Grueberfest 06: The Shrine of the Ancients (565 hits)
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (View user info) at 2006-10-11 00:22:42 EDT
10.22.06 18:49
Parker seems to think that this find is going to make us rich and famous. Keeps saying something about Indiana Jones, or some such nonsense. "Fortune and glory," I think. Yeah, that's it. "Fortune and glory." Didn't Short Round say that?
This place is fantastic. I mean absolutely brilliant. I think the lot of us were a little suspicious when James said he'd found a map. Much eye-rolling and all that. Let me be the first to say it, James: you were right, we were wrong. It's been twelve hours and we're barely done looking over the first antechamber. Rich seems to think it's a mainly 1st century Roman design with elements of Ptolemaic Dynasty Egyptian. Then, he's years out of his college degree. I think we need to get the proper authorities to provide a ruling.
We're going to split up later and see what the rest of this place holds. The climb down here was grueling but this is so worth it. It's vast. VAST.
10.23.06 02:11
No one's going to sleep tonight. How could we?? THIS PLACE IS HUGE! Four teams of two went out walking for over an hour, and we all found ourselves with plenty of ground left to cover. Patty and I made it through four chambers and what we're calling 'the loo' because of all the sculptures of men and women sitting down. Childish, yes, but we're posiively giddy about all this.
Rich isn't sure about this, but he thinks he found some evidence of Pre-Columbian sculpture in a few of the rooms he explored. Said something about incredibly well-preserved Sumerian pottery, too. Everyone can agree on one thing: whenever this place was built, its makers loved statues. They're everywhere.
Parker's calling it "The Shrine of the Ancients" now. I think it's kind of cute, don't you?
10.23.06 15:33
Murph just came by and said he found something strange. Something...odd.
Like an idiot I hurried off to see what it was, and was greeted with his bare ass right in my face.
I hate that Murph.
10.24.06 23:00
I woke up with a start because I thought I heard a shuffling sound nearby. Got everyone up and asked them what they thought it was. We've decided it's just the surf beyond the walls, hitting the rocks and echoing through the rooms. Funny that we weren't able to hear it again.
10.26.06 19:57
FORTUNE AND GLORY! FORTUNE AND GLORY! Nevermind the cultural discovery that this shrine represents, or the great adventure this has been. WE! ARE! RICH! Rich I say! Murph (not bare assed this time) stumbled upon a hidden door in what looks like a throne room, and found a stash of gold and jewelry!!! Lots of idols, chests and crowns. Patty and I particularly like the crowns. Even played princesses for a while before the boys laughed at us and started playing cards with the gold coins. I wonder how much all of this is worth?
I heard the shuffling sound again today. This time in the afternoon. I didn't tell anyone though...they'd just laugh at me.
I hope we have stew or soup tonight. It's getting colder in here.
Oh who am I kidding? I'm just tired of energy bars and trail mix.
10.27.06 07:42
So I wake up this morning and my nose is bleeding? What gives? Isn't that supposed to happen at high altitudes?
Everyone else woke up to bloody pillows and faces too. Maybe an allergen?
We all feel fine. Off exploring shortly. I hope I brought enough socks.
10.27.06 20:00
Parker, Michael, Samantha and Jonesy are dead.
I don't know what else to say. I'm still shaking, and it's been hours. It all happened so fast. In front of all of us.
We'd just split up in half to work out an honest to God map of everything and document the place properly. We'd literally just gone off in different directions when the roof above them collapsed. It was all rock and dust and it just kept coming and coming. The rest of us tried to dig them out. We heard them, muffled, behind the wall of rubble. Then, a shuffling. A sound like a sack being drawn across a gravel road. A shuffling slow and plodding. And their screams. God, their screams.
Then nothing.
Silence.
We've doubled our efforts to dig them out, even though we're terrified of what we may find on the other side. We have no choice now.
Our way out is behind the fucking wall.
10.28.06 04:30
I got my period an hour ago. Patty too.
I just finished my period last week.
The bleeding is heavy. I don't understand it.
Patty's crying and rocking in the corner. I'll be back.
10.28.06 06:21
Patty's dead. I thought maybe she bled to death from her period or something. Turns out she slit her wrists with the edge
of one of the little statues. The little bloody god looks funny between her legs, all stained in red.
You know, for a second I thought I saw it smile at me. And I thought it was beautiful.
10.28.06 14:10
Murph, Rich and I are going to try to find another way out. This place can only be so big, and there's bound to be another entrance. It's just a goddamn glorified cave after all.
We're not taking any of the gold. For some reason, we're just not. Every time I touch it I think of Patty. And the rest of them.
10.28.06 14:15
Scratch that. We're going later. The three of us heard that noise again, from beyond the end of the passageway we were following. There's no way we're walking TOWARDS that sound. I don't care if it's just a big rat. I want a knife or an axe or something. I told them I won't go with them without one. They agreed that going armed may be the safest bet. In fact, we're just going to pack up and take all of our stuff.
