:57:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I don't want to hurt his feelings, because you love him...but I hate his user name.
Do you tell him about all the losers you string along on this site? How you're the queen of a gaggle of Uber chumps from around the world? How you could stick out a boot, say 'lick' and a whole bunch of guys would stick out their tongues?
I'm right drunk. I need to get home and fear the only appropriate way is to walk...
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-22 22:53:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Yes, scourge- he's the guy. My best friend in the world, right there.
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-22 22:42:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/cgi-bin/message_get.cgi?user_id=26540
Do you know this person? Could this possibly be the person this post is about?
I need answers. And a stiff drink. ANOTHER stiff drink that is. Happy Saturday, kid. I'm spending it in a state of inebriation.
The sad part is that I'm not going to remember to come back here and check this later.
Where the hell did I put that bottle...
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-22 22:06:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by lickityspeed (user info) at 2006-04-22 07:40:00 (#)
Ranking: 2
Pretty freakin' amazing, girl. But i have to ask... Has it really been that long?
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Seems like yesterday sometimes, doesn't it? Twelve years, two weeks..but who's counting, right?
I love you. Here's to many more.
You change all the lead
sleepin' in my head to gold
as the day grows dim
I hear you sing a golden hymn
the song I've been trying to sing
Purify the colors, purify my mind,
Purify the colors, purify my mind,
and spread the ashes of the colors
in this heart of mine
Submitted by lickityspeed (user info) at 2006-04-22 07:40:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Pretty freakin' amazing, girl. But i have to ask... Has it really been that long?
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-20 15:19:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I resent the implication that I would send you an email with a user name like 'Hulk Hogan.'
What the hell? I'm home sick* today and this is the treatment I can expect? I blame Jake.
*read- preferred doing yard work in the sun to sitting behind the cherry stained desk all day.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-20 14:25:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
O- With a wish of yours as my inspiration, I'm capable of anything, I suppose.
I know that will be a challenge for me, and I promise I'll face it in the near future.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-04-20 12:04:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Though now I want to see how you write about something you haven't lived through.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-04-20 12:04:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This was the better entry, by far.
Consider this your coming out party, officially, Lishy.
Writing for deadlines and turning out quality stuff on demand? Imagine that.
The strongest parts of this were, easily, the following:
But change, we should welcome
And the growing is in the going
On, and so we packed our things.
Each made our own way
Together, in a way
With not a mile in between.
Though sometimes, it surely seems
Like you are a world away.
-
Last night we shared
Both smoke and bottle,
And spoke of new and troubled times.
In your eyes I saw the history
We've penned between us, sacredly,
I know we'll keep on writing
I for you, and you for me.
Submitted by Coleslaw_Murphy (user info) at 2006-04-18 19:31:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-18 13:21:28 (#)
Ranking: 0
Coleslaw- good eye, man. The song wasn't an inspiration to the poem, but it is a Camper van Beethoven song we both enjoy, and music has always been a bonding point for us. That lyric always stuck with me in regards to the relationship I wrote about.
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To me, at least, that was an obscure song. I enjoy those moments of random obscurity that seem to bind relationships. I figured that might be one.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-04-18 15:49:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-18 13:21:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Coleslaw- good eye, man. The song wasn't an inspiration to the poem, but it is a Camper van Beethoven song we both enjoy, and music has always been a bonding point for us. That lyric always stuck with me in regards to the relationship I wrote about.
Hey, wanna start a fire?
One that will never go out?
Burn a hole through the center of my mind
Let all the bad thoughts out
This is not a love affair
This is something more complex
Hey, wanna start a war?
I'm tired of this old one
And history is true
And it goes round in circles
Burn down the house, there's a devil in the closet
And everything I say is true
And I go round in circles
I'll burn down the house, there's a devil in the closet..
Submitted by Coleslaw_Murphy (user info) at 2006-04-18 13:04:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I thought I already rated this.
Originally, I thought the filename would've been a better title. But then I figured that was probably already a title of a song. I was on the right track, as I just looked it up. "Devil Song". Those lyrics must've been involved in the inspiration of this.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-18 11:45:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Aw, there you are. I missed you, babe.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-04-18 11:32:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
...For old times sakes.
Now where's your opponent so I can even it up.
Submitted by gank (user info) at 2006-04-18 11:18:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"You happened."
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-04-18 11:05:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this one better.
And NOW Circe will never read my posts again, so I hope you appreciate what this rating is going to get me here.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-04-18 08:16:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
http://www.ubersite.com/m/86759#1937760
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-17 21:13:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment Available
Submitted by mockidol (user info) at 2006-04-17 20:59:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-04-17 20:58:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-17 20:54:50 (#)
Ranking: 0
Thank you, Bubba.
I wasn't sure what you'd think of it, and I'm glad you approve.
Your work in this comp surprised and impressed me to no end. I hope you plan on flexing your poetry muscles around here from now on.
