St. Eubrie: The End Of Mahogany Street - part 2 (518 hits)
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Submitted by kaos-king (antius777) (View user info) at 2006-08-08 08:27:56 EDT
Link to Jack's Intro... http://www.ubersite.com/m/91421
Part 1 of "The End Of Mahogany Street"... http://www.ubersite.com/m/91459
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Those who live in St. Eubrie would try and tell you that their small town is no different than any other you would find scattered across America. They would be wrong. There is something quiet, something subtle living in the shadows in this place, something protected by the Patron Saint of Secrets. Here, apathy and fear are visceral elements of life - look the other way or someone may discover what it is YOU are hiding. And lie awake at night, sure in knowledge that St. Eubrie knows... knows you are, indeed, hiding something.
It is Wednesday evening and there are two more days left.
David Archer and Helen Hammon have met at a small road side motel at the edge of town. They have done this a few times in the past year, when their passions have called for an hour later in the day. Their families rarely question their absence, for to do so might bring speculation down on their own activities. The two have engaged in adultery for the past hour, Helen thinking what a wonderful lover Mr. Archer is, David thinking about the suitcases in the trunk of his car. As they lie there in bed, sweaty and naked, they pass the time in small talk until it is time to perform again. However, David makes a slip of the tongue, and speaks of his family in the past tense. When Helen questions him on this, he fumbles an answer. She realizes that the only thing that makes her feel alive is leaving her.
Doug Archer is helping his mother stock a number of new deliveries in the floral shop. While the store mostly carries different types of flowers, Heather has decided to branch out into various other plants. The place has never really made a profit, only doing good business around the time of school dances and holidays. Doug knows his mothers keeps the store really as just a place to get away from their father. They haven't really got along in years. This, and because of the basement. The basement is from where Doug's mother calls to him. He goes down the steps and looks around, impressed as always at her set up. Tall, lush marijuana plants grown in rows, water and light systems all run off a lap top computer in the corner. Heather hands her son a joint and they light up together.
Ruth checks the lock on Becca's bedroom door again as her girlfriend laughs at her. Becca tries to reassure her neighbor that not only is no one home, no one would come barging in anyhow. Becca doesn't know the terror that Ruth has gone through most of her life, she has never been able to tell anyone. She tried to talk to her twin sister about it once, but Rachel had erupted into a rage, striking Ruth over and over, screaming that it was a lie. The two had never been the same after that. Ruth tries to push the thoughts of both her sister and her father from her mind as Becca begins to kiss her neck gently, their hands delicately exploring each other. Running her hands through Becca's strawberry blond hair, Ruth whispers words of devotion, words of promise. Becca repeats them back.
Knowing the house is empty, Rachel looks through her closet trying to decide what she should change into, if anything. He hasn't actually talked to her much these past few months, their relationship has been almost purely physical. She worries about what he likes, what will make him desire her. She wants him to need her most of all. Perhaps dressed in sexy lingerie like a whore? Perhaps clad in a white dress like an innocent virgin? Standing there naked in front of her closet, she hears him enter, but does not turn around. She lets him come up behind her and wrap his large hands around her small frame, groping at her breasts. Finally, she reaches back to feel her father's cock fully erect through his jeans. Rachel lets out a sigh of relief.
Their journey to the Kwik Snak completed, Joey, Scott and a few other boys are headed back towards Mahogany Street. The small team of middle schoolers push their bikes with one hand while consuming their junk food with the other. Tall tales of adventures and antics are swapped back and forth, each one growing increasingly more ridiculous and unbelievable. Eventually Joey can not contain himself any longer and begins to detail his plan for this upcoming Friday to his loyal crew. When Scott begins to protest, Joey threatens to "kick him in the sac," and taunts of "tampon-head" are heard chanted throughout the immediate area.
David is pulling on his jeans in frustration. Helen is trying everything to coax him into staying. She has even said that she would considered running away with him if he would just give her some time. He ignores her as he walks into the bathroom to urinate. She weeps and begs, pleads and promises. And then Helen Hammon begins to threaten. She begins to say things, both true and false, that she will say to ruin him. She speaks of lawsuits and blackmail. She speaks of investigations into his consulting gigs and how he could be blackballed in the industry. She speaks of so many things that later David would not remember when his hands found their way around Helen's neck, or when exactly she had stopped breathing. He will remember, however, sitting next to her corpse for a few minutes trying to decide his next move.
