APW: Decrepitation (769 hits)
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (View user info) at 2006-09-13 12:43:25 EDT
The image now curled at the edge
Faded as the memories it inspires
Does still afford the comfort I require
Beside the dying embers of the fire
To return now to the place of my birth
My father's house, the product of his hands
My mother's comfort and her love's demands
Just shades now in these living shadowlands
To once more walk the fields of my youth
And run upon the hillside in the sun
And speak a child's language as a son
And end my life where life had first begun
Trees grown for climbing, nature born
and grown and tended to for me alone,
An absence in the mouth, a richer morning,
A baited hook and cast line, a warning,
Flatrock skipping on the water's face
Dancing in the falling morning snow
Here the knotted bark, a hiding place
The air at suppertime, the stove aglow
Crushing leaves, a coat left on the hook
Lazy afternoons spent with a book
Slipping free of school with cough and guile
O to resume the joys of a child!
Years spent laughing at old men in long coats
Laughing at cracked and battered hands
How unlike mine, my younger, simpler hands
Lines on faces weathered by clockhands
Eyes the world's weight has sloped and bent
How unlike mine, my younger, slower eyes
Years avoiding conversations with my grandmother
Stories rich with history and experience
How unlike mine, my younger, empty stories
O to deny the foolishness of a child!
The wooden chair slides closer to the flame
The shaking photograph without a frame
That I should be in winter
And that I should be where the stones tilt and reject the earth
After years and years without the promised victory
That I should fear strangers and fear the cold
And that I should be a man in full
Completed
Is the fated payment owed
Owed and collected
By time
In time.
And in my hand a blessing
And in my hand the past
Committed now to fire
Committed now to ash
The blue flame turns to yellow
As memory makes its stand
And I am left with nothing
But a burning paper angel in the pocket of my hand.
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Submitted by Coleslaw_Murphy (user info) at 2006-09-13 21:55:31 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
On the last stanza I was like, "Yep. Scroll. Click. +2. On the last stanza I was like, "Yep. Scroll. Click. +2." Rank."
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2006-09-13 18:43:25 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-09-13 16:54:47 EDT (#)
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I wouldn't laugh too hard at this, Shlongy: this is going to be you in a year or two.
Submitted by Shlongy (user info) at 2006-09-13 16:51:31 EDT (#)
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I thought the great philospher Beavis said that the term was "Decrapitation"?
Submitted by icarus1987 (user info) at 2006-09-13 16:32:44 EDT (#)
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But he's okay in the end, right? And he goes to the Gap. And buys clothes. And feels better about himself.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-09-13 16:16:51 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2006-09-13 16:06:57 (#)
Ranking: 2
Shoulders instead of eyes and it would have been damn near perfect.
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I wanted to suggest that not only had time worked on the man's soul, but had also seemed to melt the windows to them.
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2006-09-13 16:08:16 EDT (#)
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scroly
Submitted by Wildman (user info) at 2006-09-13 16:06:57 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Shoulders instead of eyes and it would have been damn near perfect.
Submitted by Pentameter (user info) at 2006-09-13 15:03:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fantastic...that painting is just...yes.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-09-13 15:01:32 EDT (#)
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captivated as usual.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-09-13 14:55:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Blah...
But you are the O-Tron, and
APW = AUTO +2
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2006-09-13 14:54:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
About suffering they were never wrong,
The Old Masters; how well, they understood
Its human position; how it takes place
While someone else is eating or opening a window or just walking dully along
Submitted by whiskey_jack (user info) at 2006-09-13 14:45:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Van Gogh owns souls
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-09-13 14:31:04 EDT (#)
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Understandable, Void_Where.
Glad you enjoyed it.
Lishy, I kind of find the poem to be much less sad than the painting. I think the painting is absolutely heartbreaking, while the verse is a little of both (as you said).
Fall can't get here soon enough.
Submitted by Susie_Derkins (user info) at 2006-09-13 14:29:15 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Awesome...this will definitely earn you a tickling.
What?
Submitted by Void_Where_Prohibited (user info) at 2006-09-13 14:24:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I don't normally read your stuff. Not offense to you of course. I just don't get into poetry very much. But this I liked. Thanks!
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-09-13 14:18:01 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
This piece is so beautiful and sad.
"Here the knotted bark, a hiding place
The air at suppertime, the stove aglow
Crushing leaves, a coat left on the hook
Lazy afternoons spent with a book"
Reminds me of this time of year, which is one of my favorites.
"But a burning paper angel in the pocket of my hand." Love that line for some reason. It implies a certain innocence to me, even at death.
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2006-09-13 13:46:53 EDT (#)
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Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-09-13 13:23:10 (#)
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Quoth the Panda, "Do me more!"
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Thorns. You odd, man. Odd. :-)
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2006-09-13 13:44:24 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
very cool
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-09-13 13:25:48 EDT (#)
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Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2006-09-13 13:10:17 (#)
Ranking: 2
I love beans and rice.
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I'll trade you my lambchops and rice for some of that action.
Don't mistake me...it's tasty.
But it is absolutely impossible to eat with Shitty Plastic Office Cutlery.
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-09-13 13:23:10 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Quoth the Panda, "Do me more!"
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-09-13 13:22:59 EDT (#)
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Submitted by TigerLilly (user info) at 2006-09-13 13:10:17 EDT (#)
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I love beans and rice.
Submitted by MyTeeOne (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:57:42 EDT (#)
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Naturally.
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:57:23 EDT (#)
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No, I mean for realz.
Print this shizzle, punch it bind it save it.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:55:42 EDT (#)
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Submitted by MyTeeOne (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:49:07 (#)
Ranking: 2
You have talent sir. Your words captured the story of the picture well.
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The picture was found after the piece was written.
In other words, Van Gogh knowingly bent himself to my will years and years ago.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:51:05 EDT (#)
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Submitted by coley (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:48:00 (#)
Ranking: 2
Do you save these things which you write?
You ought.
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I just save the poem reviews, because I know where to find everything else.
However, I really should back up everything that I've posted.
Hopefully Uber won't crash and burn before then, or all of these posts are lost.
Submitted by MyTeeOne (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:49:07 EDT (#)
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You have talent sir. Your words captured the story of the picture well.
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:48:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Do you save these things which you write?
You ought.
Submitted by coley (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:47:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
loved it.
Submitted by Beano312003 (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:46:00 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Shouldn't that chair have some sunflowers on it?
Submitted by Antioxident (user info) at 2006-09-13 12:44:39 EDT (#)
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