______________________________________________________________
I have a poetic weenie, but flexing it is out of the question.
"My nookie days are over, my pilot light is out,
What used to be my sex appeal is now my water spout."
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-17 20:54:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thank you, Bubba.
I wasn't sure what you'd think of it, and I'm glad you approve.
Your work in this comp surprised and impressed me to no end. I hope you plan on flexing your poetry muscles around here from now on.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-04-17 20:19:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hello, Schweet ha'at. Of all the review joints in all of the sites in all teh intarweb, you walk into mine.
You played it for Gasm and you can play it for me. If he can stand it, I can. Play it.
Play Chopsticks, by Frederick fucking Chopin. Do it, Huckleberry!
.....
So. You use a little free verse followed by some words that rhyme.
Very unique idea. And uneven stanza length. How quaint. Based on real
life. Bizarre.
An extremely well-done post.
Submitted by Deconstruction (user info) at 2006-04-17 18:52:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
POE WET IC
GET IT
NO?
ASPLOD.E
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-17 16:50:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
And I love you too, wifey.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-04-17 16:46:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-04-17 15:42:28 (#)
Ranking: 1
This was really good, but I liked the other better.
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i love you wifey.
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2006-04-17 15:58:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this a lot.
Life is somewhat disjointed...this is a real look into that.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-04-17 15:42:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
This was really good, but I liked the other better.
Submitted by MyTeeOne (user info) at 2006-04-17 15:18:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow...that's really all I have to say about that.
Submitted by MisterBadger (user info) at 2006-04-17 14:40:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Love this
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2006-04-17 13:35:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I really enjoyed this... and I dig the April thing.... April is the cruelest month, they say.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-17 13:29:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks, Leilani- it really was the best time ever.
Dave- glad you enjoyed it, I enjoyed writing it.
Submitted by ruthless (user info) at 2006-04-17 13:08:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Davros (user info) at 2006-04-17 12:51:41 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Really liked this but withheld a rating until Circe's entry was posted.
Not going to choose, equal ratings from me.
-Dave
Submitted by leilani (user info) at 2006-04-17 12:51:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
We soon would play for days-
"Let's dye our hair,
Then go get high, and get some air.
We'll see a rock'n'roll show,
Doesn't matter whose or where."
And with the crowd we'd jump and sing
In kinship with those unknown souls
And know we both believed
These were our holiest of things.
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especially like that, but the whole thing rocked
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-04-17 12:01:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I know you don't care. But I do. I really do.
1535: GOAL Sunderland 1-0 Newcastle
Sunderland may be doomed but the Stadium of Light is rocking as Justin Hoyte opens the scoring against their great rivals. The on-loan Arsenal player started the move and after good work by Jon Stead and Dean Whitehead is on hand to slam in a cut-back from the byline.
1623: GOAL Sunderland 1-1 Newcastle
Substitute Michael Chopra levels proceedings with his first touch, nipping in to tuck the ball home after Steven Caldwell opted to leave a ball for his goalkeeper Kelvin Davis.
1624: GOAL Sunderland 1-2 Newcastle
Justin Hoyte goes from hero to villain after fouling Charles N'Zogbia in the box. Alan Shearer steps up to score and, against the run of play, Newcastle have punctured hopes of a home win at the Stadium of Light.
1630: GOAL Sunderland 1-3 Newcastle
Any hopes of a first home win of the season at the Stadium of Light look to be well and truly over after Kieron Dyer plays in Charles N'Zogbia who wriggles through the Sunderland defence and fires low into the corner.
1651: GOAL Sunderland 1-4 Newcastle
Another masterclass in how not to defend from Sunderland gifts Albert Luque his first goal in a Newcastle shirt.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-04-17 10:12:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Pearl necklaces all round!
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-17 10:01:32 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-04-17 09:31:13 (#)
Ranking: 2
twelveth anniversy is silk/lenin/pearls
right?
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Hmm, not sure. I've never had a real one. But a Lenin anniversary followed by linen sheets, silk slip, and pearl necklace sounds like an extraordinarily good time to me.
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-04-17 09:36:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I really like the idea of a Lenin anniversary. Instead of a nominal present you simply identify a number of people who have wronged you, then you send them to the gulags. Or at the very least, down the shops to buy the milk.
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-04-17 09:31:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
linen
sorry.
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-04-17 09:31:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
twelveth anniversy is silk/lenin/pearls
right?
Submitted by simple_catalyst (user info) at 2006-04-17 09:30:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Come on you raver, you seer of visions, come on you painter, you piper,
you prisoner, and shine!
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-04-17 08:19:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Marvellous work Licious.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-04-17 08:06:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Life doesn't always rhyme, or fit into neat little stanzas. Only sometimes. Or maybe this is an act of rebellion.
There are a few musical references relevant to the relationship here. Not sure if anyone will notice, but as disclosure, I'll mention it.
This is the story of the best thing that ever happened to me.