My Dearest Lisa (849 hits)
Category: RomanceLabels: fiction
Rating: 0.82 on 30 reviews (Rate this item) (V)
Submitted by Maltese (View user info) at 2006-08-09 11:16:00 EDT
Mike Barrow lived in a small house on Pine Street, right next to Jacob Penn. Nobody ever really noticed Mike, nor did they seem to care. He was a tall fellow, about six-foot-five (1.95 m), but he was skinny, about 160 pounds (72.5 kg). He had short reddish-brown hair, and 35-years-old, although he was not completely sure, as he could not remember his birthday.
He was an ice cream man, as he had been for nineteen years, since he was sixteen. He was well-liked by the children of St. Eubrie, giving out ice cream for free whenever the temperature reached the triple-digits. He also had a gift for playing the piano, but he didn't like playing in front of other people.
Whenever he wasn't working, he would spend time pacing up and down near Wilbeck High. There was a beautiful 16-year-old girl named Lisa Martinez who always sat under the oak tree during recess.
Lisa was a foreign exchange student from Spain. Her mother was British and her father was Spanish. She was popular in school. She got good grades and was on the cheerleading team.
Mike would stare at Lisa as long as he could, and she never seemed to noticed. He was obsessed with her. He fantasized about making love to her.
As the long autumn progressed, so did Mike's obsession with Lisa. He gradually faded away from his job as the ice cream man, before quitting altogether to spend more time watching Lisa.
By the second week of October, Mike had filled up his house with pictures of her, and also found her address, so he could watch her even after she left school.
On the third week of October, he saw her undressing in her window. He could not control himself, and started masturbating. She almost saw him, which made him jump - as well as fall off the tree branch he was watching from. He broke his left hand in the fall, but luckily nobody noticed him.
November started, and Mike could not take it any longer. He waited for her that day, on the second day of November, outside the school like he always did. But this time it would be a little different.
She walked out of the school, along with all the other kids, and he followed her home like usual. He made sure nobody could see her by the time she passed through the woods, where she always walked through as a shortcut to her house.
Nobody was there except Mike and Lisa.
It was time.
Mike jumped out of the bushes and pushed her to the ground. He wrapped his right hand (the non-broken one) around her neck, and squeezed.
She tried to scream, but couldn't. He kept squeezing as she tried to plead for her life.
He squeezed and squeezed and squeezed, until finally she stopped breathing.
He dragged her body from the woods and into a large coffin-like wooden box, which he then closed. He brought her back to his house.
Mike opened the door to his house with a big smile as he opened the box and placed her cold, dead body on the sofa.
"Hello, Lisa", he said to her corpse, expecting no response.
He finally had her.
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Hours later, he threw a wedding in his house, acting as both the priest, the groom, and the audience.
He dressed her body in a wedding dress and carried her body in the dining room.
"Do you, Michael, take Lisa, to be your lawfully wedded wife?", he said to himself.
He held Lisa again.
"I do", he said.
He put his fingers into Lisa's mouth and flapped her cold lips.
"I do" he said in a high voice.
"You may now kiss the bride", he said to himself.
He kissed Lisa and knew that she was now his slave.
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As the months progressed, Lisa's body began to decompose severely.
When her hair fell out, he would glue the clumps of hair back to her scalp.
When her skin decomposed, he peeled it off and replaced the skin with silk covered in wax.
When her bones came apart, he strung them back together with piano wire from his prized piano.
He removed her organs and replaced them with large balls and tubes of rubber filled with gelatin.
He dressed her in nothing but rubber gloves, rubber stockings, and a rag.
And he made love to her every night with a tube acting as a vagina with a piece of cotton attached.
He'd act as her voice, talking in a high voice while talking to himself.
When her brain started rotting out, he liquefied it with some battery acid he had obtained from the dump near the Nightshade trailer park and poured it out in the sink.
He removed all her teeth and nails, and built a tesla coil to "punish" her daily.
Nobody heard from Mike again for five years until he sent a letter with no return address to Lisa's parents, showing him doing sexual things to Lisa's body, ranging from showing her being raped by various animals, to S&M.
