Visitors of War (Part 1) (440 hits)
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Submitted by The Known Unknown (View user info) at 2006-06-24 14:16:39 EDT
"War may sometimes be a necessary evil. But no matter how necessary, it is always an evil, never a good. We will not learn how to live together in peace by killing each other's children." - Jimmy Carter
Dan walks out the base entrance with a sigh of relief. He looks up at the sky, as the Nevada sun bares down on him, sweat drips from the top of his fore head. He is glad to finally get a weekend leave; he has been on active duty for over 14 months now. This doesn't bother Dan to much; he loves the secrecy of his job. Dan has been working on the top secret US project known has AreoFlux. This project is beyond top secret, not even congress knows about it. Only 1% of the people working for the pentagon actually know it exists. This is project is based on making fighter plans able to enter inter and outer space, like how the NASA shuttles work. Progress has been amazing; Dan has flown over 200 hours of space flight in his AreoFlux plane. In the very near future Dan's work with this project will be very necessary for the survival of human kind as we know it.
Even though Dan is excited about his weekend leave, he is disappointed; his squadron wasn't allowed to go on leave with him. Dan is part of the Blazing Comets squadron, also known as BC for short. He and his comrades have become very close over the past 14 months, so it is odd for him to be going out on his own without them. Dan refuses to let this get him down, he is going to have a good time for all of them, the first drink he has will be for his Blazing Comets! Dan is allowed to use a military jeep to get around during his leave; he knows they only allowed him to do this so they could track him. This doesn't bother Dan to much, he knows that he is going to be watched all 72 hours he is gone, why doesn't the government trust him he wonders.
Dan enters the city limits of Vegas, the city of sins he thinks to himself, I hope I don't get into any trouble out here; he smirks to himself in the review mirror. Dan still can't help think about his squadron friends, he wishes he could be spending time with them. He can't escape the thought from his mind of why they aren't allowed to go on leave with him, it was originally planned they would all be able to go at the same time, but at the last minute this was rebuked. As Dan mind drifts with countless possibilities for this, he notices a bar; he figures this is as good of a place as any to start his leave. Dan not being a very fussy person pulls into the parking lot. As Dan leaves the jeep he looks up at the half working neon sign and reads "The Bloody Mary", he laughs to himself and walks into the front door.
After being in the blinding Nevada sun all day, Dan can barely see anything as he enters the bar, his eyes slowly focus, and he notices it is rather empty. He walks over to the bar and sees a rather old but still good looking bartender walk up to him. She looks into Dan's eyes....
"What can I get you sir?" She says
"Hmmm, why don't you make me something special?" Dan states
"I'll see what I can do." She says
As she walks off to start making a drink Dan notices a TV in the corner with CNN on, he walks over to try to catch up on what's been going on lately, they don't allow Dan much down time at the base. Dan notices an odd static noise in the audio, it isn't to annoying but still gets on his nerves a tad, and he tries to change the station but notices that same noise on every channel, he figures it is just the TV itself. At that moment the bartender calls over to him.
"Hey sweetie, your drink is ready." She proclaims
Dan walks over to the bar and looks at the drink.
"What is this?" He says looking confused.
"This is a special drink I made just for you, try it out" She says
Even though Dan isn't to fussy about things, he hesitates before taking a sip, after trying some he realizes this isn't that bad.
"This is good, what do I owe you" He says...
"You owe me....."
She is interrupted by the Emergency Broadcast System on the TV.
Dan all of a sudden hears the cities air raid sirens go off, he looks around confused a bit, the EBS is announcing all people are to remain in doors and get into a basement or cellar immediately. Seconds later someone comes crashing through the door.
"MPs! MPs!" The man announces
"We are looking for Cpt. Dan Owens" The man proclaims loudly
"I'm right here, what the hell is going on!" Dan Yells
"Your leave is over sir, we have a major problem, and your squadron has been activated!" The MP states...
Activated Dan wonders, that's impossible we are still in testing, what they hell is going on, as Dan walks out side and is amazed, he sees F-16s soaring over the city heading towards the desert. Dan can't imagine what is going on, he notices anti aircraft mobiles moving into position. The air raid siren is starting to make him go nuts. Helicopter lands rights on the Vegas strip as APVs move vehicles out of the way... Get in the chopper sir a voice calls from it. Dan walks over in shock what is going he states, sir you're not going to believe this.
(To Be Continued)
User Reviews
Submitted by awesome_face (user info) at 2006-06-26 17:25:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Interesting but bland at the same time.
Submitted by GDR (user info) at 2006-06-26 15:07:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by indoninja (user info) at 2006-06-26 14:48:50 (#)
Ranking: -2
He has been on active duty for 14 months and is already a captain and in a top secret space fighter squadron?
Excellent work!!!
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Get the idea fool, hes be on active duty for 14 months straight, sorry if you can't catch the noticeable, and all pilots start as lts when joining the air force.
Submitted by indoninja (user info) at 2006-06-26 14:48:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
He has been on active duty for 14 months and is already a captain and in a top secret space fighter squadron?
Excellent work!!!
Submitted by Skatch (user info) at 2006-06-26 13:25:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Not bad, but the whole "Only 1% of the people working for the pentagon actually know it exists." line leaves a bad taste in my mouth. Plus, the Blazing Comets? I haven't hung out with the Special Forces types in awhile, but is this something hardcore, bad muthafuckas would call themselves? Or given the guy a cell phone rather than have a shitload of MPs bust in somewhere on the vegas strip? Maybe this is all explained in part 2, but the fact that you kept me reading prompts me to +1 you
Submitted by GDR (user info) at 2006-06-26 12:40:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Part too will be posted today I hope :)
Submitted by Molari (user info) at 2006-06-26 12:01:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This is awesome plz keep it going!
Submitted by GDR (user info) at 2006-06-25 18:11:39 EDT (#)
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Ya, I must of debated for awhile on posting that comment with the story, was just a dumb idea, wish you could edit your posts lmao.
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2006-06-25 14:48:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Good work.
I agree with Bubba, and have one other statement to make.
Don't quote Jimmy Carter. Seriously, that's not an intentionally douchey comment- Jimmy Carter won't help your story, because you don't go to Carter for war quotes, normally.
Submitted by alwayspeach1 (user info) at 2006-06-24 15:48:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by GDR (user info) at 2006-06-24 14:59:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Thanks, I'm no where near a good writer, but I'll remember those tips, thanks.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-06-24 14:32:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Looks like the start of something interesting.
Read this word----> PROOFREAD
Also, since you made the same error at least four times:
The word meaning 'also' or 'excessive' is spelled "too," not "to."