On The Corner Of Fountain & Fairfax (453 hits)
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Submitted by kaos-king (antius777) (View user info) at 2006-09-17 06:02:48 EDT
I wrote this for a 550 word contest elsewhere. Titles were provided...
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It was almost quarter 'til five in the morning when I slipped out of my car and walked the brisk few steps up to the corner of Fountain and Fairfax. At this time on an early sunday morning, the city was silent, only a few cars could occasionally be heard the next block over on the main stretch. In another fifteen minutes the paper delivery people would spill out onto the streets, but until then, I still had time.
Here in the receding darkness, I sat a brown paper sack on the pavement. It lined up with faint chalk markings I had made the day before, so many inches out from the grass onto the sidewalk. Everything had to be so precise with these individuals, my current employers. Like the fact the rooster in the sack had to be dead for exactly fifty-five hours ago from this moment. Do you know how bad a rotting bird stinks? Worse than you would imagine.
The item they had been seeking for decades, I had quite easily obtained. I wouldn't bother telling them I got it on EBay for $23.16, because they wouldn't care. Besides, I think that might anger them a bit. Why they wanted it, I'm not gonna ask - Not part of the job. I just find things for them. This happens to be the drop point they designated. I didn't argue.
Right as I paced back into the grass, the darkness deepened around me and things went silent. I assumed it would be Mymalkathine again, and was surprised the see Belail himself set foot on the sidewalk. His black wings eternally smoldering, he no longer seemed to notice the stench of burning feathers. He strolled over and picked up the bag, glancing inside.
"The figurine is encased within the fowl?" he asked in a rumbly voice.
"Yes Sir," I nodded, "As per the contract."
"You do good work, human," he said reaching into the bag, his hand grouping through the body of the dead rooster.
As his form began to vanish, like smoke billowing out in the wind, he pulled the small toy Lex Luthor out of the bag and said, "His Majesty will be most pleased."
I coughed back a response and returned to my car.
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Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2007-10-17 12:55:44 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-09-18 13:18:58 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
wrong one sorry
http://tinyurl.com/gqwtw
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-09-18 13:18:12 EDT (#)
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http://tinyurl.com/jsos4
Submitted by GetNakeddd (user info) at 2006-09-18 09:40:19 EDT (#)
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Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-09-17 19:53:25 (#)
Ranking: 2
I am a recent gradate of the Tyler Durden school of societo-political philosophy.
My favorite professor was ETS.
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LMAO
Love your work, Kaos. Look forward to reading more
Submitted by I_love_Kracka (user info) at 2006-09-17 23:14:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
amazing talent
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-09-17 20:05:27 EDT (#)
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But, but.... I got "Fountain and Fairfax" from an Afghan Whigs song!!!
They're from Cincinnatti, Ohio!!!
**weeps**
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-09-17 19:53:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
IVE LOST NOTHING AND GAINED EVERYTHING
I am a recent gradate of the Tyler Durden school of societo-political philosophy.
My favorite professor was ETS.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-09-17 19:42:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Rad, you've lost it. Completely.
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-09-17 19:15:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
your protag is delivering lex luther incased in a dead bird.
your description of the demon focused on his wings.
the story takes place on fairfax and fountain.
lex luther is a greedy megalomaniac bent on control, your character descriptions focus on birds (and what do birds have? beaks. and what do jews have? big noses that look like beaks)
AND THE FUCKING STORY TAKES PLACE NOT ONLY IN THE MOST JEWISH PART OF HOLLYWOOD (fairfax district) YOU ARE MAKING IT LOOK LIKE THE JEWS WHO RUN HOLLYWOOD IS THE DEVIL
very anti-semetic undertones there, mr. ethno-racist.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-09-17 18:56:18 EDT (#)
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Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-09-17 14:41:58 (#)
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this is clearly anti-semitic and I cannot rate it any higher than a 1 because of that
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Submitted by Chroniclysm (user info) at 2006-09-17 15:04:20 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-09-17 14:41:58 EDT (#)
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this is clearly anti-semitic and I cannot rate it any higher than a 1 because of that
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-09-17 11:49:25 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
You do good work, human.
Submitted by Bubba2341 (user info) at 2006-09-17 11:36:27 EDT (#)
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They should have reamed your ass. It was only 378 words. :-D
Good stuff.
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2006-09-17 11:07:31 EDT (#)
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Monty needs sleeeeeep.
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2006-09-17 06:29:02 EDT (#)
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Uh, when I'm on night shift and bored at 2am...I dig up even more weird shit than normal.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-09-17 06:26:12 EDT (#)
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Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2006-09-17 06:18:18 (#)
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This is fucking weird: http://tinyurl.com/zds2a
"Rare Urn/Pot - haunted by child's spirit. See Pics!"
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Ah Jaysis... do I even wanna know why you're looking at this???
Submitted by GodChicken (user info) at 2006-09-17 06:18:18 EDT (#)
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What demons want with a Lex Luthor toy can only lead to emo tears.
This is fucking weird: http://tinyurl.com/zds2a