15 Minute Challange - Impeccable Timing (645 hits)
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Submitted by ampersand (View user info) at 2006-04-19 15:07:08 EDT
So what's it gonna be? The easy way, or the hard way? The one standing 11.1 degrees left of center very slightly twitched his left extensor carpi radialis brevis. The hard way. Always the hard way. Travis dipped his left shoulder and leaned backwards into a precisely controlled fall, each hand going to the pistol at its respective hit. His mind ran through thousands of calculations at once, and adjusted accordingly. Muscles, ligaments and tendons flexed and slackened. Tiny gears and servos whirred, silently driving steel alloy cables that moved at speeds no strictly protein based musculature could match.
If he had properly accounted for all variables, he had a 99.8793456% chance of killing each of the soldiers in a span of no more then one second. Usually it would be a much easier affair but the wind atop the skyscraper was more then he was used to dealing with.
As Travis's conscious mind contemplated the irritation of high speed fluid flows, microprocessors implanted in his brain converted electrical impulses from his eyes into useful data. He had a 93.73456% of making it throw the encounter unscathed. The soldier 23.7 degrees to his right was moving unusually fast for an organic and might be able to get a shot off on time. Travis altered his dive accordingly. If he did get hit, it would be in the right tibia where damage would be minimal.
His trigger fingers were doing their best impression of a hummingbird's wings. He would fire faster but, at his current rate of fire, his weapons already had a .42456% chance of jamming. They were good guns, and he liked having them at his side, but Travis did not want to overtax them unnecessarily. Breaking them would reduce his odds of survival by nearly 7%.
Blood was already painting splatters all over rooftop. It geysered out of the first man's chest (judging from the bullet hole, he hit the coronary artery); he tried to scream but managed only to wheeze grotesquely, all the air in his lungs having already escaped out the two jagged holes Travis left there. The third bullet was aimed between the mans eye but found the flesh of the left eyeball instead. It as an alarmingly poorly aimed shot. Perhaps he should go in for a tune up after?
Only the two center most soldiers were still standing and already .45 caliber death was screaming towards. Fragments of bone and grey matter erupted like volcano's from the right man's skull. The man on the left took three across the chest, puncturing both lungs and the right ventricle.
Still falling backwards, Travis took stock of his situation. Seven out of seven targets accounted for. Twenty two bullets fired at targets, twenty two hits. Two bullets fired at Travis, zero hits. One was fired in the mans death throes and flew off into the air nowhere near Travis. According to where it left its hole in the roof, the other bullet passed 6.3221 centimeters above his right leg. Closer then he had anticipated.
Finally, he hit the ground.
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Submitted by LisaD (user info) at 2007-05-18 13:43:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
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Submitted by coley (user info) at 2007-03-11 01:14:05 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by darko (user info) at 2006-06-13 01:00:26 EDT (#)
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Submitted by georgemichael (user info) at 2006-04-26 21:39:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
take this -2 alter
Submitted by ampersand (user info) at 2006-04-20 13:00:52 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-04-20 08:27:12 (#)
Ranking: 2
I like this. Ripped royally off of TTOM though.
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How is it at all a rip off of anything? It was vaguely inspired by the Matrix but I don't think it qualifies as a rip.
Submitted by corn_nugget (user info) at 2006-04-20 09:51:33 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Uber doesn't like numbers, it's a fact. Expecially repeating numbers or obscure numbers.
Don't ask me.
Great creativity here, sir. Or ma'am.
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-04-20 08:27:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I like this. Ripped royally off of TTOM though.
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2006-04-20 08:01:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-04-20 07:06:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Awesome story for 15 minutes. A little too much with the calculations to the 6th decimal place or whatever (i kinda thought that was a little over the top), but otherwise, he shoots, he scores.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-04-20 05:56:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Precise.
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2006-04-19 22:09:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Monarch (user info) at 2006-04-19 18:49:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Pretty damn creative 15 minutes.
+2 sir! +2 sir!
*golfclap*
Submitted by Coleslaw_Murphy (user info) at 2006-04-19 18:19:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I would give you a 1.986642, but that would take more than 15 minutes of reviews.
Submitted by BranDo (user info) at 2006-04-19 17:44:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
WOW
Submitted by Average_Dan (user info) at 2006-04-19 16:56:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by Hookhand (user info) at 2006-04-19 16:41:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Entertaining as hell.
Submitted by erosion_rules (user info) at 2006-04-19 16:06:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
It's awesome. That is all.
Submitted by Yes (user info) at 2006-04-19 15:39:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
that was pretty fucking cool... a couple misusages (damn spell checks do that all the time) but not enough to ruin it. I hate to think what a day in the life on Travis would look like written like this.
Submitted by Chroniclysm (user info) at 2006-04-19 15:34:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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