I poke the body next to me ("weren't you someone once?" Part Two) (401 hits)
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Submitted by onewetleg <onewetleg.at.sbcglobal.net> (View user info) at 2006-08-08 20:18:44 EDT
"It's time to get up. I have to go to work. I don't know who you are, but you need to get your shit together and get out of here."
I get no response so I light a cigarette and pull on my pants and a shirt. They both smell like cigarettes but I can't smell it. I can smell grass and pee. I wonder what really happened last night while I rub my forehead and look around for some shoes.
Blurry images of taxi rides and live bands tromp through my head with very large shoes that hurt my brain. I stop caring about the past and turn to the future, the present. Why won't this drunk idiot wake up?
Fucking lightweights.
The news is blaring from the tube. A turned over truck on 580 is blocking traffic. Expect delays. Expect me not to care. I haven't driven a car since the early nineties.
"The hit and run driver that killed a CHP turns himself in at the urging of his family." screams the nicely coiffed woman anchor.
"I just told him he had to do the right thing," says his mother. I think of my mother and the time I did a hit and run. She told me to lie, lie, lie. I got away with it. I think it may have been the most creative day of my life.
My head hurts with thoughts and alchohol poisoning. I wonder why I can never remember to drink a glass of water and take a tylenol before I pass out. Mom swore by it, it should be automatic.
"Hey, you?" I poke again with my cigarette hand, the smoke curling around the yellow haired head of the body lying in my bed. This body I have never seen before and have no idea if I have been intimate with or not.
"Hey!" No response.
All of a sudden I have a creepy feeling.
What if this fucker is dead?
I butt my cigarette and get really quiet.
I don't hear breathing.
I stop my own breathing as a defense mechanism.
I think about the last one that died and I wonder if I can handle going through it again.
User Reviews
Submitted by andkorn (user info) at 2006-08-09 19:51:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
+2 Simply for the last line. The original ADD sucks.
What's up with all this ADD crap? where is all the good content like this?
Submitted by COMountain (user info) at 2006-08-09 19:47:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
you coulda gone "Sixth Sense" on this and it would have been better
Submitted by hot_pocket (user info) at 2006-08-09 19:28:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
yesssssssssss i liked this. veryyy good story
Submitted by whysenheimer (user info) at 2006-08-09 19:07:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fag below.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-08-09 15:31:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
stick your cigarette in him, that will tell you if he's dead or not
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:57:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The last line made it a +2
Submitted by UnderOathMeal (user info) at 2006-08-08 21:51:37 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
cool.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-08-08 20:59:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
not bad
Submitted by acaldwell (user info) at 2006-08-08 20:46:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
needs more estrogen!!! more hot flashes!!! more cortisone!!! its a femail u kilt, dint ya? fuked her to def!!!!! wheeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!
Submitted by onewetleg (user info) at 2006-08-08 20:22:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
http://www.ubersite.com/m/91176
the first one, and introduction of sorts.