Her parents, not knowing who exactly did these things to their daughter, have put up Wanted posters on nearly every street in St. Eubrie.
It's just a matter of time before Mike gets caught, but the question is, how long?
Only time will tell.
User Reviews
Submitted by DasHeer (user info) at 2007-05-15 08:25:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by eppliks (user info) at 2006-08-09 17:03:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Wasn't clever or particularly imaginative.
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I'd like to see you write something better
Submitted by darko (user info) at 2006-08-10 00:26:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
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Submitted by HotWillie (user info) at 2006-08-10 00:19:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Lisa (user info) at 2006-08-09 23:23:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
What a deranged and hollow piece of shit.
Submitted by Kaelic (user info) at 2006-08-09 20:55:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I didn't really like your story ... it was gruesome, and horrific. Pretty much mental pollution, in my opinion. No offense, just my opinion. However, the true story was fascinating. Very disturbing, though. He was clearly mentally ill, but damn. It's just weird. And those pictures ... that second picture is horrific. Your story literally turned my stomach when I read it and saw those pictures, because they're real. I thought it was a true story at first, and I thought I might hurl.
Submitted by MouthSore (user info) at 2006-08-09 20:22:13 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Corpse fucking is so 90's.
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 19:59:22 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by extacy_red (user info) at 2006-08-09 19:47:56 (#)
Ranking: -1
I didnt really like it.
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O RLY? DEN IMO KEEL U!
Submitted by extacy_red (user info) at 2006-08-09 19:47:56 EDT (#)
Ranking: -1
I didnt really like it.
Submitted by Wiggles (user info) at 2006-08-09 17:21:40 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:39:26 (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Wiggles (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:26:16 (#)
Ranking: -2
you're terrible
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So? I manage to crank out stories all the time, you've only been around since July 2004 and you only got 48 messages. I don't post just for the sake of posting, mind you, I post because I like telling stories, and I like the Uber culture, y'know.
But seriously, you inactive asshole, I'll pass you in hits by the end of the year.
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So you admit you're terrible, but because you post frequently and waste a lot more time than me, that makes it okay? You pre-pubescent cockstain. All of your posts just get in my way when I'm looking for quality troll posts.
Submitted by eppliks (user info) at 2006-08-09 17:03:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Wasn't clever or particularly imaginative.
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 16:18:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2006-08-09 15:55:57 (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this, a little to fast as far as what I believe Jack is thinking on this whole thing.
I mean in a matter of a post we are introduced to a character, shown his worst side, and he is gone.
But I still liked it, although I would have reposted with St Eubrie in the title so it doesn't get missed.
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Actually, I left out "St. Eubrie" from the title on purpose so that it would get more hits. Usually, a St. Eubrie post will only get five reviews and two hundred hits before burning out, so I purposefully left it out of the title to get more hits.
For some reason people don't like reading competition-related posts.
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2006-08-09 15:55:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I liked this, a little to fast as far as what I believe Jack is thinking on this whole thing.
I mean in a matter of a post we are introduced to a character, shown his worst side, and he is gone.
But I still liked it, although I would have reposted with St Eubrie in the title so it doesn't get missed.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-08-09 15:48:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Take your medication and snap on that hockey helmet...you're bouncing off the walls again.
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 15:03:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
DAMMIT SOMEONE REVIEW THIS FUCK YOU ALL
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 14:40:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
SHAMONE!!! AGAIN!!!
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2006-08-09 13:38:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I gave her a wet willie once.
Submitted by mles76 (user info) at 2006-08-09 13:26:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
George Micheal?
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 13:17:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
SHAMONE!!!
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:39:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by Wiggles (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:26:16 (#)
Ranking: -2
you're terrible
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So? I manage to crank out stories all the time, you've only been around since July 2004 and you only got 48 messages. I don't post just for the sake of posting, mind you, I post because I like telling stories, and I like the Uber culture, y'know.
But seriously, you inactive asshole, I'll pass you in hits by the end of the year.
