Vietnam (Story) (454 hits)
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Rating: -0.61 on 19 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Hourman (View user info) at 2006-07-19 08:35:21 EDT
"It's Vietnam baby! Man time to kill some mother-fucking gooks!"
"Not if I get they're first Bullet!"
"I'm pumped and ready to fuck 'em scummy slit eyed assholes!"
Fresh faced exuberance shining from us all. We are soldiers, born to fight for our country and the freedom of man. We are the superheroes of now, of today, and of the future.
"YOU ARE NOTHING SPECIAL MAGGOTS!"
"Sir yes sir!"
"What? I can't hear you scum!"
"SIR YES SIR!"
The adrenaline surges through me, meandering it's way around my body until even my toes are humming at the thought of killing some of them damn fuckers. I am part of a team; I am fighting for the good of the world.
"This river's awful quite sir."
"Keep your voice down Johansen. Eyes focused people. Bullet, take point."
"No gooks gonna sneak up on me that's for damn sure. You got that Johansen?"
"I said keep the chatter to a minimum people-"
The bullet clipped my ear, but it took the sergeants' head clean off. Time stood still, my face dripping with blood. Red mist clouding my vision as bodies fell, lives ended and we escaped. I am soldier...I am born to kill.
One year later
"Bullet?"
"Yeah?"
"What happened here?"
"Napalm and Agent Orange. Burnt them to a crisp and cleaned the place right outta gooks"
"Where are the bodies then?"
Another hale of gunfire, another loss off life and another mother suffers. I am a soldier; it's my duty to survive.
One year later
My days are long and the nights are mine to do as I see fit. I hug my mother and kiss my wife, with the children playing in the fields out back. The field with the big oak, where Danny broke his arm, playing pirates, and where I kissed Sarah for the first time. I am a Father, Husband and Son; it's my responsibility to return.
"Bullet? Bullet you there?"
"No, I went for a snack, course I'm here. What Johansen?"
"Are we ever gonna get out."
"I reckon it should be any day now Johansen... any day now."
I am an American citizen. I am one of millions who fought for their country and they will not have not have forgotten me.
2 years later
"Sarah...Sarah... Sarah...Sarah... Sarah...Sarah..."
"You're one crazy son-of-a-bitch"
"Where's Johansen?"
"Gooks killed him, he asked for water one to many times."
I will not forget my brothers in arms. They will not forget me. My country will want me returned. I am a human being, I feel too much hurt.
Five years later
Sarah.
One year later.
The smell of air, the smell of freedom. So much has happened since I first joined. The plane smells of freedom as they fly me home. The people around me covered from head to toe in pain, suffering and history, can't help but smile. Me neither. I was an American soldier, now I am an American hero.
"Booooooo! Unjust war! You people are murderers!"
I fought for your freedom. You fought for my imprisonment. I am a victim of war. I am a victim of a bi-polar society. I'm an American soldier fighting one war to late. I am a victim of the Governments disassociation with what the people want. I am the free worlds ultimate Ultimatum. Power or Peace?
User Reviews
Submitted by Maddog (user info) at 2006-07-22 13:58:23 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I hear ya brother. But my 'Nam experience was a bit different. http://www.ubersite.com/m/78475
Submitted by dr_weazel (user info) at 2006-07-19 19:54:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
"This river's awful quite sir."
QUIET
I dont give a fuck if it IS a shitty fucking Fisher-Price computer... uhh... I mean "Mac"... your spelling is fucking shit.
Submitted by nya_nyo (user info) at 2006-07-19 11:31:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
needs more gook killing
Submitted by BobLobla (user info) at 2006-07-19 10:20:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Here is your break.
NOW USE A PC IF YOU CAN'T HANDLE THE MAC!!??!??!!!oneone11!!>>??!?!
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-07-19 10:05:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
OI! Macs have ALL got global spell checks built in. That was a grammatical error. And Word or whatever would have picked that up.
