Long Day's Journey Into The Night. (ADD) (391 hits)
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Submitted by Beano (View user info) at 2006-08-23 04:34:38 EDT
Long Day's Journey Into The Night.
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It was hot and dusty.
The heat was bordering on the unbearable and though it was dusty as far as the eye could see, deep red surface dusty sweeping along in what breeze there was, the sweat that soaked my shirt gave me a clingy moist feel.
I'd probably been driving for two hours, two hours in this stint anyways. In total I'd been driving for close on two days.
Two hours without a piss and nearly as long without a cold drink. It was getting to be time to stop. I could probably use another packet of Reds anyway.
I caressed the buttons on the radio looking for something a little more relaxing than the music that was currently emanating from the speakers.
I was in a strange mood and the heat wasn't helping. I wanted something relaxing yet friendly, gentle but exciting. My mind was playing tricks on me and the music was important.
How far had I come?
I know I'd made a mental note of the odometer when I left home and had regularly been updating myself with the kilometres travelled so far, but by now I couldn't focus, I couldn't make my mind do the maths required. I think it was because I was getting close
As much as I wanted to be at my destination and have this cruel drive over with, I had an alter, a demon, telling me that I didn't really want to arrive. Not ever.
I spied a rest station and did the necessary to pull in and come to a stop by an unused gas pump. They were all unused as a matter of fact.
The very first thing I did was stroll over to the fountain attached to the outside wall of the building and refreshed my face and neck. The cool water running down the length of my back was pure relief.
I went back to the Plymouth and filled her up. She is a thirsty beast.
Wiping my hands on the paper towel as I walked into the store I nodded to the young assistant who stood patiently behind the counter.
I asked for a few items which he diligently pointed out to me and I guess he took that as a cue to have a bit of an idle chat.
"Off to someplace nice?" He asked.
"Not particularly" I replied, slowly but not aggressively.
"You got far to go mister? It's a mighty long way to the next stop. If you don't rest up here you'll be driving long into the night" He offered, I guess maybe looking to drum up some extra business or genuinely being a kind and caring human.
"I'm going to see my Mother. She's going to die of cancer. Driving into the night is a small price to pay for a few minutes by her side" I said.
He didn't reply.
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Submitted by redskieslookfake (user info) at 2008-07-26 12:51:49 EDT (#)
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Submitted by maf54 (user info) at 2008-05-14 05:00:45 EDT (#)
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Just to counter what that idiot Director did to you.
Submitted by Director (user info) at 2008-05-13 17:45:41 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2006-08-24 06:45:30 EDT (#)
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Submitted by earth_collapse (user info) at 2006-08-24 06:13:54 (#)
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Actually, I didn't block your account... you must have forgotten your password.
And, the only reason I thought it was snotty was because it's just getting underway... at the moment, of course it doesn't have much content, or a large user base, but that comment was surely uncalled for. And I really didn't mean to start a war over the little edit. It was meant to be more funny than anything.
I acted too hastily, and I do apologize, but, you see, if you were starting a site, and didn't have much content, almost nothing at all, I wouldn't presume to say I didn't like it.
I am doing this not for myself, but for artists. I plan on hosting short/feature films, music, and other media/art for the masses. I want to promote the individual.
Can you see where I am coming from at all?
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I can see where you are coming from. More importantly I appretiate the apology and apologise for the rant on your post.
By the sounds of things you promised yourself you wouldn't abuse your power as Adminstrator and did so in the very first few days/weeks. If you did it that easily then I'm very dissapointed because it was a pretty weak comment that you edited.
Plus... what gives you the right to alter the honest comment of a person you invited to your site. You are going to have to learn to live with critisism... people don't like it they are gonna tell you and probably stronger than I did.
As I said on the site, I wish you all the best with it. Show some restraint in the future though because people probably would have looked at my comment and thought 'wanker...what does he know!' and ignored it anyway.
Submitted by earth_collapse (user info) at 2006-08-24 06:13:54 EDT (#)
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Actually, I didn't block your account... you must have forgotten your password.
And, the only reason I thought it was snotty was because it's just getting underway... at the moment, of course it doesn't have much content, or a large user base, but that comment was surely uncalled for. And I really didn't mean to start a war over the little edit. It was meant to be more funny than anything.
I acted too hastily, and I do apologize, but, you see, if you were starting a site, and didn't have much content, almost nothing at all, I wouldn't presume to say I didn't like it.
I am doing this not for myself, but for artists. I plan on hosting short/feature films, music, and other media/art for the masses. I want to promote the individual.
Can you see where I am coming from at all?
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2006-08-23 19:53:14 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by ilikesteak (user info) at 2006-08-23 13:50:51 (#)
Ranking: 2
I wanted to -2 this because ADD IS OVER, but I liked it.
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but ADD now means story under 500 words ... no?
Submitted by ilikesteak (user info) at 2006-08-23 13:50:51 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I wanted to -2 this because ADD IS OVER, but I liked it.
Submitted by ubetidid (user info) at 2006-08-23 13:06:38 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by JMG114 (user info) at 2006-08-23 10:07:11 EDT (#)
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No comment.
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2006-08-23 08:37:49 EDT (#)
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you have a good attitude, lets settle on a 0
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2006-08-23 08:24:47 EDT (#)
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Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2006-08-23 08:06:19 (#)
Ranking: -2
Tense changes
No feeling
-2 to offset the suckers that will over look these points and +2 you just because it's about your mum.
Oh and just to be a dick.
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Cheers for the feedback.
It's not about my Mum btw. It's just a story.
Submitted by badassmofo (user info) at 2006-08-23 08:06:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Tense changes
No feeling
-2 to offset the suckers that will over look these points and +2 you just because it's about your mum.
Oh and just to be a dick.
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2006-08-23 07:50:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Comment.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2006-08-23 06:12:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Good ending, didn't see it coming.