Grueberfest 06: The Brutality Waltz (430 hits)
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Submitted by Orgasmatron (View user info) at 2006-10-19 00:15:29 EDT
She is so beautiful, I'll make her beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one
Yes she is beautiful, soon she'll be beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one
As the strings rise and fall my hands slowly withdraw
The small pliers secured by the side of the case,
Both her eyes, white and wide, quickly dart side to side
And the blood starts to drain from her innocent face.
But she's safely secured and cannot say not a word
For the speculum's open, her mouth's opened wide,
Still her tongue flaps about and she's trying to shout,
Then she hushes as soon as the tool's placed inside.
Such a faint little 'clack' as around white the black
Of the pliers surrounds an incisor with ease,
There's a flick of my wrist, and I'm starting to twist,
And a current of red slowly drowns out her screams.
"Hush my dear," I exclaim, "become one with the pain,"
Now she's crying, her tears running warm down her cheek,
Mixing now with the blood, water thinning the flood
Falling down to her breasts in a series of streaks.
She is so beautiful, I'll make her beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one
Yes she is beautiful, soon she'll be beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one.
Now the three quarter time runs its beat through my mind
And I set down the pliers and give her a grin,
Then she watches me pick up a hammer and lick
Her blood off of my fingers before I begin.
With a swing and a shake the first blow quickly breaks
Her left kneecap, she shrieks but the music persists,
As again and again till I've counted to ten
And the bones turn to dust by the fall of my fist.
With the claw on its back her two feet I attack
Tearing tendons and ripping the flesh with each chop,
Ten toes pepper the floor, and I need to do more
For the movements continue and won't let me stop.
She is so beautiful, I'll make her beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one
Yes she is beautiful, soon she'll be beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one.
Through her beautiful hands I drive nails as I stand
To replace the used hammer and hoist up the saw,
And it circles and cries, sliding right through her thighs
As her arteries open I'm stunned, filled with awe.
There's blood down to my hips and a smile on my lips
When my finger a screwdriver draws from the case,
Through her eye till it stops the tip slams, with a pop
The once crystalline ball is removed from her face.
She is so beautiful, I'll make her beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one
Yes she is beautiful, soon she'll be beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one.
The beat's still in my head and I know that she's dead
But my fists work her over and turn her face blue,
And I'm beating, and beating, and beating, and beating,
The music is rising and falling, repeating,
And beating, and beating, and beating, and beating,
I love you, my darling, I honestly do,
And beating, and beating, and beating, and beating,
My beautiful girl, I've birthed you anew,
And beating, and beating, and beating, and beating,
The music is over.
You are so beautiful, I've made you beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one
Yes you are beautiful, now you are beautiful
One, two, three, one, two, three, one, two, three, one.
User Reviews
Submitted by inion_de_trua (user info) at 2006-10-20 13:57:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
i really really REALLY wanna ask your girlfriend how she feels about these.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-10-19 22:06:19 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Submitted by ColchesterDr (user info) at 2006-10-19 20:26:04 (#)
Ranking: 0
Didn't cars for this as much as the other entries.
Sorry.
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I assume you're going to review the other entries before the deadline?
Submitted by ColchesterDr (user info) at 2006-10-19 20:26:04 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
Didn't cars for this as much as the other entries.
Sorry.
Submitted by Sacrilicious (user info) at 2006-10-19 19:58:54 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I do not know how your girlfriend does it.
I think this works really well. It's like a sweet little diary entry for a serial killer, and it flows just as a waltz should.
And creative use of a speculum- BONUS.
What a great title you got, and what a clever piece you wrote to go with it.
Submitted by Anansie (user info) at 2006-10-19 17:16:02 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I almost didn't finish this.
Submitted by HotWillie (user info) at 2006-10-19 16:11:18 EDT (#)
Ranking: 1
Cute and creepy.
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-10-19 12:43:50 EDT (#)
Ranking: 0
All I wanted to do with the numbers was reference the 3/4 time beat that he (or is it she? DUN DUN DUN) would have in his (or is it her? DUN DUN DUN) head.
When I was first kicking around ideas I considered setting to music whatever I'd eventually write, but that proved to be far too ambitious this week.
Submitted by goferforhire (user info) at 2006-10-19 12:39:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The numbers kind of don't work for me, but the imbetween business is far too good for me to subtract from it. You really are good.
Submitted by Susie_Derkins (user info) at 2006-10-19 12:24:53 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Thank you for the musical appetite supressant.
Submitted by Amontillado (user info) at 2006-10-19 09:11:34 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2006-10-19 00:33:55 (#)
Ranking: 2
Poetry for serial killers is the impression this gave me
Submitted by CaptainThorns (user info) at 2006-10-19 09:06:35 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Rip, two, three!
Slice, two, three!
Gut, two, three!
Hack, two, three!
EVERYBODY CHARLIE BROWN!
Submitted by sicosemen (user info) at 2006-10-19 08:13:26 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
I saw some numbers and numbers fucking make me high on life.
Submitted by kaos-king (user info) at 2006-10-19 06:16:28 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
**sigh**
I hate you.
Submitted by JoeyG (user info) at 2006-10-19 03:00:43 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Sheer, sheer class. This was extremely good.
Submitted by Stagger_Lee (user info) at 2006-10-19 01:37:59 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
The chorus to this is tailor-made to be a drinking song.
Submitted by forensicgirl3 (user info) at 2006-10-19 00:33:55 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Poetry for serial killers is the impression this gave me
Submitted by Orgasmatron (user info) at 2006-10-19 00:23:38 EDT (#)
Ranking: -2
Hopfuly ther arint ney speling erurz. Ah dednt czeck caus eye roet iht ann'd poested az sun az ayh woz dunne.
Balls all that misspelling was tough to do.
Submitted by Bigmike (user info) at 2006-10-19 00:19:12 EDT (#)
Ranking: 2
Groovy.
Like the tempo of this.