Heather Archer is trying desperately to concentrate on what her son is saying to her, but she has smoked quite a bit tonight. Through the haze in her brain, she has managed to piece together that it has something to do with Rachel Hammon, the girl next door. Heather sighs and waves her hand in a dismissive gesture at Doug. She tells her son to forget about the girl, that he will find someone else eventually. Doug angrily picks up a bag of chips and mumbles something about talking to his father about it instead. Heather laughs. Taking a long drag on her joint, she informs her son quite bluntly that his father has been fucking Rachel's mother for the past year. Doug stares at her for a moment, then drops the bag and storms out of the basement.
Becca runs her tongue down Ruth's stomach and her lover lets out a small moan. Becca has been in love with her neighbor ever since they moved in next door to them almost ten years ago. She knows what Ruth's dad has done to her, she's known for years. She could tell by the way the two interacted, the way Ruth almost hid from her father's eyes and the way he would stare at her. Becca never understood what kind of role Rachel played in the whole thing, and quite honestly, didn't care. She would kill Ruth's dad if she could for what he has done to her. Right now, all she can do was love her as much as possible. Becca places her mouth between Ruth's legs and just like every time before, Ruth begins to cry right after she has an orgasm. Becca crawls up and holds her girlfriend until the tears stop.
Joe loves his girls so much. So beautiful and perfect. A part of him knows it's wrong, and yet it seems so correct to take what you have created and love it in every way. They're so different, his girls, even in the beginning. Rachel had almost seduced him, she had wanted him and he had actually had to tell her "no" before out of fear of getting caught. As wonderful as it was having Rachel desire him and understand that their need for each other was a special, natural thing... it was Ruth who he really wanted. It is Ruth who he wants to make lust after him. At first she used to fight him, and now she just lies there, taking it as if it was a punishment of some kind. As Rachel rides him on her bed, Joe closes his eyes. He feels how tight his daughter is and lets his hands slide up to caress her small breasts. If it could only be like this with Ruth. Ruth. And then he says it, just as he climaxes, he says the wrong daughter's name. Joe's eyes fly open to see Rachel's face a mask of hatred and rage.
Scott hadn't said anything in a while. He and Joey had left their companions a few streets back and were turning onto Mahogany. He had hoped to talk his friend out of his stupid idea, but now that the other guys were in on the plan, he knew that Joey would see it through. Scott has thought about faking sick that day, that way he won't have to participate in any of it. But Joey would know. Joey would know he was being a "tampon" and he would never hear the end of it. But all Scott can think about is all the things that can go wrong when his friend steals his dad's handgun.
TBC!!!
User Reviews
Submitted by Fey (user info) at 2007-02-19 14:23:40 EST (#)
Ranking: 1
I'm not generally a fan of sick. But you write well, and I'm hoping Becca will be able to help heal Ruth.
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2006-11-01 22:34:36 EST (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-08-10 00:05:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I agree it was difficult to keep all the characters straight. Especially the lesb..But I think I have it now.
This series of yours is fantastic.
Submitted by DrogoRoch (user info) at 2006-08-09 09:19:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
So much going on, yet I do like it. Two seriously fucked up families.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-08-09 01:53:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I agree that it's a bit cluttered, but it's worth a +2.
Submitted by Sockster (user info) at 2006-08-08 17:37:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
All the characters got a bit confusing. It was better with the first one cause you could use an earlier part of the story as refrence.
Submitted by KindaNews (user info) at 2006-08-08 17:30:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by KindaNews (user info) at 2006-08-08 17:30:42 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The god-like pov is interesting, but there are so many threads in such a short story (relatively speaking, of course) I don't think you're doing justice to your ideas.
There's enough there for a novel.
Perhaps you are thinking of your audience's attention span.
I also think a little dialogue here and there could replace a lot of exposition without giving up the pov, but I know that's not what you're going for.
Just a thought.
1.5 for me.
The jealousy thing in the incest thread is fucking priceless.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-08-08 16:46:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Use the word 'really' some more.
Really.
Submitted by houseman (user info) at 2006-08-08 16:30:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I haven't been rating in a while but this series has brought me out of hiding. Excellent work as always. I love St Eubrie!
Submitted by awesome_face (user info) at 2006-08-08 15:34:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2006-08-08 13:22:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Another well erected story...hahaha.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-08-08 09:40:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
nice work from you
Submitted by august_sobriquet (user info) at 2006-08-08 09:14:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
whoa.
A+
This is good writing, almost makes you feel like you don't want to know what happens next, it's so vivid.