After The End (604 hits)
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Submitted by Apollo (View user info) at 2006-09-19 12:18:34 EDT
"Would you go?"
"I would go tonight."
"And risk life and limb?"
"Gladly."
The two boys sat opposite each other, the dying embers of a camp fire between them, sleeping bags pulled over their thin shoulders. It was getting late in the year for sleeping under the stars but both boys, almost men, wanted to make the most of it.
By unspoken yet tacit agreement this was the last year of their childhood.
They had been born a mere two months apart. Their fathers had been comrades, brethren, and friends.
The war that had torn communities apart, the war that had separated brother from brother and father from son had forged their souls together. Two boys that had grown up quickly and independently. Not feral, but not far off.
The days of a long childhood were over; they read with incredulity the old books that spoke of adolescence and teenagers. Seventeen year olds coddled and spoiled by indulgent fathers! What decadent princes were these?
They were fighters at ten years old. Manhood was to follow.
As was their custom they spoke of battles won and friends lost. They spoke of the past, before the war, when man was already in paradise and threw it away for the promise of a magical paradise in the sky.
No religion for them. They had yet to meet a virgin never mind seventy two of them.
The food was coming back but those beasts that had survived would not be immediately recognisable to the pre-war population. The very DNA of man and animal alike had been poisoned and warped by the radiation around them.
The older boy asked again.
"My brother - would you go?"
"I have said I would", the other replied, irritated, "do you doubt me?"
"No. I do not doubt you. I doubt myself. You give me strength. Tomorrow we shall decide it."
The boys slept.
The next morning was passed in silence.
The boys had been fed the legend of the land to the east almost since birth - the land where there were still women. Women, girls, unsullied and near to genetically normal. Not the crones and witches that inhabited the ruined land around them.
The boys had passed the test of puberty. They had grown true and their ejaculate was considered as pure and as undamaged as possible. They were so close to being chosen to take the path to the east.
The path once set upon was irreversible. The dangers were many, the privations were great but the reward! Oh the reward. They would be given the greatest gift of all. They would be given the point. The meaning of life. They would propagate their bloodline.
Almost one in five children survived birth out east they were told. One in five! Such fantastic odds were not to be ignored.
Now one of them could go. Raised as brethren, battles under the belt, a lifetime together was soon to end. Only one of them could go.
The survivor.
Today they would do battle.
User Reviews
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2006-09-20 17:10:49 EDT (#)
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THIS WAS SHIT
Submitted by polyamorousaj (user info) at 2006-09-20 13:07:46 EDT (#)
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LHA ranking.
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2006-09-20 10:36:56 EDT (#)
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PENIS
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-09-20 10:25:42 EDT (#)
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Method:
STFU you simpering n00b.
Submitted by Flying_buttmonkey (user info) at 2006-09-20 07:19:04 EDT (#)
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I really liked this, but I agree with the 'ejaculate' thing, it's like a written poke in the eye. Ruins the flow, if you'll excuse the pun.
My Cornflakes have made my tummy hurt :(
Submitted by Method (user info) at 2006-09-20 07:06:10 EDT (#)
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Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:32:56 (#)
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Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:27:49 (#)
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No Comment
TheUniter = Method.
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I don't think so buddy, if it were me, you would have gotten a -2
UM = No prisoners
Smooches! = )
Submitted by shandythedog (user info) at 2006-09-20 06:52:14 EDT (#)
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wtf is all this?
who is bcm?
do you know porn's email adress?
Submitted by rad1101 (user info) at 2006-09-19 20:31:07 EDT (#)
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rubbish
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2006-09-19 20:15:27 EDT (#)
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No Comment.
Submitted by Spam (user info) at 2006-09-19 19:07:56 EDT (#)
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on another note, it was good to see even a tiny fraction of effort from you on the front page.
Submitted by Spam (user info) at 2006-09-19 19:05:03 EDT (#)
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Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-09-19 18:37:16 (#)
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you know what is bad and not a good sign of what I have been doing with my time for the past 3 years?
When people see the word ejaculate they think of me.
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Don't let it get you down, it's probably just because they've seen your photo.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-09-19 18:37:16 EDT (#)
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you know what is bad and not a good sign of what I have been doing with my time for the past 3 years?
When people see the word ejaculate they think of me.
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-09-19 18:36:38 EDT (#)
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hahaah i was going to use 'seed' but that's well, a bit mccallum innit?
Submitted by Spam (user info) at 2006-09-19 18:35:19 EDT (#)
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They had grown true and their ejaculate was considered as pure and as undamaged as possible.
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Couldn't resist it could you?
You know, as soon as I read this, I actually had an image of you giggling like a schoolboy when you wrote it.
Submitted by Merlina (user info) at 2006-09-19 18:32:26 EDT (#)
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oh lovely
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-09-19 15:58:07 EDT (#)
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Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-09-19 15:47:22 (#)
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y'know, when I judged this, I thought this might be you - it has a lot of your style.
One of the better entries in the UM qualification round, btw... """
really?
fucking hell the rest must have been bad - i wrote this in 5 mins while on a conference call.
Submitted by JonnyX (user info) at 2006-09-19 15:47:22 EDT (#)
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y'know, when I judged this, I thought this might be you - it has a lot of your style.
One of the better entries in the UM qualification round, btw...
Submitted by c1ndy (user info) at 2006-09-19 14:14:30 EDT (#)
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I've read this once....
Submitted by BuckeyesTHEGAME (user info) at 2006-09-19 14:04:38 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by jgreening (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:48:20 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by St_Jimmy (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:46:05 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Cracked_out_cali (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:16:58 (#)
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Pretty good.
Could have done without the 'ejaculate' line though
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:32:56 EDT (#)
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Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:27:49 (#)
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No Comment
TheUniter = Method.
Submitted by Hirilnara (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:31:05 EDT (#)
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Very nice!
Maybe I should just forfeit now...
Submitted by TheUniter (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:27:49 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:27:48 EDT (#)
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Cool. Is this going to be a series? I'll read it.
Submitted by Cracked_out_cali (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:16:58 EDT (#)
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Pretty good.
Could have done without the 'ejaculate' line though
Submitted by Berty (user info) at 2006-09-19 13:00:06 EDT (#)
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Didn't somebody else do a sort of post like this? Something about two brothers talking about going to war and one of them was frightened so the other one shot the scared one?
I dunno. This was better than that though.
Submitted by BLITZKREIG_BOB (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:58:41 EDT (#)
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TWO MAN ENTER
ONE MAN LEAVE
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:56:03 EDT (#)
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You, Loki and Ghola look like you posted your Ubermadness submissions a bit early.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:53:29 EDT (#)
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frightening.
Submitted by firefly (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:53:29 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by Crystle (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:34:59 EDT (#)
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post apocolyptic?
nicely done, on the whole. Good little snapshot.
Submitted by loki (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:31:48 EDT (#)
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excellent work
Submitted by Brdn_Nkd (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:28:46 EDT (#)
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No Comment
Submitted by apollo88 (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:24:26 EDT (#)
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Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:22:45 (#)
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"By unspoken yet tacit agreement"
Redundant.""
yeah shoulda been 'by unspoken, tacit agreement'.
Submitted by Magicaddict (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:22:51 EDT (#)
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UM season. Gotta love it.
Submitted by Circe (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:22:45 EDT (#)
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"By unspoken yet tacit agreement"
Redundant.
Submitted by Sphagnum (user info) at 2006-09-19 12:22:12 EDT (#)
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WERD!
To your mother...