A.D.D. -- 41 Seconds (554 hits)
Category: GeneralRating: 1.75 on 13 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by The Foodman (View user info) at 2006-07-28 16:15:05 EDT
My wife and I squeezed into the crowded room. There were several people, reporters I guess, with notepads in their hands. They all leaned forward, eager to see it happen. We found our seats in the front row, and sat down quietly. This was the night we had been waiting for for 15 years. My heart beat heavily in my chest. A light coating of sweat glistened in my palms. I put my arm around Amanda. She leaned into me and stared straight ahead at the window in front of us. She didn't say a word and neither did I.
A few moments later, the door behind us closed and the lights dimmed. In front of us, a movie played itself out behind a soundproof, two-way mirror. A man who looked like a doctor fiddled with some needles and tubes. He gave a signal, and the door behind him opened.
When Amanda saw him, she buried her face in my shoulder and sobbed. I tried to burn a hole in him with my eyes. He knew I was watching. Jacob Grimes was the reason my little girl was rotting in a box. He was the reason I spent the last 15 years hearing her voice screaming at me to help her. He was the reason my wife tried to kill herself. He was the reason we were sitting in that chair hoping against all else for some closure.
The guards strapped him down to the table. He declined any last words. His head turned toward us and the bastard smiled. He was unconscious a few seconds after that. The doctor pushed the third syringe. 41 seconds later, that monster was dead.
A single tear rolled down my cheek. I felt no different. I gave Amanda a kiss on her head.
"Is it over?" she asked, still refusing to look.
"No." I replied. "Let's go home."
User Reviews
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-07-29 20:48:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The tear rolling down the cheek added immensely to everything.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-07-29 11:18:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Wow.
Submitted by Yams (user info) at 2006-07-29 00:36:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I was thinking of using this title, posting:
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ASPLODE!"
But you did it much better.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-07-29 00:35:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2006-07-28 17:58:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Of all the titles....
Submitted by gonefiguring (user info) at 2006-07-28 17:25:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I like this ADD thing.
Submitted by boomslang (user info) at 2006-07-28 17:07:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
nicely played ol' chap
Submitted by scourge (user info) at 2006-07-28 16:37:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fantastic.
I agree with Filthy, that line was unnecessary, but this was still good.
Submitted by congo (user info) at 2006-07-28 16:32:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
He liked to be called "Grimey."
Submitted by The_Yellow_Dart (user info) at 2006-07-28 16:31:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Magnets.
Submitted by BobLobla (user info) at 2006-07-28 16:22:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fucking awesome, maybe the best one yet.
DEFINATELY better than mine...
Submitted by foodman (user info) at 2006-07-28 16:21:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Too much cheese?
Submitted by FilthyAssistant (user info) at 2006-07-28 16:20:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
"A single tear rolled down my cheek."
It would have been better without that line, I think.