Submitted by BobLobla (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:54:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:47:01 (#)
Ranking: 0
Well two things,
1. I don't think that the ability to rate posts is directly correlated to the number of reviews I've had here, so I return the same.
2. yes you did, but if you notice, I reviewed prior to this, so cool it.
I have no desire to be added to any lists, as I really am not a bitchy person, but this was crap, and yes you've said so yourself. I've been on this site quite a while, but only recently registered once I had something to say, and subsequently, post.
I'll accept my little piece was over descriptive, but it really was posted too early, and unpolished.
And I think you don't have a leg to stand on calling me unoriginal???
Peace.
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Great response.
Minute_boy, you got TOLDish
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:54:24 EDT (#)
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Submitted by BobLobla (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:52:51 (#)
Ranking: -2
"Not if I get they're first Bullet!"
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WTF???
They're --> They're going over there.
There --> I am going over there.
Their --> They're going over there to see their new puppy.
FUCK
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Cut me some slack. First proper Spelling mistake in a while. I am using a Mac atm and for some reason it's affecting my spelling.
Submitted by BobLobla (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:52:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
"Not if I get they're first Bullet!"
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WTF???
They're --> They're going over there.
There --> I am going over there.
Their --> They're going over there to see their new puppy.
FUCK
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:50:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
I'm going back to work. Please don't become one of the 'Yeah? Well I've been here longer....I just never registered' people. They're shit. I can't be arsed to argue.
I'm out people have a nice day.
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:47:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Well two things,
1. I don't think that the ability to rate posts is directly correlated to the number of reviews I've had here, so I return the same.
2. yes you did, but if you notice, I reviewed prior to this, so cool it.
I have no desire to be added to any lists, as I really am not a bitchy person, but this was crap, and yes you've said so yourself. I've been on this site quite a while, but only recently registered once I had something to say, and subsequently, post.
I'll accept my little piece was over descriptive, but it really was posted too early, and unpolished.
And I think you don't have a leg to stand on calling me unoriginal???
Peace.
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:36:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Orph, 2 things.
1. You have had 1 review here, so fuck off.
2. I held my hands up and said that this was crap.
If you really feel the need to add yourself to the list of people to be considered little bitchs then go ahead. When you have more than one review, been here more than a day, then feel free to come and slap me around as for now just leave your pre-pubesent film 'knowledge' at the door.
Yes your story was that boring, mainly because it was over descriptive.
I have no quam with you making fun of/ at my work. Only that you use something original. E.g. Don't go 'Hmmm, army + Vietnam + quotes I heard in a film.....= Full Metal Jacket!! Holy shit I gotta tell everyone!' It's not clever.
Although this may have seemed like it was to do with FMJ I was trying to convey the transition from all out American Superhero to the hated generation of Vietnam Soldiers. I stand by the fact that this was in no way was intended to have a direct corralation with FMJ.
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:31:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Funny actually, as I usually like your posts.
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2006-07-19 09:24:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Well that deserves another. Can you say cliche? I know you probaly can't spell it...
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-07-19 08:55:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Well obviously you haven't dick head, becuase the only line in this from FMJ is Born to kill. Hey look you're writing, yeah I've seen Good Will Hunting. Cock.
Submitted by hour_man (user info) at 2006-07-19 08:54:45 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Bollocks. I apoligise for this piece of shit. It's bollocks
Submitted by orph (user info) at 2006-07-19 08:49:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Yeah, I've seen FMJ too.
Submitted by moneyshotforyou (user info) at 2006-07-19 08:47:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
+1 for "you're" effort.
Submitted by professorfuckface (user info) at 2006-07-19 08:42:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
"Not if I get they're first Bullet!"
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That could have worked if you fucked up and said "their", but no, you had to fuck up the wrong way
Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2006-07-19 08:37:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
This was incredibly clichéd and as such, I couldn't enjoy it at all