Red Beans (468 hits)
Category: NoneRating: 0.1 on 11 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Sock. (View user info) at 2006-07-05 17:54:36 EDT
I look around the café, and I don't like it. It's too noisy and the line is too long. The wood is fake, and the home false. The coffee isn't even that great. But that's not why I'm here.
I tap my foot on the ground because I can't stop myself from doing it. I have to go to the bathroom, but I don't want to miss it. I wouldn't miss it, but I don't want to miss it.
The caffeine feels good in my bloodstream. It gives me energy I don't have, and jumpy like a little kid. Also gets my mind off...
I never did lead a carefree life, even when I was a kid. It almost was the destruction of me a few times, until I found it, that website. Completely flipped my life upside down, like tripping on acid and remembering that the outside world exists.
He should be here soon. He should've been here soon. But he's late. I glance at the door, and a kid comes in. Young kid.
...Maybe he forgot. Maybe he didn't see me.
I look around, and see if I might have missed him. When I turn back, I see the kid sitting at my table. With the kind of white blonde hair that you only see on kids. The clean scraggly hair, and the bright blue eyes. The innocence that nobody else could possibly have.
He giggles and smiles, and looks down, the way only young kids can get away with. His hair shines in the morning light, and reminds me of when I was young. His overalls are blue, and look new.
"It's time," he says in between laughs.
User Reviews
Submitted by Life101 (user info) at 2006-08-15 03:29:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Im a nice guy and your new and so am I. Plus for some reason i smiled at this here is a good rating people on uber i think are over critical but thats this place.
Submitted by stok (user info) at 2006-08-15 03:07:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
fuck off
Submitted by ubetidid (user info) at 2006-07-06 11:37:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
i kind of got a creepy feeling.
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2006-07-06 08:02:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
If this is part one then you are OK ish. But it still needed a stronger end to indicate that something else was going to happen.
If this is a stand alone story them OMG WHAT TEH FUCKS?
Submitted by Sockster (user info) at 2006-07-06 03:24:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Well well...
Yeah, I'm finding my place in writing. I can assure better works in the near future. (LIES!!)
Submitted by pirate_pipi (user info) at 2006-07-06 02:56:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
The kind of thing I like in the mornings - but it should have been a little longer.
Submitted by extacy_red (user info) at 2006-07-06 02:44:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
what skrapmetal said.
Submitted by Maddog (user info) at 2006-07-05 18:28:20 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
And the little kid grew up to be.............Vanilla Ice!!!!!!
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-07-05 18:07:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Is it...
HAMMER TIME?????
Submitted by skrapmetal (user info) at 2006-07-05 18:01:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
Should've been longer, and had a point.
Submitted by Teephphah (user info) at 2006-07-05 18:00:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I think I liked this a lot.
But I might hate it.
Too early to tell.
Which is kind of weird.