Submitted by indoninja (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:32:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
that is sick, he definately porked her...
Submitted by Wiggles (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:26:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
you're terrible
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:24:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by indoninja (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:10:12 (#)
Ranking: 2
My engagement?
Seriously who were the real people involved and when did it happen?
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Key West, Florida, 1931. There was a radiologist there named Carl Tanzler, and he kept seeing ghosts at night showing him a picture of the girl he was supposed to marry.
Eventually he found this girl, who was one of his patients. Her name was Elena Milagro Hoyos, a 20-year-old Cuban immigrant.
Problem was,
1. She was married.
2. She didn't like Tanzler, but only as a doctor.
3. She had terminal tuberculosis.
Well, thought Tanzler, no matter. He waited until she died in October 1931, and Tanzler asked her parents if he could build an above-ground masoleum to prevent her body from decomposing. They agreed, thinking he was a very nice person for spending thousands of his own dollars to do something like that.
He visited her body every night, and eventually it got the better of him, and he stole the body from the mausoleum in April 1933, a year and a half after her death.
Now, I changed A LOT of things here:
He did do the stuff to stop her from decomposing, like the piano wire, the silk with wax, gluing the hair back, removing the organs and replacing them with tubes filled with gelatin, etc.
However, and I repeat, HE NEVER EVER EVER had sex with her.
It was more of a marriage thing.
But he never had sex with her.
Also, the brain thing never happened - the brain stayed intact.
The tesla coil I mentioned was a million-volt tesla coil built by Tanzler in 1937 in an attempt to bring her back from the dead.
He actually truly loved her, and he never really did any harm to her.
Eventually, Elena's sister heard rumors about this, so she confronted Tanzler at his house and found her sister's body.
Tanzler was arrested for "wanton desecration of a grave", but could not be punished, as he spent seven years with her and the statue of limitations on grave desecration was two years.
The first picture is one taken of Hoyos in 1926, when she was sixteen, about five years before her death from tuberculosis.
The second one is one taken of her after her body was removed from Tanzler's house in 1940, after spending seven years in his "care".
Police then convinced Tanzler that the body had been cut into pieces so that he could not find it if he tried again (which was not true, she was actually buried in an unmarked grave in the back of the local cemetery).
Suprisingly, the public sympathized with Tanzler, and a group of giggling Cuban prostitutes gave him their services for free.
Eventually he built a wax replica of her and spent every day with it until his death in 1952.
And that's what REALLY happened.
I took this story and twisted it to make a monster out of the antagonist.
Also, this is the longest review I have ever written.
Submitted by KindaNews (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:22:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice execution, pardon the pun.
Submitted by indoninja (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:10:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:03:30 (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by precision (user info) at 2006-08-09 11:33:48 (#)
Ranking: 2
sad thing is...it's a true story
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Yes, I based it off of a true story. If anyone wants to know what I based it off of I can tell you.
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My engagement?
Seriously who were the real people involved and when did it happen?
Submitted by forthewin (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:06:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
That's probably the most disturbing thing I've ever read. And I have read some pretty disturbing things.
Submitted by Maltese (user info) at 2006-08-09 12:03:30 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by precision (user info) at 2006-08-09 11:33:48 (#)
Ranking: 2
sad thing is...it's a true story
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Yes, I based it off of a true story. If anyone wants to know what I based it off of I can tell you.
Submitted by RyuFu (user info) at 2006-08-09 11:47:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm curious as to where those pictures are from.
I mean, did this really happen? That would be...hideous...
On a slightly lighter note, the second picture bears a striking resemblance to Michael Jackson. Gross.
Submitted by precision (user info) at 2006-08-09 11:33:48 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
sad thing is...it's a true story
Submitted by UnderOathMeal (user info) at 2006-08-09 11:21:39 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
St. Eubrie +2
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Maltese, we now know what you think about during your lunch breaks. Fucking sicko.
Submitted by JMG114 (user info) at 2006-08-09 11:21:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I want to move to St. Eubrie.