D-Prime Madness: Unfamailiar Ceiling (556 hits)
Category: NoneRating: -1.37 on 10 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by DirtyDoubleEntendre (View user info) at 2006-06-20 16:44:24 EDT
Noise.
People talking, moving.
Television sets on.
Cars.
Drills.
Street vendors.
Music.
Children.
Planes buzzing.
Too many planes.
Unknown planes.
Growing louder, coming closer.
Foreign objects whisteling in the air.
Noise.
An explosion.
Silence.
Cars stopped running.
People standing still.
Nothing at all.
A baby cries.
One long cry.
Other children join in.
Parents join.
Anyone alive joins.
An entire nation wailing.
Crying, weeping.
Dying, dead.
Mourning.
Beneath this unfamiliar ceiling of dust and smoke.
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Submitted by joedaddy (user info) at 2006-06-21 00:58:15 EDT (#)
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Submitted by DirtyDoubleEntendre (user info) at 2006-06-20 22:00:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Yes
Submitted by guiness (user info) at 2006-06-20 21:31:28 EDT (#)
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Heh, does that mean I win round one?
http://www.ubersite.com/m/89330
Submitted by Ingsoc (user info) at 2006-06-20 17:57:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
I think I'm coming down with FAS.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-06-20 17:23:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
marvellous
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-06-20 17:10:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
And when I was talking about the title, I meant this one:
Unfamailiar Ceiling
which was so clearly displayed on the top of your post.
Submitted by ampersand (user info) at 2006-06-20 17:06:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Black holes aspire to be more like you.
Submitted by BobLobla (user info) at 2006-06-20 17:05:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
It is almost like you added the line to the end to make it an entry into this competition...
Plus, I didnt really like it anyways. -1 for each of the afformentioned reasons.
In other news..
D-PRIME MADNESS ROUND 1 --> http://www.ubersite.com/m/89428
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-06-20 17:05:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
NPTCDSMC
PTUG?
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CPN
AOOPAACDMB!
oh, good job on forgetting to incorporate the title into your submission - that's an auto -2 right there.
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2006-06-20 16:45:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
STUPENDOUS