10.28.06 17:00
Off we go. Wish us luck.
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[unintelligible] the sound grew closer and it was behind us and before us all at once and i felt wet below my nose and tasted something thick and salty and [unintelligible] for help but Murph wasn't able to [unintelligible] tentacles from the dark [unintelligible] too many red eyes in the shadows [unintelligible] ripped to death [unintelligible] the chanting from lips I never saw move, the counting why the counting???? what language are they speaking?? whywhywhywhywhywhy [unintelligible] back to the room with the sitting gods [unintelligible] the shuffling's coming again [unintelligible] the blood my blood their blood your blood [unintelligible] for us sinners now and at the hour of our [unintelligible] no you are beautiful too beautiful for me [unintelligible] nonononononononononononnnnnnnn
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User Reviews
Submitted by Arizhel (user info) at 2006-10-11 23:53:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Nice. I really enjoyed reading this.
Submitted by JMG114 (user info) at 2006-10-11 19:41:21 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Awesome. Well done with a tough title.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2006-10-11 18:54:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2006-10-11 18:26:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
*Montgomery Burns voice*
How perfectly Lovecraftian of you, sir. Excellent.
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-10-11 13:24:09 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i liked the juvenile touch of the bare ass in the face wake up call.
Submitted by HotWillie (user info) at 2006-10-11 13:18:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
No Comment
Submitted by Jack_McCallum (user info) at 2006-10-11 12:42:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:56:29 (#)
Ranking: 2
God fucking damn it, replace every "shoot" with "shot".
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Nice to see the illuminated keyboard is working so well for you...
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-10-11 11:56:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Fucking ACE.
Submitted by Axolotl (user info) at 2006-10-11 10:12:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
LotR
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-10-11 09:15:46 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Holy shit, you DIDN'T write a poem!
This was great.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-10-11 02:35:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I'm sorry dude, I didn't read it.
I'm just giving you a +2 before I bail for a while.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-10-11 01:20:49 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Why do I talk like a Cockney in your little story, too?
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-10-11 01:04:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Pants as in panting. You know when you are breathing heavily?
That's it stagger you're on my list now.
And I do seem to write most of my mini adventures about ghola don't I? I need to diversify. She is just the easiest person to write in an exaggerated role.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-10-11 01:01:11 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
What, you've never met a girl with apparent pants?
Way to outdo me in a review, Voltage.
(I love these little mini ghola adventures)
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-10-11 01:00:27 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Her pants and labored breathing were apparent, meaning that she was doing it loudly and in the open. Uncontrollably.
You don't know how this works do you? I write up a little POS story that goes with the reviews, people say "OMG SUZIE Q THAT IS AWESOME" and then we all shut the fuck up about it.
It's not Faulkner. Ass.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:58:03 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Also... "her pants were apparent"? Que?
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:56:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
God fucking damn it, replace every "shoot" with "shot".
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:54:29 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The Aussie slurs I can stand. But Rush mixed tape? Aw, hell no.
Submitted by HighVoltage900 (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:52:08 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Ghola dropped down the flight of stairs and landed off-balance dropping to her knee. Her pants and labored breathing were apparent as she looked up at Stagger and finally felt it. She finally felt fear.
"Bloody ole good show then but 'ou ought to know 'our in a bit of a sticky wicket 'an't you?" Stagger said. He is Australian.
"What?" Ghola asked.
"I'm Australian so I talk funny about koalas and stuff. And I once shoot a kangaroo because it didn't give me a ride in it's pouch."
"Isn't that illegal?"
"Probably." Stagger said before going on the attack again. He jumped down the flight of stairs with the shrine as background behind him. It was that shoot that Tom Cruise really could have used in The Last Samurai if he wasn't a stupid douche.
Ghola was missing something, she was slower and weaker than before and Stagger took his chance. His blade flashed in the night as she gasped as she felt it penetrate. Pentrate deep into her....
*snicker* I said penetrate.
"You are finished." Stagger said as ghola fell weakly to one knee.
"No... I... *cough* I refuse to die to you.... I can't even... *cough* I can't..." Ghola gasped as she fell to the floor and lay there starring up at the sky and feeling the life drain out of her.
Stagger turned to her and watched as she slipped into unconsciousness and then... death. He grinned. That would teach that bitch for not returning his Rush mixed tape.
(Also the story was good)
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:45:05 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I like stories that are in log format as well. It gives authenticity to it. All in all, very enjoyable and engrossing.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:38:44 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Perhaps her ninja quickness is getting a little rusty.
Now is the time to strike.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:28:07 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I read 29 seconds faster than ghola.
Submitted by ghola (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:27:16 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
No Comment
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-10-11 00:26:47 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Reminded me a lot of Neil Gaiman. Journal entry style is hard to do and I think you pulled it off, well done.