Who Knew? (444 hits)
Category: Quotes & Stories -> PoetryLabels: Poetry
Rating: 0 on 16 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Hourman (View user info) at 2006-05-18 10:37:42 EDT
I sit and think a tale of woe,
A tale of love and death
An old man now from long ago,
Whose life was bad at best.
Who knew?
Who knew?
First he seemed void of malice
Kind heart and honest virtue,
He was never crude or callous,
With a heart so pure and true
Who knew?
Who knew?
He married young and free,
His wife then just a lass,
Her hand took in matrimony,
But young love cannot last
Who knew?
Who knew?
The honeymoon was gone
Soon a child was coming,
His mind started to be torn
He could slowly hear the humming,
Who knew?
Who knew?
The voices grew too loud,
It was drink that made it so,
His wife had done him proud
But he was full of woe
Who knew?
Who knew?
The straw was finally snapped,
Drink had put him in the bin,
What crime had he committed?
God's unspoken sin.
Who knew?
Who knew?
The wife had left the man,
Their child was in the earth
The child had met the sand
Fate destined from his birth
Who knew?
Who knew?
Now the mans alone,
His fingers turning cold
All along the bone
The young man is now old
Who knew?
Who knew?
I take my leave with a bow
The stories almost done,
I am an Angle now,
I feel as if I won.
Who knew?
Who knew?
User Reviews
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2006-07-06 07:17:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2006-07-05 09:54:26 (#)
Ranking: 2
I am going to rate every one of your posts with a +2 without reading them.
Submitted by georgemichael (user info) at 2006-05-26 07:27:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
how many fucking who knews? do you need?
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-05-19 06:28:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by _SuSpEcT_ (user info) at 2006-05-18 12:31:00 (#)
Ranking: -2
my 3 year old nephew could have written better poetry then this, SERIOUSLY. douchebag
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Hey let me have a look at ur stuff.....oh wait u only posted one thing.....and it was shit.....really shit....maybe you should give ur nephew a call first, i think you need him more...prick
Submitted by fuzzy_buzz (user info) at 2006-05-19 04:30:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Hour_man
I am in love with you right now. xx
Submitted by TheSpook (user info) at 2006-05-18 13:31:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by leilani (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:56:14 (#)
Ranking: 1
not bad
Submitted by _SuSpEcT_ (user info) at 2006-05-18 12:31:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
my 3 year old nephew could have written better poetry then this, SERIOUSLY. douchebag
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2006-05-18 11:42:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Quite liked it except for the 'who knew' bit... that was proper shite.
Submitted by gonefiguring (user info) at 2006-05-18 11:07:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
hahahaha yeah my bad. Dunno if that one mistake was worth -1 though. lol.
And i would be a right angle.
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But I do know. And that last earns another.
Listen; ratings only have the credibility you give them. If you liked this poem with all the spelling and grammar errors it embodies, then it's good. Who cares what a bunch of fictional characters think?
Submitted by Dervel (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:59:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
No Comment
Submitted by leilani (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:56:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
not bad
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:51:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by gonefiguring (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:48:46 (#)
Ranking: -1
You're "an Angle now" indeed.
Obtuse
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hahahaha yeah my bad. Dunno if that one mistake was worth -1 though. lol.
And i would be a right angle.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:51:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I knew that this stunk.
Submitted by gonefiguring (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:48:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
You're "an Angle now" indeed.
Obtuse
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:40:06 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Well thats somewhat less painful than how u usually rate me
Submitted by shadow (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:39:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
the "who knew?" bit was both repetitive and repetitive
otherwise pretty good though
Submitted by professorfuckface (user info) at 2006-05-18 10:39:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
your mom