Requiem For The Empire (606 hits)
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Submitted by kaos-king (antius777) (View user info) at 2006-07-09 15:28:38 EDT
This was part of a contest elsewhere, where titles were provided and it had a 500 word limit...
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"Who... who are you?" asked the President of The United States thickly, his mouth draining blood onto the carpet of the Oval Office.
The man clad in black before him smiled gently. "Oh, we have so many names."
Most of the White House lie in ruin, they had struck so suddenly. Fires raged throughout the capitol, bodies lining the streets in piles. An explosion shook the room they were in, and the President moved his head weakly to look out and see centuries old monuments crumbling.
"We have existed in the shadows since the first primitive men built their temples," said the black suited man, drawing the President's attention back. "We have slowly arranged every movement in world affairs since humanity struck out and thought itself kings of this planet. We have no desire to rule, only to ensure things run smoothly and true."
"But..." tried the President.
"We are The Eyes Of The Ashes, The Everlasting Sigh," the stranger said cryptically, "We are The Moment In Gray, and The Factor Infinity."
"I don't... I don't understand," wept the President as he watched two of teeth fall from his mouth. "Why are you..."
"You did your best, you and your kind. And the human endeavor is a remarkable thing. But you failed. Now it is our turn. And we will make this a better world. Whether you accept it or not, is now irrelevant," the other stated.
The President tried to speak, but his jaw had fallen away.
"I have used parts of my mind that are secreted to your kind to enhanced certain amino acids and turn off other key elements in your body. You are decomposing alive. That end seems fitting to us. Do not take this act personally, we are performing it on most world leaders."
A puddle of remains bubbled once, then moved no more.
The stranger in the black suit stared at the mess for a moment, then ran a hand across his pale shaved head. He considered his next move, as he walked around to the desk and wearily sat down in the chair behind it. He had not even been there a few moments when the door opened.
"My Lord, the capital is secure. All the major metropolitan cities on the east coast have been obliterated and the telepaths say all things are moving excellently in Europe," reported a strikingly tall man in a suit almost as dark as his skin.
"Prepare the Armada to move towards the California coast. Have our Warlords in the Pacific be ready to annihilate Asia," the man behind the desk said simply.
"Is everything alright, My Lord?"
"I'm fine, old friend. This is not what I ever wanted," he replied staring out at the devastation.
"I understand, Sire... I do," said the black man in sympathetic tones.
As the subordinate left the room, he turned back at the last minute to look at his superior.
"Hail Atlantis, my Lord."
"Hail Atlantis," returned the man behind the desk at the White House.
User Reviews
Submitted by HHH (user info) at 2006-07-13 23:44:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA THIS IS LIKE PAID IN FULL'S RETARDED COUSIN! I LOVE IT! "the black man" "lie in ruin"
wtf is this shit?!
Submitted by The_Cyst_Master (user info) at 2006-07-13 23:24:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 because my face hurts.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-07-10 20:13:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Webered (user info) at 2006-07-10 16:23:54 (#)
Ranking: 0
Not enough to it.
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Didn't read the first sentence, did you?
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-07-10 17:12:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
e.e. cummings
Submitted by Webered (user info) at 2006-07-10 16:23:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Not enough to it.
Submitted by DCWoody (user info) at 2006-07-10 10:26:52 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
I didn't think it was that good.
Too...crappy. I'm not good at constructive critiscism. or spelling. leave me alone.
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-07-10 04:21:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Worst author ever.......nahhhhhh..... good.
Submitted by fun_with_needles (user info) at 2006-07-09 23:43:17 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice! I thought it had a little "Dark Tower" feel to it.
Submitted by thecaes (user info) at 2006-07-09 21:44:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
"We are The Eyes Of The Ashes, The Everlasting Sigh," the stranger said cryptically, "We are The Moment In Gray, and The Factor Infinity."
Ooooh, I liked that.
This was a really good (though short) little introduction. I LOVE the fact that it involves Atlantis...that's a civilzation that's wiiiide open to interpretation.
Submitted by Sockster (user info) at 2006-07-09 21:07:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
How'd you do in the contest?
Submitted by mockidol (user info) at 2006-07-09 20:23:36 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
504 words, lol
Submitted by Yams (user info) at 2006-07-09 19:10:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Now I can't use the title :(
Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2006-07-09 18:19:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by CrazyHorse (user info) at 2006-07-09 18:02:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fucking-A
Submitted by guiness (user info) at 2006-07-09 17:54:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Very nice
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-07-09 17:53:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Well done.
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2006-07-09 17:45:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
http://thewillpower.org/
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-07-09 17:36:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
mmm...apocalyptic..
Submitted by KindaNews (user info) at 2006-07-09 16:11:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good story.